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Do good and feel good poems

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Comment from nomi338
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Beautiful. You have described the story of my life. My life has been balanced between setbacks and triumphs. From the setbacks I have learned and gained humility. From the triumphs I have learned and gained the value of faith. Through it all, I have become so much stronger. I am firmly convinced that God does exist and that he loves me. Now what can be better than that?

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
    Hello dear Nolan, I know you had a tough life too and though that makes me sad, I always see the benefit of how you fought to be a better man, in spite of. You are an amazing man and I am proud to call you my big brother.

    I thank you so very much for your kindness for my Bright Side Poem and always being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated.
Comment from mermaids
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You have a smooth poetic flow of words and lines that tell a story here. I think most of us can relate to a week of everything going wrong but turning to God is the answer. The blue and red colors add to the flow of your words. "Then God and family should come first" is a great line.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
    Hi Sweet Elaine, I thank you so very much for your kindness for my Bright Side Poem and always being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
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You did an excellent job of showing with your words how the bright side of every problem or difficulty lies in praying and trusting God. Kenzie's picture illustrates it well. Hugs!

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
    Hello my dear Verna, I thank you so very much for your kindness for my Bright Side Poem and always being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated.
Comment from Terry Broxson
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Debi, I do love the way you presented the poem. The rhyme pattern is creative, and the color scheme works well together. The message is outstanding. Maybe, "being on the bright side" is not original...but you are an original. Terry.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
    Thank you Terry for your very kind review and comments for the poem, and even more so for the other comments. I do appreciate the six stars too. That means the world to me, dear friend.
Comment from Sally Law
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Beautifully penned and illustrated poem with an encouraging message. Yes we'll have these trying things and I'm so glad that we have the encouragement of friends and family and our God. Thank you for sharing this with us, as you may have had these experiences in your own life or know someone who had them. I think the real stuff make for the best writing and is praise worthy. Sending you my very best today as always and six stars to bless.
Love,
Sally XOs

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
    Hello Mis Sally Marie, I just thank you with all my heart for the wonderful review and the six stars that you have honored me with. You are so sweet and kind.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
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This is a challenge - to maintain two rhyming schemes to indicate opposite moods! The font and layout certainly help here! It is a good motto but sometimes hard to follow!

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
    Hi Miss Sarah, I thank you so very much for your kindness for my Bright Side Poem and always being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated.
Comment from royowen
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One can have times like that, when nothing goes right, when all you can trust in is the solidity of family, and the absolute trustworthiness of God Himself, quite often only He knows what's going on, and can steer the ship home. This is beautifully written Debi dear, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
    Hello dear Roy, I thank you so very much for your kindness for my Bright Side Poem and always being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated.
reply by royowen on 06-Mar-2023
    Well done
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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We have days like this occasionally Debi, a chaotic and confused time here. Love the colours, the sentiment and the metre. You alternate the end rhymes in alternative stanzas which is different and I think it interrupts the flow, but this is up to you, perhaps this adds to the chaos of the day?

Just one suggestion for the sake of meter and emphasis on (God) rather than (And)

(then) God and (fam'ly) should come first

Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
    I appreciate your feedback a lot Dolly, as I was trying something different and calling it a Merry-go-Rhyme. It's just something I have been wanting to try with a poem that one stanza kind of answers the other. I took a chance on using two different rhyme patterns, colors and fonts. Just something different, but I have to agree, it might be a bit too much. I wondered about that when I did it, but thought I would see what others thought. So thank you so much for that. Also I will gladly take your suggestion.for that line, and I appreciate your comments about my meter, more than you could know. Lol, I have been listening to you and working on it. You have made my day, so thanks my dear dear friend!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
    I appreciate your feedback a lot Dolly, as I was trying something different and calling it a Merry-go-Rhyme. It's just something I have been wanting to try with a poem that one stanza kind of answers the other. I took a chance on using two different rhyme patterns, colors and fonts. Just something different, but I have to agree, it might be a bit too much. I wondered about that when I did it, but thought I would see what others thought. So thank you so much for that. Also I will gladly take your suggestion.for that line, and I appreciate your comments about my meter, more than you could know. Lol, I have been listening to you and working on it. You have made my day, so thanks my dear dear friend!
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 05-Mar-2023
    You are most welcome Debi x
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I like this style, Debi, Merry~go~Rhyme it's fabulous!!

Now your words, they do fit this form perfectly, the emotions of each stanza do stand out. This lady seems to be going through the worst of times, marriage on the rocks. The man is going through a bad patch at work, then their child is hurt. What person wouldn't feel down in the dumps? But, and this is where the positive side comes in. There IS a bright side to life, and it WILL come again, it always does when we least expect it. Very well done with this fabulous poem, my friend, and glorious presentation. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
    Hello my Sweet Sandra, I thank you so very much for your kindness for my Bright Side Poem and always being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated.
Comment from Wendy G
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Lovely poem, facing real- life situations and recognising the realities of difficult experiences but also offering hope if we can adopt an optimistic perspective. Very nice.
Wendy

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
    Thanks Wendy, how kind of you. Since this one is the first that I have written of this style, I know you will tell me; but I have been wanting to do something different and call it a merry_go-rhyme. So I used two different rhyme patterns, 2 colors and 2 fonts all to show the difference in emotions in every other stanzas. Do you think it was too much? I respect your opinion so much, but like I said it's the first one, so it's best I find out now if it works for a poem like this that one stanza answers the one before it?
    Thanks for your lovely comment, my dear friend.
reply by Wendy G on 05-Mar-2023
    To me it works. The "situation- response" format is good, and just as two people have different looks and voices, so does your poem have two coloursand fonts (looks) and two different "voices" reflected in the rhyme pattern. Because you have kept the three situations in the one colour, font, and rhyme and the three responses in the other I think it is okay. If there had been more than two of each I think it would have seemed too scrambled. So yes, I think it is fine. Hope that is reassuring.
    W
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
    Thank you so much Wendy. I certainly appreciate it.