Sleep, Little One
a children's poem40 total reviews
Comment from Maria Millsaps
Excellent. Love how your poem flows, so sweet, so gentle, so soft, just what a child needs before they slumber into deep sleep and dream of good things. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Excellent. Love how your poem flows, so sweet, so gentle, so soft, just what a child needs before they slumber into deep sleep and dream of good things. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for your lovely review!!
Melissa
Comment from Stu Harrell
Congrats to you..I can see why you won the contest....very nicely done....flowing and elegant...a very soft and lyrical chime......Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Congrats to you..I can see why you won the contest....very nicely done....flowing and elegant...a very soft and lyrical chime......Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Hello Stu. Thank you so much for your wonderful words and review. I am grateful for your comments!!
Melissa
Comment from Dawn Munro
A song indeed, or maybe psalm, this soothing, gentle verse -- the internal and end rhyme are sublime, the imagery magical, the meter flawless. Congratulations on a richly-deserved win!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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A song indeed, or maybe psalm, this soothing, gentle verse -- the internal and end rhyme are sublime, the imagery magical, the meter flawless. Congratulations on a richly-deserved win!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Hello Dawn. Thank you so much for your lovely review. So appreciate your words!
Melissa
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Sorry for the delay in responding -- you are very welcome, of course! :)
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Melissa,
This is a very soothing and relaxing poem. It does give the feel of rocking a baby to sleep in a rocking chair. That always had as much of a calming effect on me as it did on the child I was rocking. What a cute picture.
This poem could be one of the lullabies you whisper.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Hi Melissa,
This is a very soothing and relaxing poem. It does give the feel of rocking a baby to sleep in a rocking chair. That always had as much of a calming effect on me as it did on the child I was rocking. What a cute picture.
This poem could be one of the lullabies you whisper.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 12-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Hello Joan. Thank you so much for your lovely review!!! I appreciate you!
Melissa
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You are most kindly welcome, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Congratulations on this outstanding win. I missed seeing it earlier, but wanted you to know it would have had my vote. I love this. It is about the sweetest lullaby poem I have ever read. Blessings.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Congratulations on this outstanding win. I missed seeing it earlier, but wanted you to know it would have had my vote. I love this. It is about the sweetest lullaby poem I have ever read. Blessings.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Hello Ginda. Thank you so much for your lovely review and comments. I am delighted you like it!!
Melissa
Comment from karenina
I've come late to the party, but congratulations on the win! This poem is as precious as that image... Ah, for those days again! They grow up so very fast!
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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I've come late to the party, but congratulations on the win! This poem is as precious as that image... Ah, for those days again! They grow up so very fast!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much Karenina!!! I was inspired by my 1 year old granddaughter. :)
Melissa
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Is there any BETTER inspiration?!
:)
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 12-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thanks again for the selection!!
Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
A wonderful entry for the Children's Poetry contest!
It's so nice when a "sweet little one" sleeps through the night, but often they don't.
I have one suggestion for you,
"your eyes have closed half too." ... ( I suggest,
your eyes are half closed, too.)
My favorite lines,
"through waning light, we cuddle tight,
as Sandman sprinkles you
with fairy dust"
and,
"you sail to sleep, on shadows deep,
through lilac tinted skies"
Have you ever heard Gordon Lightfoot's song, "The Pony Man"?
https://youtu.be/_8LsxcV9Qz8
I especially like the 8 syllable lines with those inner rhymes.
These hours in the night, trying to coax a child back to sleep, are magical... as you know. You've got "fairy dust" sprinkled all around by the Sandman. And "you sail to sleep, on shadows deep,
through lilac tinted skies."
Nicely penned! Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Hi Melissa,
A wonderful entry for the Children's Poetry contest!
It's so nice when a "sweet little one" sleeps through the night, but often they don't.
I have one suggestion for you,
"your eyes have closed half too." ... ( I suggest,
your eyes are half closed, too.)
My favorite lines,
"through waning light, we cuddle tight,
as Sandman sprinkles you
with fairy dust"
and,
"you sail to sleep, on shadows deep,
through lilac tinted skies"
Have you ever heard Gordon Lightfoot's song, "The Pony Man"?
https://youtu.be/_8LsxcV9Qz8
I especially like the 8 syllable lines with those inner rhymes.
These hours in the night, trying to coax a child back to sleep, are magical... as you know. You've got "fairy dust" sprinkled all around by the Sandman. And "you sail to sleep, on shadows deep,
through lilac tinted skies."
Nicely penned! Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much KB!!! I'm so glad you liked it and I am going to pop over to YouTube and listen to the song. :)
Melissa
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a great entry for the children's poem contest. When I read it in my head it was automatically spoken in a hushed voice... as if the baby were in front of me. I didn't want to wake it. The picture chosen also helped with that :-).
I particular liked the final stanza. Well done on a soothing children's poem.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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This is a great entry for the children's poem contest. When I read it in my head it was automatically spoken in a hushed voice... as if the baby were in front of me. I didn't want to wake it. The picture chosen also helped with that :-).
I particular liked the final stanza. Well done on a soothing children's poem.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Hello DD. Thank you for your lovely words and encouragement. I enjoyed a lovely FaceTime visit with my son and 1 year old granddaughter and afterwards wrote the poem... there is nothing like inspiration, is there??? Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
You made me want my mommy, Melissa. :) How beautiful it was to be held by her as she rocked me to sleep. How many children did you have, if you don't mind me asking? This is a sweet and loving poem that wants me to curl up and sleep in your arms. This is a very good entry for the Children's poetry Contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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You made me want my mommy, Melissa. :) How beautiful it was to be held by her as she rocked me to sleep. How many children did you have, if you don't mind me asking? This is a sweet and loving poem that wants me to curl up and sleep in your arms. This is a very good entry for the Children's poetry Contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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Hi Jose... I am privileged to have two sons and one granddaughter who recently turned 1 year old. My son and his daughter were on FaceTime with me yesterday and following that, I wrote the poem. It was a great inspiration to me. I'm so glad you liked it!!
Melissa