Lucky Eddie
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Lucky Eddie Prolog & Chapter 1"Two lifelong friends face both triumph and tragedy
13 total reviews
Comment from K.I. Betancur
Fantastic! I love your/Kenny's narration, it definitely gives the story a life of its own.
At "Now look at what your putter does," you accidentally left out the ending quotation mark. That doesn't change a thing - 7 chapters later, you're still cranking out hits! Keep it rolling!
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Fantastic! I love your/Kenny's narration, it definitely gives the story a life of its own.
At "Now look at what your putter does," you accidentally left out the ending quotation mark. That doesn't change a thing - 7 chapters later, you're still cranking out hits! Keep it rolling!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much, K.I. I'm happy you found this story!
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I'm happy you wrote this story! Thank YOU!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice work. Well written.
So I guess a score card tells you more than the scores for each hole?
Does it change when the hole gets moved around the green?
I hit a golf ball one time. It went straight. My son said i was a natural.
I smiled and left it at that - retired from the sport while I was on top. How many do that? (smiley face here)
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Nice work. Well written.
So I guess a score card tells you more than the scores for each hole?
Does it change when the hole gets moved around the green?
I hit a golf ball one time. It went straight. My son said i was a natural.
I smiled and left it at that - retired from the sport while I was on top. How many do that? (smiley face here)
Best wishes.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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That's funny. One and done!
Yep, the scorecard gives the par and the yardages for each hole from all the different-colored tees, as well as the handicap for each hole (relative difficulty) for competition and betting purposes. The yardages don't change when the hole is moved. That's what range-finders are for.
Hey, thanks for the good review, Wayne.
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Boy! And I thought you just went out and chased a ball around a big lawn!
Comment from Jay Squires
I didn't know how much I'd missed the characters from your first book, but I did. This takes off very smoothly, once the explanation is given to its being out of order.
That darn Jim Wile actually wrote Lucky Eddie first, [Thanks for the explanation I'd have been asking about. I must say it was very inventively done, Jim!]
If you look at that picture at the top, that's me on the left, [Haaha! you couldn't have picked better than Tab Hunter, whom, by the way, I played ping-pong against in Santa Maria's Rick Rancho, where I worked as a bus-boy and he challenged me to a game while I was cleaning the rec-room. Just an interesting side note]
The use of "alright" in the last paragraph. This word is currently in grammatical flux, as "altogether" used to be "all together". According to today's research, the edge still goes to "all right", though it says that "alright" can be used in dialogue and in informal writing.
This is good, Jim! I downloaded it yesterday when a five was as high as I could go. Sorry, my friend. It's always a good idea to wait until Saturday night to post so the reviewer will be sure to have a six.
Jay
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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I didn't know how much I'd missed the characters from your first book, but I did. This takes off very smoothly, once the explanation is given to its being out of order.
That darn Jim Wile actually wrote Lucky Eddie first, [Thanks for the explanation I'd have been asking about. I must say it was very inventively done, Jim!]
If you look at that picture at the top, that's me on the left, [Haaha! you couldn't have picked better than Tab Hunter, whom, by the way, I played ping-pong against in Santa Maria's Rick Rancho, where I worked as a bus-boy and he challenged me to a game while I was cleaning the rec-room. Just an interesting side note]
The use of "alright" in the last paragraph. This word is currently in grammatical flux, as "altogether" used to be "all together". According to today's research, the edge still goes to "all right", though it says that "alright" can be used in dialogue and in informal writing.
This is good, Jim! I downloaded it yesterday when a five was as high as I could go. Sorry, my friend. It's always a good idea to wait until Saturday night to post so the reviewer will be sure to have a six.
Jay
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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That's very interesting about you and Tab Hunter! Do you happen to recognize Eddie in the middle? (Hint: The picture was from the movie Animal House.)
Thanks for the wonderful review, Jay.
Incidentally, you'll be seeing E.J. again soon, but he is somewhat one-dimensional in this story because he hadn't been developed yet as a full-fledged character of his own at the time I wrote this story. The chapter we are now in, called "The Hustle," will show the full story behind what was quickly summarized by E.J. toward the middle of SCIL.
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I beat Tab Hunter and it pissed him off! No, I don't recognize the other. Something about the shape of his mouth, though, that seems familiar.
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That's funny. Well, he asked for it! The Eddie picture is actor Peter Riegert.
Comment from lyenochka
I was surprised that the character suddenly talked about his writer and Fanstory. Lol. Well, it's good to have that background. But I don't think Kenny should tell Eddie that Abby likes him. I guess he was pretty confident he was going to marry her so maybe he didn't view Eddie as a rival. Anyway, the narrator sounds like a very nice gentleman and smart, too. Now perhaps you might want to put a few notes for any non-golfing readers like what's a handicap. Lol.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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I was surprised that the character suddenly talked about his writer and Fanstory. Lol. Well, it's good to have that background. But I don't think Kenny should tell Eddie that Abby likes him. I guess he was pretty confident he was going to marry her so maybe he didn't view Eddie as a rival. Anyway, the narrator sounds like a very nice gentleman and smart, too. Now perhaps you might want to put a few notes for any non-golfing readers like what's a handicap. Lol.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Normally, those remarks Kenny made about the other story would be in the Author's Notes, but on a lark, I decided to put them in the prolog instead. That will be the only time I have Kenny talk to the audience.
Regarding the golfing terminology, that's a good idea, and I will start doing that.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting beginning to a book. Even a non-golfer understands how lucky Eddie was with that winning shot. Having very recently finished your other book, I wonder if there will be much more taken from it. Aren't these 2 guys in a partnership at the end of the previous book?
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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This is an interesting beginning to a book. Even a non-golfer understands how lucky Eddie was with that winning shot. Having very recently finished your other book, I wonder if there will be much more taken from it. Aren't these 2 guys in a partnership at the end of the previous book?
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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No, it's the other way around. Some Call It Luck took from this one, but there won't be any more except that the small part in SCIL where E.J. summarized the match where he screwed up and helped cause his players to lose, you will see in its entirety in this one. In fact, the current chapter (The Hustle) is where it takes place.
Yes, you remember correctly. These two do team up with Abby and E.J. to build the golf suit, but there is no mention of that in this book. Much of this story takes place after the action in SCIL.
Comment from jmdg1954
A great first chapter, Jim. A good introduction to the characters with some golf mixed in. I look forward to all the remaining chapters as I entered your other book mid-stream.
Cheers to starting at the beginning.
John
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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A great first chapter, Jim. A good introduction to the characters with some golf mixed in. I look forward to all the remaining chapters as I entered your other book mid-stream.
Cheers to starting at the beginning.
John
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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Thank you, John. There will be quite a bit of golf in this one, as it was originally written back in 2016 as primarily a golf story. But I think you'll find it interesting all the same.
Comment from tfawcus
I enjoyed the easy narrative style of this and came away with a vivid first impression of the characters involved. My own golfing days are long gone, but I used to carry a stripped down set of clubs during my C130 flying days and hack around courses all over the world. I particularly remember the 3-hole crushed coral course on Wake Island with oiled sand greens!
I may not be able to review this regularly but will try to drop in from time to time.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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I enjoyed the easy narrative style of this and came away with a vivid first impression of the characters involved. My own golfing days are long gone, but I used to carry a stripped down set of clubs during my C130 flying days and hack around courses all over the world. I particularly remember the 3-hole crushed coral course on Wake Island with oiled sand greens!
I may not be able to review this regularly but will try to drop in from time to time.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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That's terrific, Tony, and thanks for the great review and the stars. I will be providing recaps for any you may miss.
Comment from Kaiku
Pretty engaging stuff. Funny you write another golf story on a long term relationship initiated somewhat through golf. I am teaming up with my friend of nearly 60 years to pursue a golf invention of mine. I happen to be his daughter's Godfather. Such a coincidence.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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Pretty engaging stuff. Funny you write another golf story on a long term relationship initiated somewhat through golf. I am teaming up with my friend of nearly 60 years to pursue a golf invention of mine. I happen to be his daughter's Godfather. Such a coincidence.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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How about that! What is your golf invention? (It's not a golf suit, is it?)
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No but it is a secret for now.
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Got it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This was a good read and I can't wait to read more. I am here for the journey.
I had just started my first job after college as a mechanical engineer, after having moved here from the Midwest about three months earlier. ( paused at the two 'after' Maybe a period after 'engineer.' and a new sentence. 'I moved here ...')
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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This was a good read and I can't wait to read more. I am here for the journey.
I had just started my first job after college as a mechanical engineer, after having moved here from the Midwest about three months earlier. ( paused at the two 'after' Maybe a period after 'engineer.' and a new sentence. 'I moved here ...')
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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Thanks, Barbara. Glad to have you aboard from the beginning. There's a lot more golf in this one, so I hope it keeps your interest.
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You're a good writer, I'm sure it will. I have a person I review constantly, I really don't like the story, but the writing is great. I learn from it. I can put up with a little golf. LOL
Comment from lancellot
So, this is an alternate POV from a the other book written in the second person by Kenny about Eddie. I don't know why I thought Kenny met Abby at a party first. Anyway this is well written. Because you added in the 4th wall breaking to the FanStory audience, I'm assuming this will be a site only book. I expect some unknown revelations and surprises. Eddie is out there.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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So, this is an alternate POV from a the other book written in the second person by Kenny about Eddie. I don't know why I thought Kenny met Abby at a party first. Anyway this is well written. Because you added in the 4th wall breaking to the FanStory audience, I'm assuming this will be a site only book. I expect some unknown revelations and surprises. Eddie is out there.
Good luck.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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You are correct. Kenny did meet Abby at a party first. There are some inconsistencies between the two, including the years. This timeframe is about 12 years prior to the one in SCIL. There are a number of reasons for the inconsistencies you might notice, but they are not that significant, and not worth my going into the reasons for them.
You're correct about its being a site only book, although I did self-publish it on Amazon a while ago just for the hell of it. It didn't cost me a dime to do that, and I never advertised it, so I doubt anyone can find it.
Thanks for the great review and the 6 stars!
