Enter At Your Own Risk
Don't judge a book by it's cover.13 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The intruder was definitely surprised when he entered the old lady's house. And it sounds like she knew what to do after he entered. Did she scare the man or shoot him? She did call the police.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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The intruder was definitely surprised when he entered the old lady's house. And it sounds like she knew what to do after he entered. Did she scare the man or shoot him? She did call the police.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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I will leave that story ending option to you, but I thought about all the paperwork she would have to go through, so she would just probably make him wait until the patrol officers arrived. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is what you get when you break into someone's house to steal from them, beware that when you are confronted with an old lady with a gun, you might die of a gunshot wound! A poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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This is what you get when you break into someone's house to steal from them, beware that when you are confronted with an old lady with a gun, you might die of a gunshot wound! A poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Hi Dolly, thanks for reading and review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This seventy-five-word story, Enter at Your Own Risk, has the required word count and finds that the police might just be the last people you see on the way to a burglary gone wrong - for the burglar.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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This seventy-five-word story, Enter at Your Own Risk, has the required word count and finds that the police might just be the last people you see on the way to a burglary gone wrong - for the burglar.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thanks for reading and the great review.
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
I guess that guy should have never underestimated the power of old women!
I knew an old lady who held up a burglar with her finger until the cops came.
Great story, with lots of room to imagine.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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I guess that guy should have never underestimated the power of old women!
I knew an old lady who held up a burglar with her finger until the cops came.
Great story, with lots of room to imagine.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thanks for reading and the great review. My kind of resourceful woman.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is indeed an excellent example of the maxim 'don't judge a book by its cover'. Unfortunately, in England it's actually illegal to go to such legths to defend your home. She'd have been imprisoned! kay
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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This is indeed an excellent example of the maxim 'don't judge a book by its cover'. Unfortunately, in England it's actually illegal to go to such legths to defend your home. She'd have been imprisoned! kay
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Hi Kay, the gun issue here in the US is getting out of control. Here it's always been okay to defend yourself if you feel threatened in your home. Maybe the English rule is better.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 75 Word Flash writing prompt contest. I love your story. She showed him! LoL
The flash fiction story grabbed my interest. I would you recommend it.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Excellent entry for the 75 Word Flash writing prompt contest. I love your story. She showed him! LoL
The flash fiction story grabbed my interest. I would you recommend it.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thanks for reading and the great review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Sherry SG
I loved reading your piece. What an amazing twist that's not really a gimmicky twist but part of the story, as it should be. You've captured a lot with your 75 words. My 6 stars for your piece for blowing me away. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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I loved reading your piece. What an amazing twist that's not really a gimmicky twist but part of the story, as it should be. You've captured a lot with your 75 words. My 6 stars for your piece for blowing me away. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review and the 6 stars. I appreciate it.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 75 Word Flash story you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good and realistic words and great imagery to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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This is a very well written 75 Word Flash story you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good and realistic words and great imagery to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thanks, Teri. I appreciate it.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
The proper "snub nosed" is snub-nosed. Done correctly that would make this a 74 word contest.
You may choose to reconsider another word being added since it is supposed to be a 75 worder.
Do not mess with old ladies.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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The proper "snub nosed" is snub-nosed. Done correctly that would make this a 74 word contest.
You may choose to reconsider another word being added since it is supposed to be a 75 worder.
Do not mess with old ladies.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thanks for reading and the great review.
Comment from lancellot
So, Lucy was a police officer. Hmm, I would change the second floor to the first floor. Much more likely and easier to believe. Also, the burglar's words to Lucy with a gun and flashlight aimed at him. I would think more about that.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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So, Lucy was a police officer. Hmm, I would change the second floor to the first floor. Much more likely and easier to believe. Also, the burglar's words to Lucy with a gun and flashlight aimed at him. I would think more about that.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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Thanks for your comments and review. I appreciate them.
