I Can Await
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Comment from Mary Vigasin
Very wise advice, Jaybird. Just living one day at a time can reduce worry about what comes next and bring peace. Very well said.
It was brought home to me last weekend when my sister-in-law passed away unexpectedly.
Best wishes,
Mary
Very wise advice, Jaybird. Just living one day at a time can reduce worry about what comes next and bring peace. Very well said.
It was brought home to me last weekend when my sister-in-law passed away unexpectedly.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
Comment from Gloria ....
Well you certainly have got this right, Jay. Lovely language and a positive and more importantly a realistic poem addressing the certain road ahead.
Always good to hear from you. :))
Gloria
Well you certainly have got this right, Jay. Lovely language and a positive and more importantly a realistic poem addressing the certain road ahead.
Always good to hear from you. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
Comment from Mrs. KT
Wonderful philosophy, JayBird.
There is no telling what tomorrow may bring, but like you in your closing couplet:
I want to live my life each day-
Await whatever's on the way.
I take each day one at a time.
Just grateful to wake each morning...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Wonderful philosophy, JayBird.
There is no telling what tomorrow may bring, but like you in your closing couplet:
I want to live my life each day-
Await whatever's on the way.
I take each day one at a time.
Just grateful to wake each morning...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
Comment from Teri7
Jaybird, This is a very nice and very well rhymed poem about living each day and waiting for whatever comes your way. You used great descriptive and heartfelt words. Thank you for sharing. Blessings teri
Jaybird, This is a very nice and very well rhymed poem about living each day and waiting for whatever comes your way. You used great descriptive and heartfelt words. Thank you for sharing. Blessings teri
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
Comment from Janet Foor
One day at a time is definitely the best way to live your life Jay. That and trusting God in each new day and circumstance.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
One day at a time is definitely the best way to live your life Jay. That and trusting God in each new day and circumstance.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
Comment from newilk
Absolutely stunning poem! I adore when words are altered to fit meter and rhyme scheme! It really shows the creativity that goes into the thought process of creating any poetry
Absolutely stunning poem! I adore when words are altered to fit meter and rhyme scheme! It really shows the creativity that goes into the thought process of creating any poetry
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
Comment from JT traveller
Great message to live in the moment.
This line,
"If tomorrow brings peace and joy,
'twill be like finding a new toy."
At first seems pessimistic but then, upon reading it again, it fills me with hope.
Very cleverly written.
Great message to live in the moment.
This line,
"If tomorrow brings peace and joy,
'twill be like finding a new toy."
At first seems pessimistic but then, upon reading it again, it fills me with hope.
Very cleverly written.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
Comment from lyenochka
I agree that living just one day at a time is all we can do and trust God for our future because only He knows what it holds. Thanks for sharing your wisdom, Jaybird!
my search in finding Heavens Gate. (Heaven's)
I agree that living just one day at a time is all we can do and trust God for our future because only He knows what it holds. Thanks for sharing your wisdom, Jaybird!
my search in finding Heavens Gate. (Heaven's)
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
Comment from Frank Malley
"I Can Await" counterposes eagerness and patience in a truncated sonnet form. The poem has missteps, both in rhyme choices and in meter. "...loads" is a poor choice in this poem although it might be difficult find another rhyme for "roads." How about: "Or haunt my lesser, ordinary abodes." Line 10 could use another syllable; puttint 'bright' in front of "new toy" would make the flow better. I would make the last line to 'I await whatever comes my way.' The couplet in lines 11-12 might work better as 'I'll live it up, and then I'll wait/ to find my prize at Heaven's gate.'
"I Can Await" counterposes eagerness and patience in a truncated sonnet form. The poem has missteps, both in rhyme choices and in meter. "...loads" is a poor choice in this poem although it might be difficult find another rhyme for "roads." How about: "Or haunt my lesser, ordinary abodes." Line 10 could use another syllable; puttint 'bright' in front of "new toy" would make the flow better. I would make the last line to 'I await whatever comes my way.' The couplet in lines 11-12 might work better as 'I'll live it up, and then I'll wait/ to find my prize at Heaven's gate.'
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
Comment from country ranch writer
Yep. I agree all we can do is enjoy each day as it comes life is running out for us old timers. We are happy to just wake up in the morning. I lost a very good friend yesterday he's had diabities, and heart condition. His body just gave out. His wife and Zi have been friends for twelve years now, she like me knew it was just a matter of time befor God came to call him home. He died at home with his famuky around him kievmy husband did four years ago. You stay safe you hear,
We'd. Feb. 8-2023
Yep. I agree all we can do is enjoy each day as it comes life is running out for us old timers. We are happy to just wake up in the morning. I lost a very good friend yesterday he's had diabities, and heart condition. His body just gave out. His wife and Zi have been friends for twelve years now, she like me knew it was just a matter of time befor God came to call him home. He died at home with his famuky around him kievmy husband did four years ago. You stay safe you hear,
We'd. Feb. 8-2023
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023