Ancient Art of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Wolf's Lair"A compilation of poems
14 total reviews
Comment from Diana Harris
It is always difficult to expose vulnerability, but you have done a worthy job here. It is clear what is going on without being too explicit and elicits emotion and empathy. I enjoyed reading this. Good luck in the contest. Diana
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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It is always difficult to expose vulnerability, but you have done a worthy job here. It is clear what is going on without being too explicit and elicits emotion and empathy. I enjoyed reading this. Good luck in the contest. Diana
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Thank you Diana I'm glad you like it and that it makes sense. And thank you for your insight. The gift of a poet especially a female poet has a deep deep inside into most things. I find for your time and your effort I'm always grateful. It's good to see you on here so have a great day thank you again
Comment from royowen
Any abuse of a child, is the worst betrayal of all, I have been betrayed by a friend, but it didn't quite do the damage of a sense of worth lack for me. But yours is much, I have an acute hatred of it. Very well written with tragic imagery, but highly descriptive and articulate, working your way through your past, beautiful written.blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Any abuse of a child, is the worst betrayal of all, I have been betrayed by a friend, but it didn't quite do the damage of a sense of worth lack for me. But yours is much, I have an acute hatred of it. Very well written with tragic imagery, but highly descriptive and articulate, working your way through your past, beautiful written.blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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You certainly have it in space when you hit the nail on the head. I thank you very much for your very kind and thoughtful review oh yeah c b on the words oh thank you for that. For your time and effort always appreciated bunny I hope you have a great day!
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Most welcome Lea
Comment from JT traveller
Wow! Powerful imagery. Such strength was conveyed in your words. An extremely passionate and emotional write. A small suggestion might be to include some punctuation in the first stanza. Otherwise another excellent poem. Good luck Lea. Xx
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Wow! Powerful imagery. Such strength was conveyed in your words. An extremely passionate and emotional write. A small suggestion might be to include some punctuation in the first stanza. Otherwise another excellent poem. Good luck Lea. Xx
Comment Written 08-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thank you so much I will do that thanks for the tips and I'm very thankful to receive your review. Thank you so much again you're tawn and your opinion means something to me. I hope you have a great night!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Poor kid. Your strong words imagery paint a grim picture. I'm sorry to hear is true. But you escared! Thank goodness.
I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Poor kid. Your strong words imagery paint a grim picture. I'm sorry to hear is true. But you escared! Thank goodness.
I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Wait for your fine review I'm always appreciative. You're a fine writer and I appreciate your comments. Thank you so much and have a great day!
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lea,
This poem uses line breaks and metaphor well to describe the horrors of sexual abuse. Wolf is a good metaphor for the abuser. You were betrayed by both parents in the worst way.
Your mother should have left your father or turned him in to the authorities and not left it up to you. Sexual abuse should never happen. I am sorry. I hope writing is cathartic.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Joan
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Hi Lea,
This poem uses line breaks and metaphor well to describe the horrors of sexual abuse. Wolf is a good metaphor for the abuser. You were betrayed by both parents in the worst way.
Your mother should have left your father or turned him in to the authorities and not left it up to you. Sexual abuse should never happen. I am sorry. I hope writing is cathartic.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Joan
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you John you're a complete and total understanding and you're incredible insight. It is nice to be understood and validated what you have done for me. I really get to thank you. I lived in a park for 6 months stealing food from a store after that until I finally found my way in the world. Thank you again for your review and for your time and your kind comments and yes writing for me pills The Onion and takes some of the power away every time I do. So thank you again john I appreciate you very much!
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You're very Lea.
Joan
Comment from Elizabeth Henderson
I could picture this poor child's plight. Your word use was powerful. So sorry that this is your story! I'm glad you escaped this wicked hell and have found yourself. I just have one question about the word "paralizer." Did you mean to spell it with an i?
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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I could picture this poor child's plight. Your word use was powerful. So sorry that this is your story! I'm glad you escaped this wicked hell and have found yourself. I just have one question about the word "paralizer." Did you mean to spell it with an i?
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your review and your time your comments are very much appreciated. Good eye catching that for me I totally fixed it just now.
You definitely had clarity of thought and your insight is on par so I thank you for your heads up and for your lovely commentary. I hope you're having a wonderful night!
Comment from shelley kaye
ooh this was really good
i liked the 4 line stanzas with each bringing in something else - the imagery is great with the word choices
onely thing i can suggest is maybe try a black background to blend in with the cool picture? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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ooh this was really good
i liked the 4 line stanzas with each bringing in something else - the imagery is great with the word choices
onely thing i can suggest is maybe try a black background to blend in with the cool picture? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Thank you Shelley good idea! Thank you so much for your review once again. I'm happy to see that you like what I'm writing. I too am quite pleased with the things that you write. You are definitely talented no doubt about it! I thank you for your kind words and for your reviewing time definitely appreciated I hope your day goes awesome!
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thank you and you're welcome for the review 😊👍
Comment from Ricky1024
This writing contest entry was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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This writing contest entry was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Thank you again ricky i'm happy to hear from you. I appreciate your if you're in your time I'm glad you're liking it. It's always good to have that information. I mean even constructive criticism is welcome by Me Too!I like to hear any and all comments good or bad. Period of time and I hope you're having a rockin good day!
Comment from Cherish Adams
Your imagery is excellent. With that being said I am so sorry that awfulness happened to you. Continue to write and lighten your load Lea. Prayers and love to you, Cherish.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Your imagery is excellent. With that being said I am so sorry that awfulness happened to you. Continue to write and lighten your load Lea. Prayers and love to you, Cherish.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much cherish for your kind words and for your insight. I am very much appreciative! Yes writing does help peel the onion and takes them power away. So I shall carry on and thank you for some graduation on my phone thank you for your kind words having awesome day!
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Lost, cries of child abuse. The intensity of that conflict depicted here, as we might imagine wolves would comport themselves if viewed in such a lurid and despicable light.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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This poem, Lost, cries of child abuse. The intensity of that conflict depicted here, as we might imagine wolves would comport themselves if viewed in such a lurid and despicable light.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much for your review. I appreciate it and for and insight. I am appreciating that as well. Unfortunately I am the girl in the poem but now I write to peel the onion and take some of your power away. Thank you again hope you have great day!!
