Bad Moving Day
Complete Fiction.48 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is truly funny. It sounds exactly like something that would be said by a young boy who is potty training. Children try to apply things they have learned. Whatever worked with the ketchup bottle should work for him. Best wishes in the contest.
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This is truly funny. It sounds exactly like something that would be said by a young boy who is potty training. Children try to apply things they have learned. Whatever worked with the ketchup bottle should work for him. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
Comment from Barbara Peabody Pouliot
Well done. Very funny with such a great style. I enjoyed this moment of humor.
I am sure it will linger in my mind. Kids are just so funny. You really captured it.
Thank you for sharing.
Good luck
Write on
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Well done. Very funny with such a great style. I enjoyed this moment of humor.
I am sure it will linger in my mind. Kids are just so funny. You really captured it.
Thank you for sharing.
Good luck
Write on
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
Comment from Janet Foor
Brilliant!! A delightful 25 syllable poem. Perfect artwork and presentation for your poem.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
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Brilliant!! A delightful 25 syllable poem. Perfect artwork and presentation for your poem.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
Comment from Debbie Pope
I love what you did with 25 syllables. It's such a creative poem. Your last line is the perfect punch line. And the whole concept of "moving" is a funny premise for your poem.
You write humor very well. Good luck in the contest.
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I love what you did with 25 syllables. It's such a creative poem. Your last line is the perfect punch line. And the whole concept of "moving" is a funny premise for your poem.
You write humor very well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
Comment from jmdg1954
It took me a minute before I got it, duh!
I'm still laughing to myself as I'm posting this.
You have a creative mind.
This is a sure fire contender in the contest in my opinion.
Cheers. John
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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It took me a minute before I got it, duh!
I'm still laughing to myself as I'm posting this.
You have a creative mind.
This is a sure fire contender in the contest in my opinion.
Cheers. John
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Hi John, I apologize for this being so late. My eye specialist has restricted my time on my ipad for a while, but I wanted to make sure you knew how much your awesome review means to me. Thank you so much for your very kind words for my poem. And thank you for that big beautiful bad boy. (Haha, my grandson said to tell you that). And after all, this was dedicated to that goofball. Not sure if you are too young, but my grandson's nickname is goober, so you never know what he will say. He is my partner in crime. Lol And thanks again for the whole package.
It is so appreciated, my dear friend!
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Oh you?re quite welcome for the review, both you and goober. Tell him I said ?yo?.
I?m probably older than you think I am (68).
Take care of those eyes!
John
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Relying on the old toilet humor is usually in bad taste but I can see a little humor in it yet the picture gives away the punchline before it comes to its completion. I just prefer to read it as though the picture wasn't there.
Jesse
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Relying on the old toilet humor is usually in bad taste but I can see a little humor in it yet the picture gives away the punchline before it comes to its completion. I just prefer to read it as though the picture wasn't there.
Jesse
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Hi Jesse, I haven't seen you you for a while and I'm so glad to hear from you. .
I get what you're saying, but alas I fear not everyone would catch on as fast as you. I heard from one who said that they had to think about it for a while even after they read it.
So I thank you my sweet friend for the kind review and comments, and as always so great to hear from you.
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I don't know who you are, but I am glad you liked my review.
Have a wonderful day!
Jesse
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You too, my sweet friend!!
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, well duh! You have taken bathroom humor to a whole new level. For a very short poem, to tell a very funny story, you most definitely deserve a six that I don't have. Excellent, creative, and a bunch of other words to say how much I enjoyed this. Terry.
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LOL, well duh! You have taken bathroom humor to a whole new level. For a very short poem, to tell a very funny story, you most definitely deserve a six that I don't have. Excellent, creative, and a bunch of other words to say how much I enjoyed this. Terry.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
Comment from John Ciarmello
Ha! This is hysterical! I can see this happening without a doubt. The artwork is fantastic, and I thoroughly enjoyed this piece from top to bottom. Best, JohnC
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Ha! This is hysterical! I can see this happening without a doubt. The artwork is fantastic, and I thoroughly enjoyed this piece from top to bottom. Best, JohnC
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Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Hi John, and speaking of johns; love your potty humor too.
Thanks for the fun review and comments,my friend!
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Well--I never! Hahaha! Yes, I do enjoy a good piece of potty humor now and again, mystery writer. This is super cute!
