He Took a Wrong Path Home
A Glosa poem29 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Yvonne,
This is a good example of a Glosa poem as per your notes. You are right it is a form I haven't seen before. It's seems a good form to write a story in.
It seemed from the beginning he was running from death or just a very hard life that has no seeming release.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
Hi Yvonne,
This is a good example of a Glosa poem as per your notes. You are right it is a form I haven't seen before. It's seems a good form to write a story in.
It seemed from the beginning he was running from death or just a very hard life that has no seeming release.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Thanks. I'll try. You, too.
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My pleasure, Yvonne.
Joan
Comment from Pantygynt
By requiring some forty lines the form almost demands a narrative style which is what this undoubtedly is. Although no set length of line is required I think you were right to follow the rhythm of your quoted lines in this instance and you have shown how two totally different tales can become interwoven.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
By requiring some forty lines the form almost demands a narrative style which is what this undoubtedly is. Although no set length of line is required I think you were right to follow the rhythm of your quoted lines in this instance and you have shown how two totally different tales can become interwoven.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Thank you. What lovely remarks.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This reminded me of EAP's Telltale Heart. Was there a fiend following or was it his imagination. You build the feeling of dread with each line. Loved the part about the fiend breathing down his sweaty neck. Great job. Gretchen
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
This reminded me of EAP's Telltale Heart. Was there a fiend following or was it his imagination. You build the feeling of dread with each line. Loved the part about the fiend breathing down his sweaty neck. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Ric Myworld
I used to get lost every afternoon on the way home from school. Well, what really happened was, when my parents dropped me off at school, they would move before I got dismissal time, hoping to lose me. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
I used to get lost every afternoon on the way home from school. Well, what really happened was, when my parents dropped me off at school, they would move before I got dismissal time, hoping to lose me. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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I know what you mean. I kept moving, but the boys always tracked me down. hahaha. Thank, Ric.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery from the art work and words you have chosen. Thank you for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
This is a very well written poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery from the art work and words you have chosen. Thank you for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much. Good to hear from you.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Glosa is not familiar to this FanStory member, but I am NOT a poet. All I know of poetry is what I enjoy reading. I did enjoy reading this contest entry. It flowed smoothly and gave me an eerie, almost mysterious feeling. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
Glosa is not familiar to this FanStory member, but I am NOT a poet. All I know of poetry is what I enjoy reading. I did enjoy reading this contest entry. It flowed smoothly and gave me an eerie, almost mysterious feeling. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Thank you for this wonderful review. I'm glad you got that feeling from it.
Comment from Ben Colder
Reminds me of being in London and nearing dark alleyways. I spent a few days there. Sort of spooky, those places. Sure was glad seeing the light. You did well with this.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
Reminds me of being in London and nearing dark alleyways. I spent a few days there. Sort of spooky, those places. Sure was glad seeing the light. You did well with this.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Thank you. When I was in London, hot and no rain in sight. Drat!
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Sandy Mitchell, I think lives in London or nearby. She is a sweetheart.
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Yes, she is. We're sisters across the pond.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love the form and the sentiments here. Your clever rhymes and metre give this poem a powerful punch and I just loved your story Yvonne. I fearful fiend following us at night is a bit scary, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
I love the form and the sentiments here. Your clever rhymes and metre give this poem a powerful punch and I just loved your story Yvonne. I fearful fiend following us at night is a bit scary, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Thank you for a great review.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! Spooky stuff, Yvonne! I bet Dean would love this one. You really built up the suspense in this poem and I love that you took those lines from the Rime of the Ancient Mariner! Hope this does well in the contest!
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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
Wow! Spooky stuff, Yvonne! I bet Dean would love this one. You really built up the suspense in this poem and I love that you took those lines from the Rime of the Ancient Mariner! Hope this does well in the contest!
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Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Thank you. We'll see how it goes.