My Beautiful Boy
A short story about a short life.18 total reviews
Comment from Ginda Simpson
What an intense flash fiction piece this is. It is well written, very moving, and more importantly it holds a very strong message about helmet safety. I would not want any mother to have a last memory such as this. I am glad it is fictional here. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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What an intense flash fiction piece this is. It is well written, very moving, and more importantly it holds a very strong message about helmet safety. I would not want any mother to have a last memory such as this. I am glad it is fictional here. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very well written. Good work.
Yes. I often rode my motorcycles without a helmet, but realize how idiotic that was. I've recently seen two dead motorcyclists lying in the road. Such tragedy. One was wearing a helmet, though.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Very well written. Good work.
Yes. I often rode my motorcycles without a helmet, but realize how idiotic that was. I've recently seen two dead motorcyclists lying in the road. Such tragedy. One was wearing a helmet, though.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is so sad. I can feel your pain in every word. I truly do know how you feel because I lost my sons too. It is something you never completely recover from no matter how much time passes. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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This is so sad. I can feel your pain in every word. I truly do know how you feel because I lost my sons too. It is something you never completely recover from no matter how much time passes. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from JT traveller
How devastating and terribly sad. As an emergency physician I see these things all too often. I want to reach out and give you a hug. Beautifully composed piece of writing. If I had a six star rating left I would certainly gift it to you. Blessings.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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How devastating and terribly sad. As an emergency physician I see these things all too often. I want to reach out and give you a hug. Beautifully composed piece of writing. If I had a six star rating left I would certainly gift it to you. Blessings.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Might be fictional but happens way too many times in real life.
Should never ride a bike, or motorcycle, without wearing a helmet.
Hand-counted 150 words, so meets that requirement of this contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Might be fictional but happens way too many times in real life.
Should never ride a bike, or motorcycle, without wearing a helmet.
Hand-counted 150 words, so meets that requirement of this contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your well written flash fiction story delivers a powerful message about safety on a motorcycle. Your presentation is clear, descriptive, and has just enough dialogue to understand the feelings of the mother. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Your well written flash fiction story delivers a powerful message about safety on a motorcycle. Your presentation is clear, descriptive, and has just enough dialogue to understand the feelings of the mother. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from Olivanne Marsh
The message in this story is obvious, helmets do save lives. I think you did a good job of illustrating that simple fact in a much more meaningful way than a statement of the facts. Good luck in the flash fiction contest. The fact that you tell a complete story with an obvious meaningful message in so few words is awesome and your effort is worthy of merit. I think you should separate your single paragraph into two or three or even four. Gives the story more punch and allows the reader to get the full impact of your words.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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The message in this story is obvious, helmets do save lives. I think you did a good job of illustrating that simple fact in a much more meaningful way than a statement of the facts. Good luck in the flash fiction contest. The fact that you tell a complete story with an obvious meaningful message in so few words is awesome and your effort is worthy of merit. I think you should separate your single paragraph into two or three or even four. Gives the story more punch and allows the reader to get the full impact of your words.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Also, thank you for the feedback. I will look at that. Have a blessed day.
Comment from Faith Williams
A well-written flash that grabs at the reader's heart. I'm not sure I'd be able to close my eyes for a long time. Well done, and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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A well-written flash that grabs at the reader's heart. I'm not sure I'd be able to close my eyes for a long time. Well done, and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, My Beautiful Boy, is more fact than fiction as the main cause of death on a motorcycle is head trauma. I will never understand the insistence for not wearing a helmet.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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This story, My Beautiful Boy, is more fact than fiction as the main cause of death on a motorcycle is head trauma. I will never understand the insistence for not wearing a helmet.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Thank goodness it is fiction eliz. Yes, I agree. That law makes a lot of sense. Helmets saves lives and they should be mandatory. There's no do-overs with accidents. Well done.
Nancy:) xxx
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank goodness it is fiction eliz. Yes, I agree. That law makes a lot of sense. Helmets saves lives and they should be mandatory. There's no do-overs with accidents. Well done.
Nancy:) xxx
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.