Lessons Learned and Spiritual
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "On the Bright Side"Do good and feel good poems
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Comment from Lea Tonin1
This is a very well written poem I love the layout you've chosen as well. It's quite spectacular and catches the eye.
Your rhyming is also quite good as well. I could follow along with what you were writing without interruption always good.
Your problem speaks to me about things that people go through on a daily basis. Many people do that makes us not alone as we can understand one another. If I might make a small suggestion? I was looking at the flow of your Palm by reading it out to myself. For the most part it's quite good just like to perhaps abbreviate one word on your bottom stanza. Last line consider changing "you will" to "you'll" Only if that as your poem is quite lovely the way it is. I thank you for sharing and I hope you have a great evening!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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This is a very well written poem I love the layout you've chosen as well. It's quite spectacular and catches the eye.
Your rhyming is also quite good as well. I could follow along with what you were writing without interruption always good.
Your problem speaks to me about things that people go through on a daily basis. Many people do that makes us not alone as we can understand one another. If I might make a small suggestion? I was looking at the flow of your Palm by reading it out to myself. For the most part it's quite good just like to perhaps abbreviate one word on your bottom stanza. Last line consider changing "you will" to "you'll" Only if that as your poem is quite lovely the way it is. I thank you for sharing and I hope you have a great evening!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Hi Lea, thank you so much for your lovely review and kind comments.
I do appreciate it very much! I did look at the last line and yes it would work, but in order for me to stay on meter I better keep it that way..
I always accept good feedback, so thank you again, my sweet friend.
I was reading a little of your profile because I always love to welcome new members so I look forward to reading some of your work. I'm not reviewing much right now, as I am waiting to have a couple eye surgeries this Spring.
However you are definitely a woman after my own heart. After a rough childhood and teenage years of rape and molestations I have written many things that I considered to be healing of the soul, because when you write it is for you, but when you share, they come out of the woodwork to say that they have been thru it too. It truly is a great feeling. I know you have been here since January, but welcome Lea & I look forward to getting to know you better in the near future.
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Thank you Debi for your warm welcome! Much appreciated! Good to meet you! I quite enjoyed your work and thank you for your insight especially. Have a great day!
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading this poem. It is very thought provoking. I can relate to your sentiments. I love your artwork and presentation. It is very artistic.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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I really enjoyed reading this poem. It is very thought provoking. I can relate to your sentiments. I love your artwork and presentation. It is very artistic.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
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Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Hi Jen, I thank you so very much for your kindness for my Bright Side Poem and always being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated.
