Lucia's Violin
This is a rhymed poem.42 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Beautiful dream-like quality to an inspired verse with variations of stanzas and rhyme patterns, perhaps imitating the flow of the concert's music. The imagery throughout is superb and, at times, breath-taking and I particularly enjoyed the swirling, whirling dance of life and the yearning for the music never to stop. Well done and good luck in the contest, Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Beautiful dream-like quality to an inspired verse with variations of stanzas and rhyme patterns, perhaps imitating the flow of the concert's music. The imagery throughout is superb and, at times, breath-taking and I particularly enjoyed the swirling, whirling dance of life and the yearning for the music never to stop. Well done and good luck in the contest, Debbie
Comment Written 11-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Hello Debbie. Sorry for the late response; I've been off the site for awhile. Thank you for the excellent detailed review for my poem based on a violin concert. It's a bit like a musical ekphrastic poem. I pleased you noted the imagery as that it what I consider to be the heart of a poem. I appreciate the encouraging comments and the good luck wishes very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from tfawcus
Marvellously atmospheric. There are echoes of Last Year in Marienbad in this. I like the rhythm and find it quite haunting. Very much enjoyed. Another poem of quality from the pen of the master!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Marvellously atmospheric. There are echoes of Last Year in Marienbad in this. I like the rhythm and find it quite haunting. Very much enjoyed. Another poem of quality from the pen of the master!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Hello Tony. Thank you for the complimentary comments and the shiny stars. I'm pleased you noted the rhythm and atmosphere of the poem. I guess you could call the style a musical ekphrastic.
I had to look up Last Year in Marienbad. In 1961, I was still in high school.
I appreciate the encouraging comments very much.
Best wishes to all.
Robert
Comment from PoemsOfDD
I am a bit late in my reviewing but I'm so glad I was able to pop in and read this rhymed poem for the contest. It is beautifully written... and sad. One cannot turn back the hands of time, pause them or slow them down. We just slow down and fade. I like the beat of 6-6-10 syllables and the lasting impression this poem has left. So worthy of a six shower and win!
And yet I can't let go, those thoughts of long ago,
The memory of when my soul was kissed.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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I am a bit late in my reviewing but I'm so glad I was able to pop in and read this rhymed poem for the contest. It is beautifully written... and sad. One cannot turn back the hands of time, pause them or slow them down. We just slow down and fade. I like the beat of 6-6-10 syllables and the lasting impression this poem has left. So worthy of a six shower and win!
And yet I can't let go, those thoughts of long ago,
The memory of when my soul was kissed.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hello DD.Thank you for the marvelous review and rating for my poem of Lucia?s Violin. I'm glad you enjoyed the cadence and the theme, though it is a bit sad. I, for one, am certainly slowing down, but I'm not ready to fade just yet. :) I appreciate the encouraging comments and the six stars very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
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Robert, the poem touched a spot wholeheartedly. The six should have been more. ~Diana xox
Comment from karenina
So wistful and endearing. Your poem brought me to YouTube to listen to this wonderful musical artist. I listened to : Lucia Micarelli - Gabriel's Oboe - Ennio Morricone. Pristine, transfromative... As is your poem. The very best music evokes such emotions in us. The very best of poetry again touches our souls. You've done that...
Karenina
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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So wistful and endearing. Your poem brought me to YouTube to listen to this wonderful musical artist. I listened to : Lucia Micarelli - Gabriel's Oboe - Ennio Morricone. Pristine, transfromative... As is your poem. The very best music evokes such emotions in us. The very best of poetry again touches our souls. You've done that...
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hello Karenina.Thank you for the marvelous review and rating for my poem of Lucia?s Violin. I'm glad you enjoyed the theme and the connection to the music. Gabriel's Oboe was part of the concert. One of the best performances of that piece I've heard. This was the first time I've written a poem based upon a musical concert. A bit like a musical ekphrastic. I appreciate the encouraging comments and the six stars very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
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I thought the same thing! "A musical ekphrastic!" So glad your powerful poem brought me to her performance!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Robert,
Out of sixes; this offering deserves far more.
How I appreciate the flow of your exceptionally well-crafted poetic offering.
There is a "Poe-esque" (Is there such an adjective?) feeling in your poem - a melancholy sadness that longs for "The memory of when my soul was kissed."
A lovely presentation that begs to be read aloud...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hello, Robert,
Out of sixes; this offering deserves far more.
How I appreciate the flow of your exceptionally well-crafted poetic offering.
There is a "Poe-esque" (Is there such an adjective?) feeling in your poem - a melancholy sadness that longs for "The memory of when my soul was kissed."
A lovely presentation that begs to be read aloud...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hello Diane.Thank you for the excellent review and rating for my poem of Lucia?s Violin. I'm glad you enjoyed the theme and the "Poe-esque" feeling of the poem. I don't think anyone has used that description before. :) Pleased you liked the presentation too. I appreciate the encouraging comments and the stars very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from Faith Williams
There is nothing like one form of art to inspire another. Your poem is beautiful, Robert, though tinged with a thread of sadness. The imagery throughout is breathtaking. Having read it several times, I think my favorite lines are,
'But as the vision fades,
Emotion soon cascades,
And leaves me with a yearning deep inside.
For time has traced a line,
A chill runs down my spine,
As fate has drawn me to this ebbing tide.
Your rhyme scheme is lovely, and way beyond anything I could do. I think I will keep my pitiful attempt to myself. I'm not much for writing rhyme anyway.
Thank you so much for sharing your amazing poem. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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There is nothing like one form of art to inspire another. Your poem is beautiful, Robert, though tinged with a thread of sadness. The imagery throughout is breathtaking. Having read it several times, I think my favorite lines are,
'But as the vision fades,
Emotion soon cascades,
And leaves me with a yearning deep inside.
For time has traced a line,
A chill runs down my spine,
As fate has drawn me to this ebbing tide.
Your rhyme scheme is lovely, and way beyond anything I could do. I think I will keep my pitiful attempt to myself. I'm not much for writing rhyme anyway.
Thank you so much for sharing your amazing poem. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hello Faith.Thank you for the marvelous review and rating for my poem of Lucia?s Violin. I'm glad you enjoyed the cadence and rhymes, as well as the theme. Thanks too for noting your favorite lines. It is always good to learn what resonate with the reader. I appreciate the encouraging comments and the best wishes very much.
Best wishes to you..
Robert
Comment from w.j.debi
Wow. I've read this several times. First to just enjoy the story, second to analyze the rhyming scheme--very creative, and then again just to enjoy the smooth meter.
This will be hard to beat in the contest. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Wow. I've read this several times. First to just enjoy the story, second to analyze the rhyming scheme--very creative, and then again just to enjoy the smooth meter.
This will be hard to beat in the contest. Best of luck.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hello Debi.Thank you for the marvelous review and rating for my poem of Lucia?s Violin. I'm glad you enjoyed the cadence and rhyme scheme, as well as the theme. Thanks too for reading it several times; some barely read once. :) I appreciate the encouraging comments and the best of luck wishes very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from Julie Lau
A masterly-written poem rendering lots of atmosphere and an interesting and very effective format. The pairs of three-line verses are followed by one of four lines which seems to act the way a chorus would in a song: I feel that these words would take very well to being put to music. Best of luck in the competition. Julie Lau
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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A masterly-written poem rendering lots of atmosphere and an interesting and very effective format. The pairs of three-line verses are followed by one of four lines which seems to act the way a chorus would in a song: I feel that these words would take very well to being put to music. Best of luck in the competition. Julie Lau
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hello Julie.Thank you for the wonderful review and rating for my poem of Lucia?s Violin. I'm glad you enjoyed the cadence, rhymes and rhythm. I appreciate the encouraging comments and the best luck wishes stars very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Such a melancholy beauty to this poem. It has a meter and rhyme format that I don't think I've previously seen but it works fantastically well and I found it to be very fresh. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Such a melancholy beauty to this poem. It has a meter and rhyme format that I don't think I've previously seen but it works fantastically well and I found it to be very fresh. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hello Charles.Thank you for the excellent review and rating for my poem of Lucia?s Violin. I'm glad you enjoyed the cadence and rhyme scheme. I appreciate the encouraging comments and the good luck wishes very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from June Sargent
Absolutely beautiful! You captured your feelings of longing for days of long ago with well-chosen words that flowed with perfect rhythm and rhyme. Much like the violin concerto. The imagery with sight, sound and touch took the reader down memory lane with you. Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Absolutely beautiful! You captured your feelings of longing for days of long ago with well-chosen words that flowed with perfect rhythm and rhyme. Much like the violin concerto. The imagery with sight, sound and touch took the reader down memory lane with you. Well done!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hello June.Thank you for the marvelous review and rating for my poem of Lucia?s Violin. I'm glad you enjoyed the cadence and theme. Thanks for noting the various sense used to convey emotion. I appreciate the encouraging comments and the six stars very much.
Best wishes.
Robert