Ancient Art of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Gas lighter"A compilation of poems
15 total reviews
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
I love that you're sharing your pain. It takes courage but it breathes life into your words. "what is this vacuum he left that used to me" - beautiful line. I am sorry for your experience but writing often helps the healing process. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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I love that you're sharing your pain. It takes courage but it breathes life into your words. "what is this vacuum he left that used to me" - beautiful line. I am sorry for your experience but writing often helps the healing process. Well done.
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Thank you Charles for your kind review I appreciate it very much. For your insight especially I thank you for that too just standing. It's a beautiful thing at least one last alone. For your time and you're kind rating a thank you as well
Comment from kahpot
Love the positive start in your words as it takes us through a journey of honesty and what can easily and so often happens as our dream of love slowly awakens to reality, an excellent read, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Love the positive start in your words as it takes us through a journey of honesty and what can easily and so often happens as our dream of love slowly awakens to reality, an excellent read, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Wow thank you so much i'm so appreciative. Your insight in this great actually!
I thank you for your kind words and your great rating and your time is always appreciated by me and thank you for your well wishes. I hope you have a great night!
Comment from royowen
I think the love between a man and a women is not initially love, it's instinctual, and who knows why the magnetism happens, but we are technically the same as the beasts of the field, although God expects us to behave like images of Him, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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I think the love between a man and a women is not initially love, it's instinctual, and who knows why the magnetism happens, but we are technically the same as the beasts of the field, although God expects us to behave like images of Him, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Thank you roy for your insight and for your kind review your comments are much appreciated. Glad you liked my poem I could see through the writing have yourself a great day!
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Well done
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This poem uses the poetic technique of repetition in the phrase 'what is this' in each line until the end. I think you have some intriguing phrases like 'the gaze of centuries.' I noticed another reviewer suggested disillusionment instead of dissolutionment.
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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This poem uses the poetic technique of repetition in the phrase 'what is this' in each line until the end. I think you have some intriguing phrases like 'the gaze of centuries.' I noticed another reviewer suggested disillusionment instead of dissolutionment.
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Thank you so much yes I've made the change to the disillusionment. I appreciate it everything every reviewer says to me I take seriously. Share thoughts again and your ideas are welcome here once again. I thank you for your review have a great day!
Comment from Jim Wile
This is a haunting and sad poem, Lea. It sounds like you may still be tortured by a familial love that should have been unconditional but apparently wasn't. That can be an unfortunate and difficult thing to bear for any child, as it haunts you still into adulthood. Still you want to hold out hope that he may change his ways. But you are not certain and are still wracked with pain over it. I hope you will discover his love for you someday, if indeed he is capable of it. Jim
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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This is a haunting and sad poem, Lea. It sounds like you may still be tortured by a familial love that should have been unconditional but apparently wasn't. That can be an unfortunate and difficult thing to bear for any child, as it haunts you still into adulthood. Still you want to hold out hope that he may change his ways. But you are not certain and are still wracked with pain over it. I hope you will discover his love for you someday, if indeed he is capable of it. Jim
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you for your kind and thorough review and for your insight I am especially thankful. You are right. I'm still trying to figure out if love is real. I wonder about this sad romantic love that people talk about it. I'm older now and might be too late for some such things. Be that as it may God-bless those who do really. Thank you again so much for your review for your time. If you're excellent reading I hope you have a really great day!
Comment from JT traveller
Absolutely incredible. I like be it. Just a small query on the word, dissolutionment, maybe disillusionment? Your way with words is entrancing. If I had 6 stars they would be yours.
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Absolutely incredible. I like be it. Just a small query on the word, dissolutionment, maybe disillusionment? Your way with words is entrancing. If I had 6 stars they would be yours.
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you so much you're so thoughtful and I'm so glad you like these poems nice to know. You're insight always good too.
Your comments and your time is valuable and I so much appreciate it. I have really hope your day is great thank you again
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem entry for the What Is Love Poetry contest.
The free verse is not forced flows well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Excellent poem entry for the What Is Love Poetry contest.
The free verse is not forced flows well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Thank you Gypsy! thank you so much for your kind words I appreciate it very much! You are an exquisite poet and your opinion is very valuable. I hope you're having a great day!
Comment from shelley kaye
love the purple background with the pick-haired dude!
i really liked this poem - it's very raw and emotional, yet hopeful and thought-provoking
i liked how you formatted the first 8 lines singularly and then a tricet at the end.
great work! thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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love the purple background with the pick-haired dude!
i really liked this poem - it's very raw and emotional, yet hopeful and thought-provoking
i liked how you formatted the first 8 lines singularly and then a tricet at the end.
great work! thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 02-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you Shelly appreciate your reviews. They're always welcome any comments or suggestions or good things are always welcome too. I take them all seriously. You always have got such good insight too. I appreciate that thanks again hope you have a great day!
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thank you! and you're welcome 😊
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lea,
Wow, this is really the negative side of love. This shows a controlling relationship or maybe an abusive one. Either way it is one that is good to get away from even if it hurts at the beginning
The line with smiles and gestures is grammatically incorrect. It should be what are these smiles and gestures. But that would break the repetition of the questioning and confusion encompassing the poem.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Hi Lea,
Wow, this is really the negative side of love. This shows a controlling relationship or maybe an abusive one. Either way it is one that is good to get away from even if it hurts at the beginning
The line with smiles and gestures is grammatically incorrect. It should be what are these smiles and gestures. But that would break the repetition of the questioning and confusion encompassing the poem.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 02-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you joan for your review and for your fine comments! I'll take a look at that line perhaps it may be reworked. Thank you for your suggestion and for your time. I'm always appreciating any comments to come my way and take them all very seriously so thank you again for taking the time to comment and to rate this I hope you have a great day!
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Don't mention it, Lea. It is what we are here to do
Joan
Comment from Julie Lau
A wonderful poem, Lea, full of raw feeling. Your use of words is supreme. You must certainly be a strong contender in the competition. All my best wishes to you for your future writing endeavours. Julie x
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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A wonderful poem, Lea, full of raw feeling. Your use of words is supreme. You must certainly be a strong contender in the competition. All my best wishes to you for your future writing endeavours. Julie x
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Thank you again Julia responded in kind to your email stating what you have written here. I want to get i'm humbled and pleased I wish you the best of evenings!