Sonshine
Best Rays you will ever receive33 total reviews
Comment from jmdg1954
I found this to be very clever and thought provoking with the ideal picture to accompany your poem.
open up your heart
and let the 'Son' shine in
I thought I may have seen something like this elsewhere, but as a common phrase you've made it your own.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cheers. John
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
  |
I found this to be very clever and thought provoking with the ideal picture to accompany your poem.
open up your heart
and let the 'Son' shine in
I thought I may have seen something like this elsewhere, but as a common phrase you've made it your own.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cheers. John
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
-
Y'know John, I just looked on your profile and saw you are my age. I was born in 1954. Now I haven't watched the show since I was a little girl, but there was an episode on the Flintstones that I have never forgotten. It is where Pebbles and BamBam sing, "Open up your heart and let the sunshine in". It's about how to not let the devil into your heart. I'm going to be adding the YouTube video to it later this morning. Thanks for your very kind comments my friend!
-
Ok. I?ll have to make sure to look at your profile once this contest is over.
I used to watch the Flintstones all the time.
Have a great day.
Comment from Karyn2
OOOh! I love this except that it is 11 words instead of 10. Can you make it "Open up your heart, let the 'Son' shine in"? Just leave out "and"?
It's great and a really super idea for the 10 word.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
|
OOOh! I love this except that it is 11 words instead of 10. Can you make it "Open up your heart, let the 'Son' shine in"? Just leave out "and"?
It's great and a really super idea for the 10 word.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
-
Hi there Karyn, Thanks so much for your kind review,, but I think you might have done the same thing that I just automatically do now, and that is to count syllables. There are eleven of those, but only ten words.I found myself doing the same. Thanks for your lovely review, my sweet friend.
.
-
Oh yes!!!! I totally counted syllables. Sorry. It is obviously perfect! Wishing you the best.
Comment from Brenda Henderson
The efficacy and simplicity wherein which the good news of the gospel may be shared is often astounding. This is very easy to understand. This is a perfect vehicle for evangelism. Even a little child can understand. Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
 |
The efficacy and simplicity wherein which the good news of the gospel may be shared is often astounding. This is very easy to understand. This is a perfect vehicle for evangelism. Even a little child can understand. Well done!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
-
'Brenda, I thank you so very much for your very kind review and comments! It means a lot to me, my dear friend. And thank you for that extra big star for my very short poem!
-
You're very welcome!
