The Return
A Paradelle11 total reviews
Comment from Sherry SG
This was so poignant a read. And the repetition of this poetry format made it even more so. I loved this and voted for this. You have my 6 stars for it.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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This was so poignant a read. And the repetition of this poetry format made it even more so. I loved this and voted for this. You have my 6 stars for it.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for the positive feedback and most generous stars! This was a challenging form and I do appreciate the support - and the vote. Glad you enjoyed the storyline.
Comment from JLR
June, this is a stellar write with excellent use of refrains that create an energetic flow to the whole poem. The ship is just the perfect cherry atop a sundae!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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June, this is a stellar write with excellent use of refrains that create an energetic flow to the whole poem. The ship is just the perfect cherry atop a sundae!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and share your insights! This was such a challenging write, but I?m glad I did it. I was not as courageous when it came to the Glosa challenge. I appreciate the review and the generous stars!
Comment from kahpot
What a wonderful read and form as it flows so very well, it reads as a sad love story, yet filled with joy and hope, to keep within the rules of this form looks quite difficult though this poem tells us a story, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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What a wonderful read and form as it flows so very well, it reads as a sad love story, yet filled with joy and hope, to keep within the rules of this form looks quite difficult though this poem tells us a story, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 19-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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I?m glad you enjoyed the read. It was a difficult challenge! I appreciate the support.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is not my favourite form but your subject matter here seems so appropriate for the repeated lines and you did an amazing job with a form that is not easy to write in. A fearful trip on the ocean as duty calls and the ship sails with love and hope on board, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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This is not my favourite form but your subject matter here seems so appropriate for the repeated lines and you did an amazing job with a form that is not easy to write in. A fearful trip on the ocean as duty calls and the ship sails with love and hope on board, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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I?m glad you enjoyed the read. It was a difficult challenge! I appreciate the support.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem read well, June. I liked the way you
formatted your lines, the word choices, the image,
and how you summed it all in the last verse using
the required words. You told a great little story.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Your poem read well, June. I liked the way you
formatted your lines, the word choices, the image,
and how you summed it all in the last verse using
the required words. You told a great little story.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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This was a very challenging form and I appreciate the feedback and support. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Comment from country ranch writer
When she seen it was it actually coming or going wondering minds want to know. War is hell at any given time when called upon to go out and defend one's homeland. United We Stand or else we will fall.
Saturday Feb. 18-2023.
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When she seen it was it actually coming or going wondering minds want to know. War is hell at any given time when called upon to go out and defend one's homeland. United We Stand or else we will fall.
Saturday Feb. 18-2023.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
Comment from Sally Law
This is one of the hardest repeating forms of poetry I have ever seen. You did a splendid job, dear June. The art was a perfect choice.
Sending you my best today as always and virtual six for this magnificent piece.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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This is one of the hardest repeating forms of poetry I have ever seen. You did a splendid job, dear June. The art was a perfect choice.
Sending you my best today as always and virtual six for this magnificent piece.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Yes, this paradelle was such a challenge, but I did want to give it a try. I appreciate your dropping by to share your feedback.
Comment from patcelaw
I am not a real big fan of this format. But listening to it is a whole lot better than trying to read it. And then, when you get to the final stanza, it begins to make some sense. Of all the ones that I've tried to read before non-seem to really make a lot of sense, but this one really does. The woman in the story poem was sending her man off to see during war and then seeing him return. Thank you for sharing. Patricia.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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I am not a real big fan of this format. But listening to it is a whole lot better than trying to read it. And then, when you get to the final stanza, it begins to make some sense. Of all the ones that I've tried to read before non-seem to really make a lot of sense, but this one really does. The woman in the story poem was sending her man off to see during war and then seeing him return. Thank you for sharing. Patricia.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Yes, this paradelle was such a challenge, but I did want to give it a try. I appreciate your dropping by to share your feedback.
Comment from BermyBye50
June,
This a brilliantly written Paradelle poem contest entry. Your story telling skills are boldly presented in this creative and compelling write. The imagery is concise and paints a striking picture of a couples tested love story from the first line of the opening stanza to its apt conclusion in the final line of last stanza. Well done.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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June,
This a brilliantly written Paradelle poem contest entry. Your story telling skills are boldly presented in this creative and compelling write. The imagery is concise and paints a striking picture of a couples tested love story from the first line of the opening stanza to its apt conclusion in the final line of last stanza. Well done.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Yes, this paradelle was such a challenge, but I did want to give it a try. I appreciate your dropping by to share your feedback.
Comment from jmdg1954
This is a fine paradelle poem. It fits the proper structure as outlined.
The story told reminded me of Christopher Columbus and Queen Isabella.
Nicely done and fun to read.
John
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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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This is a fine paradelle poem. It fits the proper structure as outlined.
The story told reminded me of Christopher Columbus and Queen Isabella.
Nicely done and fun to read.
John
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Yes, this paradelle was such a challenge, but I did want to give it a try. I appreciate your dropping by to share your feedback.