Artificial Intelligence
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Beyond the Sky"A critique of technology
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Comment from Ulla
Estory, I came in late for this, but a six it is. Yes, I couldn't agree with you more. What have to we do to the world and to our immediate universe in my the holy name of progress. Don't man understand the ruin he is creating? Apparently not. Or at least not before it's too late. I loved your poem. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Estory, I came in late for this, but a six it is. Yes, I couldn't agree with you more. What have to we do to the world and to our immediate universe in my the holy name of progress. Don't man understand the ruin he is creating? Apparently not. Or at least not before it's too late. I loved your poem. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Thanks again for all the support over all the years. I appreciate it. estory
Comment from BethShelby
Your poem gives us something to think about. Yet when God created man and made him in his image, he gave man a creative, mind and he didn't dictate how he was to use it. He didn't give man the ability to create life. We might minulate life and have a influence on nature, but man does a different type of creating. Some of it is good and some dangerout and evil. I don't think man will ever be able to block our all of the wonderful things in the sky created by God, but some evil genious will at some point bring out artificial worlds to halt by causing those man made inventions to freeze.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Your poem gives us something to think about. Yet when God created man and made him in his image, he gave man a creative, mind and he didn't dictate how he was to use it. He didn't give man the ability to create life. We might minulate life and have a influence on nature, but man does a different type of creating. Some of it is good and some dangerout and evil. I don't think man will ever be able to block our all of the wonderful things in the sky created by God, but some evil genious will at some point bring out artificial worlds to halt by causing those man made inventions to freeze.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2023
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Thanks for your excellent reveiw and your interesting perspective on the theme here. I got a lot of people thinking, and that's what I like to do. Actually he did give man the power to create. Having children. Though most people don't seem to think sex is sacred or a sacrament anymore. I really wanted to give a sense of how much the machinations of man has blotted out the natural world. We don't roll with the punches. We spend tens of millions to keep pouring sand on beaches to keep our beach houses there. I think we would be better off living more simply and with less technology. Technology may be convenient, but it hollows out life. Instead of learning to play the violin or the piano and making your own music, now you just sit on the couch like a couch potato and listen to something someone else did. There's less of your own soul in it. We get zero satisfaction from life that way. And people wonder why they are so unsatisfied and unhappy. They spend even more money on shrinks. estory
Comment from susand3022
I hear you loud and clear... or not so clear. I moved here to Vermont and one of the things I looked forward to the most was seeing the sky. No lights from the college around the corner or the towns flooding out the stars. I got a piece of land that I've yet to be able to build a little place on, due to timing. I had to buy a little place, not too far from town. Luckily, it's a small town and the last thing to close down is the movie theater on a weekend at 11ish.
In the summer it takes a long time to get dark, but it sure is worth it. Boy, the stars!
Susan :)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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I hear you loud and clear... or not so clear. I moved here to Vermont and one of the things I looked forward to the most was seeing the sky. No lights from the college around the corner or the towns flooding out the stars. I got a piece of land that I've yet to be able to build a little place on, due to timing. I had to buy a little place, not too far from town. Luckily, it's a small town and the last thing to close down is the movie theater on a weekend at 11ish.
In the summer it takes a long time to get dark, but it sure is worth it. Boy, the stars!
Susan :)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and your wonderful words of support for my controversial little piece. I got plenty of people thinking about it, that's for sure. Some people like progress, but in the end, it is rather soulless, to me. Everything man makes has a side effect. estory
Comment from Regina Elliott
Dear poet, it's mind blowing
when one contemplates
the overwhelming presence
of all things technology. I agree our Earth's nature is
a frequent victim of its
intrusion. What humankind
fails to accept, is that with
AI, and pollution, we can go
too far. Superb writing.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Dear poet, it's mind blowing
when one contemplates
the overwhelming presence
of all things technology. I agree our Earth's nature is
a frequent victim of its
intrusion. What humankind
fails to accept, is that with
AI, and pollution, we can go
too far. Superb writing.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful words of support for my piece. I am glad that it seemed to get across this idea that we are crowding out the landscape God created. estory
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Interesting hybrid piece--compelling and provocative--devastating indictment of technological "progress" that trumps the natural wonders. I haven't seen a star since half a lifetime ago. Apt observation as to universal skyward glancing in so many circumstances. Fine work!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Interesting hybrid piece--compelling and provocative--devastating indictment of technological "progress" that trumps the natural wonders. I haven't seen a star since half a lifetime ago. Apt observation as to universal skyward glancing in so many circumstances. Fine work!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks so much for the excellent review I especially treasure your remarks since I've come to admire your own work so well. Wish you would post. estory
Comment from JT traveller
So very true. Just a few weeks ago I saw a whole bunch of Elon Musk's satellites orbiting in the night sky from my balcony. There is just too much space junk. What a poetic way of expressing your feelings of dismay at something lost. A great read.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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So very true. Just a few weeks ago I saw a whole bunch of Elon Musk's satellites orbiting in the night sky from my balcony. There is just too much space junk. What a poetic way of expressing your feelings of dismay at something lost. A great read.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and your encouraging remarks supporting my poem. I am glad that some of the imagery in it proved to be so evocative. I wanted to get across this idea of our man made things crowding out the natural world. estory
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My pleasure. The natural world certainly is getting crowded out, and not just by space junk.
Comment from karenina
I went to this link: https://poets.org/poem/fear-old-age
To read Jack Anderson's ~ "A Fear of Old Age"
(I've no idea how I haven't come to read him before this!)
Thanks for your author's notes, which explain the "music" of this style of poetry--
This is thought-provoking and truer than I'd like to believe.
Alas, we can't close our eyes to the shroud laid upon nature and pretend we're surprised when the hearse comes calling...
Nothing at all shallow about this poem. Yet I find I could "wade" through your "current" for days!
Karenina
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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I went to this link: https://poets.org/poem/fear-old-age
To read Jack Anderson's ~ "A Fear of Old Age"
(I've no idea how I haven't come to read him before this!)
Thanks for your author's notes, which explain the "music" of this style of poetry--
This is thought-provoking and truer than I'd like to believe.
Alas, we can't close our eyes to the shroud laid upon nature and pretend we're surprised when the hearse comes calling...
Nothing at all shallow about this poem. Yet I find I could "wade" through your "current" for days!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks again; I appreciate the support so much! estory
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My pleasure
Comment from harmony13
I really like the author's poem. I found it be informative, descriptive and
creative. Thank you so much for the author's notes - so much was said
about losing so much of the past. I found the examples given so true.
Sometimes I think it's age yet I miss the live Christmas tree and my Landline Phone! I am still pondering on the words of this interesting and deep poem. Thank you for this thought provoking poem!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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I really like the author's poem. I found it be informative, descriptive and
creative. Thank you so much for the author's notes - so much was said
about losing so much of the past. I found the examples given so true.
Sometimes I think it's age yet I miss the live Christmas tree and my Landline Phone! I am still pondering on the words of this interesting and deep poem. Thank you for this thought provoking poem!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and all your wonderful words of support for my poem. When you get people to read it and read it again, that's maybe the best compliment to a piece you can have. Like to make people think. estory
Comment from Paul McFarland
You have touched on a subject which was nonexistent when I was growing up. It is amazing how much space junk that is whirling around our planet. It's only a matter of time before someone is killed by one of these things that comes crashing down to Earth.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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You have touched on a subject which was nonexistent when I was growing up. It is amazing how much space junk that is whirling around our planet. It's only a matter of time before someone is killed by one of these things that comes crashing down to Earth.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the excellent review and your perspective on my little poem. When I think about it, the poem really also touches on this helplessness we feel in the face of all this corporate ordered infrastructure crowding out the natural world. Big money talks loudest. estory
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a very thought-provoking, well-written, and interesting take on 'progress'. You stated your case very well in this prose-poem, and there's no question about where you stand on the issue.
I can't say as I agree with your take on progress, but we're all entitled to our opinions. I know it was for literary effect, but you certainly overstated your beef when you say "Their orbits intertwining into webs so thick you cannot see the stars anymore."
Here's a thought for you: Without all those satellites and the 'progress' you denounce, you wouldn't have been able to share this poem with more than just a handful of people close to you. FanStory has enabled me to both enjoy others' work and share my own with people around the world, which would not have been possible without the progress you denounce.
Indeed, this progress has lifted billions from poverty around the world, making their lives far more enjoyable and longer, as they no longer need to spend so much of their lives working just for subsistence. It's too easy, and I think hypocritical, for us to sit here and complain about progress when we are comfortably ensconced in a warm house with plenty to eat and drink and with time on our hands to sit and write poetry.
If given the choice of progress or being able to look up and see the stars, I think most people would opt for progress. But that's just my take.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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This was a very thought-provoking, well-written, and interesting take on 'progress'. You stated your case very well in this prose-poem, and there's no question about where you stand on the issue.
I can't say as I agree with your take on progress, but we're all entitled to our opinions. I know it was for literary effect, but you certainly overstated your beef when you say "Their orbits intertwining into webs so thick you cannot see the stars anymore."
Here's a thought for you: Without all those satellites and the 'progress' you denounce, you wouldn't have been able to share this poem with more than just a handful of people close to you. FanStory has enabled me to both enjoy others' work and share my own with people around the world, which would not have been possible without the progress you denounce.
Indeed, this progress has lifted billions from poverty around the world, making their lives far more enjoyable and longer, as they no longer need to spend so much of their lives working just for subsistence. It's too easy, and I think hypocritical, for us to sit here and complain about progress when we are comfortably ensconced in a warm house with plenty to eat and drink and with time on our hands to sit and write poetry.
If given the choice of progress or being able to look up and see the stars, I think most people would opt for progress. But that's just my take.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
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Thanks for your perspective, but I disagree with it. Life isn't really better. I could live without Fanstory and be comfortable with the old fashioned books if they still printed them. And poverty isn't shrinking, in many ways the gulf between rich and poor is getting bigger. I believe we would be better off back in the simpler living of days before technology. In many ways, the tech world we live in today is a soul less world. estory
