Ghost
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Becoming more..."Biography/Supernatural
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Comment from Mario PIERRE
Your story Chapter is very well constructed and flows well throughout. I got quite a few goosebumps along the way too!! I will make sure to read the prior chapter to grasp the full story!
Good job!!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
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Your story Chapter is very well constructed and flows well throughout. I got quite a few goosebumps along the way too!! I will make sure to read the prior chapter to grasp the full story!
Good job!!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
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Thank you Mario so glad you enjoyed it feel free to take a look around at your leisure. Thank you for your kind review and for your time and for your insight. I appreciate it very much! Hope you have a grand evening!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is quite a shocking and disarming account of your apparitions following your stay in hospital. They frighten the reader let alone yourself alone in the house. Your story is told almost impassively and as an onlooker such I think is your determination to develop that thick skin and defeat those visions that might otherwise send you over the top. Such courage and fortitude are incredibly impressive. I have no doubt that writing about these events is all part of your therapy, catharsis and recovery. I wish you all the best both in your work and this contest. Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
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This is quite a shocking and disarming account of your apparitions following your stay in hospital. They frighten the reader let alone yourself alone in the house. Your story is told almost impassively and as an onlooker such I think is your determination to develop that thick skin and defeat those visions that might otherwise send you over the top. Such courage and fortitude are incredibly impressive. I have no doubt that writing about these events is all part of your therapy, catharsis and recovery. I wish you all the best both in your work and this contest. Debbie
Comment Written 04-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
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Debbie you are so thoughtful and insightful I appreciate you very much! Many things are difficult to write about It sometimes takes me a while between chapters. The whole feelings come up this part that you have read came after I attempted to not be part of this world. Changes in my mind came as soon as I came out of a coma Still evolves to this day things I could never do before I do now. things i've never seen felt, heard or touched I do now. Like a lamppost in the dark where a noble light existed before. To this day I discover abilities i've never had before. People always ask me how I know things and why so I wrote the story called ghost this being one of the chapters however there's much more that comes. Before that with time filling in the blanks. I was a ghost you see for a very long time. And then for one minute and 9 seconds my heart stopped and I was a real ghost. I don't remember much about being dead but I do remember. What happened the second eye of my eyes and everything since. The song it's crazy I believe it's subjective and personal to each individual. Thank you so much for your kind review. You are very wise appreciate that you can see everything so clearly. Thank you so much for your time and your review
I wish you were grand evening!
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You're very welcome Lea! Just a tiny edit I forgot to say - the Amish man's (moustache) - you missed out an 'o' Take care x
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Perfect thank you!
Comment from JT traveller
The chalk board is a recurring theme. I enjoyed the intensity of your write. Just a small suggestion, "movue", movie. We are all trying to figure this thing called life out. Jacqueline xx
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2023
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The chalk board is a recurring theme. I enjoyed the intensity of your write. Just a small suggestion, "movue", movie. We are all trying to figure this thing called life out. Jacqueline xx
Comment Written 01-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2023
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Yes I carry that Chalkboard in my head every day it's necessity really to make sure i'm not completely bonkers! Lol.
Thank you again for your review and for your kind comments. I thank you also for your time as always I hope you are doing well and you are settled in your new destination. Be well and stay safe with your travels!
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
The hospital was n a different contest or was a different contest on the hospital. I'm trying to figure that out. What a whirlwind in which you've been living.Thank goodness your ability to write is in tact. People who see or hear things apart from this world,' s realities, are not crazy, they are survivors. You are a survivor. Best wishes to you!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2023
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The hospital was n a different contest or was a different contest on the hospital. I'm trying to figure that out. What a whirlwind in which you've been living.Thank goodness your ability to write is in tact. People who see or hear things apart from this world,' s realities, are not crazy, they are survivors. You are a survivor. Best wishes to you!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2023
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Thank you Alexandra I appreciate your comments very much! This Is a continuance of the story of when I woke up in the hospital in ICU. This one you have just read is picking up from when I left the hospital and returning home again. I do thank you for your insight too and for your kind review. I am very much appreciative I hope you are having a wonderful evening and thank you again!
Comment from karenina
I sensed from very early readings of your work, that you had a blossoming prose writer waiting to explode onto the scene. There is no substitute for honesty in writing. Even our fictional characters are drawn from our life experiences. I am so very sorry you have gone through this... We must remember that there is a light... One more dawn, just one more and we're through!
(I've lost five family members to suicide, and this, my new writer friend, is a moving, emotional write!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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I sensed from very early readings of your work, that you had a blossoming prose writer waiting to explode onto the scene. There is no substitute for honesty in writing. Even our fictional characters are drawn from our life experiences. I am so very sorry you have gone through this... We must remember that there is a light... One more dawn, just one more and we're through!
(I've lost five family members to suicide, and this, my new writer friend, is a moving, emotional write!)
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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I'm so sorry for your loss. I can truly understand and commiserate with that as I peer through the same glasses.
Thank you I've entered another phone contacts that's the 1st time novel. I believe it's called I'm gonna write out my experiences. It is I have bitten quite a bit already just have to show anyone. I'm gonna put it out there and see what people think a lot of it is crazy and believable. And believe me I think I'm a bit nuts myself on occasion but maybe that's the way it should be thank you so much again you are very insightful and compassionate thank you so much!
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Oh, great! Are you entering it as a chapter by chapter novel? There is a way to do that... I agree with what you say in your portfolio comments. Writing is very therapeutic. Those who've had trauma in their lives can benefit greatly by "Bleeding onto the page."
Comment from Julie Lau
Lea, wow! I feel I really understand you now via similar experiences I and people close to me have had: my late partner saw shadow people throughout the house, even sitting on the toilet preventing him using it. A girl I shared a house with saw a person who had been murdered a century earlier... I feel for you, but how wonderful that you have such a marvellous ability to describe it all in such an honest, straight-forward way. I admire you tremendously! Stay strong and please keep writing; a biography like yours will be extremely valuable in helping science understand the workings of the mind. All kudos to you,
Julie Lau
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Lea, wow! I feel I really understand you now via similar experiences I and people close to me have had: my late partner saw shadow people throughout the house, even sitting on the toilet preventing him using it. A girl I shared a house with saw a person who had been murdered a century earlier... I feel for you, but how wonderful that you have such a marvellous ability to describe it all in such an honest, straight-forward way. I admire you tremendously! Stay strong and please keep writing; a biography like yours will be extremely valuable in helping science understand the workings of the mind. All kudos to you,
Julie Lau
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Thank you to your later very kind review and for your insight. It makes me feel like I'm not alone. I appreciate that very veryou have no idea how maybe you do. Thank you for your very kind review as well and for your 6 stars. I am eternally grateful and honored like thank you for that. Yeah. I intend to keep writing. I hope that you know people find interest in it and I'll see as straight as I can. In my profile it has the account of my hospital's day. It's called becoming you might find that interesting as well it's a origin how it began. Thank you again so much for the really good rating. I appreciate it so very much and I hope you have a wonderful day and I look forward to seeing more of your very talented writing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am sorry that you had this traumatic experience of attempting to commit suicide and this was a plea for help and seems to have reset your brain as you are glad that you have had a second chance at life. It also sounds like you have been left with some apparitions and may need some help with them so that you can live in peace. You write is honest and terrifying, well expressed and very melancholy Lea. I hope you continue to be positive about your life, bless you, love Dolly x x x
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Distinct is spelt like this (Distinct) x x x
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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I am sorry that you had this traumatic experience of attempting to commit suicide and this was a plea for help and seems to have reset your brain as you are glad that you have had a second chance at life. It also sounds like you have been left with some apparitions and may need some help with them so that you can live in peace. You write is honest and terrifying, well expressed and very melancholy Lea. I hope you continue to be positive about your life, bless you, love Dolly x x x
PS.
Distinct is spelt like this (Distinct) x x x
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Thank you Dolly.... I have learned very much in the last few years. I think I was meant to do things that are different but just wasn't Ready for it no I decided I am.
And thank you for your wonderful review and the stars. I appreciate it and glad you find meeting in my writing. Thank you again so very much i'm honored!
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You are most welcome and your writing will be cathartic and healing x x x
