How My Sound Was Tracked
Where the music came from in every stage of my lifetime39 total reviews
Comment from GWHARGIS
I did love a Walkman. Music on the go. I remember 8 tracks because of the eternity it took to go from track to track. The huge Hi fidelity stereos were compatible to the huge cabinet televisions. Funny how 99 percent of people can be instantly transported to a certain time or place through music. Great job on this. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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I did love a Walkman. Music on the go. I remember 8 tracks because of the eternity it took to go from track to track. The huge Hi fidelity stereos were compatible to the huge cabinet televisions. Funny how 99 percent of people can be instantly transported to a certain time or place through music. Great job on this. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
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Gretchen I thank you so very much for always having nice things to say and being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated!
Comment from Paul McFarland
Uniquely done. This was a nice musical romp through your life. Your trip was about the same as mine. Hopefully, the music will continue for a few more years.
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Uniquely done. This was a nice musical romp through your life. Your trip was about the same as mine. Hopefully, the music will continue for a few more years.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
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Paul,, I, thank you so very much for always having nice things to say and being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I like the creative way you wrote your entry for this contest. You took us through a life's journey of how we heard our music. I like that. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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I like the creative way you wrote your entry for this contest. You took us through a life's journey of how we heard our music. I like that. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
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Barb, thank you so very much for always having nice things to say and being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest was enjoyable to read, Mystery Author. I liked
the progression of musical influences throughout your life
up to this point. I really liked the monorhyme within each
verse. Those verses marked the time of your life well.
I could see and feel your musical likes and talent in your
own abilities grow. Music has so much to offer to everyone--
even babies as you pointed out. The image your paired with
your work was appropriate. I liked how you used the theme
of music rather than listing specific songs. The video was
hilarious.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
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Your contest was enjoyable to read, Mystery Author. I liked
the progression of musical influences throughout your life
up to this point. I really liked the monorhyme within each
verse. Those verses marked the time of your life well.
I could see and feel your musical likes and talent in your
own abilities grow. Music has so much to offer to everyone--
even babies as you pointed out. The image your paired with
your work was appropriate. I liked how you used the theme
of music rather than listing specific songs. The video was
hilarious.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
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Jan, I can't thank you enough for are you do and for being such a great reviewer! I appreciate your detailed review-,s so much, I thank you my dear friend.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine tribute to music here and it is a pity you did not make this more personal and mentioned your favourite songs, as this is a general love of all types of music.
I have read a couple of entries for this contest and the passion for songs exists throughout our life and we remember the songs from long ago with fondness and I have my personal favourites.
These two lines are slightly out of metre compared to the rest of the poem and need attention:
(Records, Eight track, cassette, CD; are what I've lived so far)
(YouTube and Siri; also good to find songs once on top)
Good luck with the contest.
Love Dolly x
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A fine tribute to music here and it is a pity you did not make this more personal and mentioned your favourite songs, as this is a general love of all types of music.
I have read a couple of entries for this contest and the passion for songs exists throughout our life and we remember the songs from long ago with fondness and I have my personal favourites.
These two lines are slightly out of metre compared to the rest of the poem and need attention:
(Records, Eight track, cassette, CD; are what I've lived so far)
(YouTube and Siri; also good to find songs once on top)
Good luck with the contest.
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much Dolly. After reading everyone else's entries, I realized that mine would be duplicating so many, almost exactly. So I went a different direction that had just as much meaning to me, without giving everyone the same as what they already read. Also, I do understand about those two lines, and I had to finally go with it regardless, because it was so important for me to get that info in. I know that the syllable count is right on, but the meter is thrown off, but so far there have been very few that mentioned it as the reviews have been good. I may keep trying to toss those two lines around a little longer and see what I can do with them, without losing the information which is most important for me to say. Thanks for your kind comments and review my friend. It is most appreciated.
Comment from Terry Broxson
This a very creative way to write a poem for this contest. I will tell you I have written a story that will not be in the contest, and I may or may not post it later. The point is my story incorporates, in part, what you have expressed. It is not as creatively done as yours, but if I do post it, I want you to know that I did NOT rip off your idea...LOL. Although it is an idea worthy of being ripped off!
Thank you for entering the contest. I think it is very clever, good luck. Terry.
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This a very creative way to write a poem for this contest. I will tell you I have written a story that will not be in the contest, and I may or may not post it later. The point is my story incorporates, in part, what you have expressed. It is not as creatively done as yours, but if I do post it, I want you to know that I did NOT rip off your idea...LOL. Although it is an idea worthy of being ripped off!
Thank you for entering the contest. I think it is very clever, good luck. Terry.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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Oh Terry, you just missed my last edits that bring the syllable count and meter up to par. And I love that you have written many of the same idea. I stayed away from the song choices, as I knew so many would also name all of my favorite songs. And don't worry, the last thing I would expect out of you is stealing ideas. : ) I do thank you for your kind review and comments. I appreciate them very much, my dear friend.
Comment from Mintybee
This is an interesting take on the contest. Instead of specific music you've tracked how music has changed for you, citing lullabies, radio, changing forms of recording, and how you can still access your favourites, though the technology changes. It's a nice comment on how music stays with us, and how there are constants in life. The rhyme scheme is constant. The words are clear and descriptive. It's a good poem.
Mintybee
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This is an interesting take on the contest. Instead of specific music you've tracked how music has changed for you, citing lullabies, radio, changing forms of recording, and how you can still access your favourites, though the technology changes. It's a nice comment on how music stays with us, and how there are constants in life. The rhyme scheme is constant. The words are clear and descriptive. It's a good poem.
Mintybee
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
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Minty, - thank you so very much for always having nice things to say and being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated!
Comment from June Sargent
I enjoyed your sharing the soundtrack of your life - in a unique and creative way. It is different than just listing songs through the decades. Thank you for sharing. It shoukd fo well in the contest.
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I enjoyed your sharing the soundtrack of your life - in a unique and creative way. It is different than just listing songs through the decades. Thank you for sharing. It shoukd fo well in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
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June, I thank you so very much for always having nice things to say and being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated!
Comment from Wyon Stansfeld
Thank you and I hope you live long enough to experience many new shifts in technology and types of music. I liked the subject matter and the way the progression also echoed stages in life -- that was clever of you. I found the poem did not scan so well at times.
Round 2 after your edit -its scanning much better now.
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Thank you and I hope you live long enough to experience many new shifts in technology and types of music. I liked the subject matter and the way the progression also echoed stages in life -- that was clever of you. I found the poem did not scan so well at times.
Round 2 after your edit -its scanning much better now.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
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Hello Wyon, I have a feeling that you are new here. I can tell because of your review. I appreciate your kind words, but when you give a rating that is good or below, you must elaborate. Especially since, if read right the meter is spot on. So, please let me know what you think should be done to correct this poem that you feel is worth such a low rank.
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Ok you are right that I am new to this site, although I have been writing poetry for 60 years and I hope I have not caused offence. But I disagree that your poem scans well if read right. You ask for more detail. If you just count the syllables in each line you get the following results verse 1: 14,13,13,14 verse 2: 12,11,16,15 verse 3: 14,14,13,15 and verse 4: 13,13,13,14.
Of course it isnt offensive to have different numbers of syllables in lines especially with free verse but with rhyming verse normally you would want there to be a consistent pattern. You then have to look at which syllables are stressed and which arent - and again make a pattern out of those. In my opinion your poem does not do this.
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Lol, that wasn't necessary to write those all down, because I do sometimes use less or more syllables to better say what I need to say. I understand and meter, but I did go and change them all to make them all 9 syllables and for the points needed to say, my meter is as good as it can be right now. Could you please take a look and tell me if you approve?
I thank you and as much as you didn't have to go through all of that, i appreciate you trying to help. I hope you feel that it is now worth a better rating. Let me start over and welcome you to FS. I hope we will be good friends as most of us have become very close. I hope we can be good friends. Once again, I would appreciate you to look one more time. Thank you.
Comment from Sarah Tummey
Pretty good. I gave it the 4 stars because it was well-written, but could have been more personal. I would have liked you to incorporate what that first song was you heard, which songs you covered in your high school bands, etc. As it's the sound-track of your life, I just think it could have been more than a poem about the passage of time and the way music is heard.
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Pretty good. I gave it the 4 stars because it was well-written, but could have been more personal. I would have liked you to incorporate what that first song was you heard, which songs you covered in your high school bands, etc. As it's the sound-track of your life, I just think it could have been more than a poem about the passage of time and the way music is heard.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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Hi Sarah, actually after reading a few of the others I found that some were identical to what I was going to write. I was so disappointed and was going to just drop out of the contest. The last thing all the readers needed was a whole bunch of entries to read that sounded the same. I mean one was so close, I could have sworn that she was reading my notes. Lol... So in order not to quit, I took it that direction and thought people might also want to hear a description of how the ways we heard out music, and how it has changed throughout the years. That to me is important to to see what how far ways to hear music through our different stages might be well received. Thank you for saying that it was well written tho, as I appreciate your kindness.
