What Makes Us Family
Everyone is a part of something bigger.29 total reviews
Comment from Anne Johnston
This is a wonderful poem about family, great rhyming and easy to read. I especially like the lines: "It wasn't like we had a choice; it must have been God's plan." Yes, God has a plan for each one of us and puts us where we belong.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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This is a wonderful poem about family, great rhyming and easy to read. I especially like the lines: "It wasn't like we had a choice; it must have been God's plan." Yes, God has a plan for each one of us and puts us where we belong.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much Anne. I really appreciate the review and comments. I do believe God has a plan for all of us.
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You are welcome, Beth
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
Nicely done.
Should there be an "s" on "God plan"?
I liked the flow and the rhythm.
The last part about bringing honor to their name is lost in this world somehow. People don't realize that they are leaving a legacy of some kind.
Great job.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Nicely done.
Should there be an "s" on "God plan"?
I liked the flow and the rhythm.
The last part about bringing honor to their name is lost in this world somehow. People don't realize that they are leaving a legacy of some kind.
Great job.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Thank you Rebecca. I appreciate the review and comments. I'm so glad you saw the missing "s" so I could correct it.
Comment from jmdg1954
Your poem about family is spot on. No family is perfect as you write but Gods plan is what keeps them together.
Your cadence made for an enjoyable read and your rhymes were well executed.
Cheers to a good weekend.
John
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Your poem about family is spot on. No family is perfect as you write but Gods plan is what keeps them together.
Your cadence made for an enjoyable read and your rhymes were well executed.
Cheers to a good weekend.
John
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Thank you John, I really appreciate the review and comments.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
very good advice in the last two lines of this poem about what family means to us. I grew up in a dysfunctional family and am barely on speaking terms with my estranged brothers. You inspired me to call them this weekend
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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very good advice in the last two lines of this poem about what family means to us. I grew up in a dysfunctional family and am barely on speaking terms with my estranged brothers. You inspired me to call them this weekend
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the review. There are no two family exactly alike, and even the best of them have some areas in which they are disfunctional, If possible, I think it is in everyone's best interest to try to hold the family unit together. I know too many families that are estranged and wish they weren't. If you're inspired to call your brothers, I am glad.
Comment from Kaiku
Always praise the entity of family. Some have had terribly difficult upbringings while others have been wonderous. The bottom line, a strong loving family is our cure for everything.
Check your last line in the 3rd stanza. It needs reviewing. Read it out loud and you`ll understand.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Always praise the entity of family. Some have had terribly difficult upbringings while others have been wonderous. The bottom line, a strong loving family is our cure for everything.
Check your last line in the 3rd stanza. It needs reviewing. Read it out loud and you`ll understand.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Family is place to be yourself and feel at home. I wish it could be that kind of place for everyone. Thanks for noticing the error in the stanza. I fixed it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love this well written and perfectly rhymed poem in praise of family. We are nurtured by our parents and find we belong to a family and good or bad their genes are in us as we make our way in life and the main thing is to keep the family united, I loved the sentiments and the love within these words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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I love this well written and perfectly rhymed poem in praise of family. We are nurtured by our parents and find we belong to a family and good or bad their genes are in us as we make our way in life and the main thing is to keep the family united, I loved the sentiments and the love within these words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you Dolly, I really appreciate the review and nice comments.
Comment from Michael Hemingstreet
I would like to see a specific example: He threw down his last hundred on the black back table. He busted at 23 and guy up to call his son. He hadn't talked to him in 34 years but he placed the collect call. The number was disconnected and he had no money.
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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I would like to see a specific example: He threw down his last hundred on the black back table. He busted at 23 and guy up to call his son. He hadn't talked to him in 34 years but he placed the collect call. The number was disconnected and he had no money.
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Welcome to FanStory. I hope you enjoy it. Thanks for the review.
Comment from JT traveller
Beautifully written poem that brings home the message that we are all different. Not everyone has a great family.
Great flow and good reasoning throughout. A thoroughly enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Beautifully written poem that brings home the message that we are all different. Not everyone has a great family.
Great flow and good reasoning throughout. A thoroughly enjoyable read.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you for a great review. The family with which we share our DNA isn't always perfect but it still has an impact on our lives.
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So true.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Yes, Siree, this is a great entry for the Family prompt. I liked several of the well-placed rhymes. My favorite stanza as it is a great piece of wisdom was:
Most people want to do their best,
and their bonds of love are strong.
Be careful not to place the blame
when the minor things go wrong.
Thank you for sharing this!
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Yes, Siree, this is a great entry for the Family prompt. I liked several of the well-placed rhymes. My favorite stanza as it is a great piece of wisdom was:
Most people want to do their best,
and their bonds of love are strong.
Be careful not to place the blame
when the minor things go wrong.
Thank you for sharing this!
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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I am pleased you like my entry. I'm glad you shared your favorite stanza. I really appreciate the reviews.
