Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This was a very enjoyable chapter. It is good that Ali's father realizes she enjoys Texas and is falling in love with Cord. I think he believes it is a safer place for her if she is no longer interested in the kind of law her family's law firm practices. Never saw any typos or gremlins, or whatever they are called.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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This was a very enjoyable chapter. It is good that Ali's father realizes she enjoys Texas and is falling in love with Cord. I think he believes it is a safer place for her if she is no longer interested in the kind of law her family's law firm practices. Never saw any typos or gremlins, or whatever they are called.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
I liked that Cordero wanted to ask for permission to ask for Ali's hand. That's a good tradition! Seems like everything is set up for a proposal!
Glad Alan was finally sentenced and never going to bother Ali again. Wish it were like that always in real life.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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I liked that Cordero wanted to ask for permission to ask for Ali's hand. That's a good tradition! Seems like everything is set up for a proposal!
Glad Alan was finally sentenced and never going to bother Ali again. Wish it were like that always in real life.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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I can promise problems ahead. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Barbara,
Is your book close to the end? I thought it was already finished but i have horrible memory. It must be very rewarding to finish. Starting a new one should be fun. I wish I could finish mine but I don't have the time.
I enjoyed reading it. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Hello, Barbara,
Is your book close to the end? I thought it was already finished but i have horrible memory. It must be very rewarding to finish. Starting a new one should be fun. I wish I could finish mine but I don't have the time.
I enjoyed reading it. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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It's getting closer to the end, but not quite there it. The last post is estimated around February 19, if I can keep on track. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
How could I not enjoy reading this, Allen Griffen has been convicted of his nastiness, things are quite definitely heading toward a beautiful engagement between Cord and Allie, and even in the case of Pat Rogers things are progressing, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Son, while you were (in) New York City.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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How could I not enjoy reading this, Allen Griffen has been convicted of his nastiness, things are quite definitely heading toward a beautiful engagement between Cord and Allie, and even in the case of Pat Rogers things are progressing, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Son, while you were (in) New York City.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the kind support and the catch. I appreciate the help.
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Most welcome
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a very enjoyable chapter, Barbara. No worries about the length. You brought a perfect resolution to the trial, and now it seems like nothing should stop Cord and Ali from getting married. Everything seems to be falling in place for them, and it really looks like Ali's going to make the transition from corporate to family law.
Cord has stayed steady throughout the story, but Ali has really grown as she finds out what is really important in life.
A few typos:
Mr. Griffin, would (you) like to see them?"
Klaus and Otto('s) barking
Brent, George, (and) Joseph checked into
They both said, they wanted to help (no comma)
I'll know when the time(')s right
glass s(l)iding door
so she could hug, Joseph, Brent, (and) George.
Son, while you were (in) New York City
She's not used to her listening to her heart (elim. first her)
always been like Grandparents to me. (grandparents)
Something I put my stories through is a grammar checker like the following: https://quillbot.com/grammar-check Try it out.
I usually copy a whole page at a time into it. It would have caught all these errors. If you use it, it's a good idea to refresh it using your browser's refresh button each time before entering a new page. Sometimes it makes silly errors especially when it suggests a new " for instance, but you can just ignore what doesn't apply.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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This was a very enjoyable chapter, Barbara. No worries about the length. You brought a perfect resolution to the trial, and now it seems like nothing should stop Cord and Ali from getting married. Everything seems to be falling in place for them, and it really looks like Ali's going to make the transition from corporate to family law.
Cord has stayed steady throughout the story, but Ali has really grown as she finds out what is really important in life.
A few typos:
Mr. Griffin, would (you) like to see them?"
Klaus and Otto('s) barking
Brent, George, (and) Joseph checked into
They both said, they wanted to help (no comma)
I'll know when the time(')s right
glass s(l)iding door
so she could hug, Joseph, Brent, (and) George.
Son, while you were (in) New York City
She's not used to her listening to her heart (elim. first her)
always been like Grandparents to me. (grandparents)
Something I put my stories through is a grammar checker like the following: https://quillbot.com/grammar-check Try it out.
I usually copy a whole page at a time into it. It would have caught all these errors. If you use it, it's a good idea to refresh it using your browser's refresh button each time before entering a new page. Sometimes it makes silly errors especially when it suggests a new " for instance, but you can just ignore what doesn't apply.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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I have discovered many issues with grammar checks before. Anyway, I appreciate the help. Each one of the issues, I knew but missed. I hate when that happens. Thank you for the help. I appreciate it. It's why I post on FanStory.
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You're welcome. I have found issue with other grammar checkers as well, especially ones you install and that monitor your entire work. They can get very screwed up. This particular one seems to work very well, though. Try a page or two, and see what you think. It has caught many an error for me.
Comment from Sankey
Glad to see the ratings are working again. I got to fix the previous chapter rating. This was a good read very descriptive and good with all the evidence and emotions and stuff. A couple of suggestions for changes
Mr. Griffin, would (you)like to see them?"
if the dogs [woul](ha)dn't have come out
I guess we are very close to the end. Looking forward to your next offering after this.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Glad to see the ratings are working again. I got to fix the previous chapter rating. This was a good read very descriptive and good with all the evidence and emotions and stuff. A couple of suggestions for changes
Mr. Griffin, would (you)like to see them?"
if the dogs [woul](ha)dn't have come out
I guess we are very close to the end. Looking forward to your next offering after this.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and the catches. I've made the changes. I can promise there will be surprises.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely done.
She's not used to her listening to her heart." - a little awkward?
Don't you think the judge would have awarded damages from Griffin?
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Nicely done.
She's not used to her listening to her heart." - a little awkward?
Don't you think the judge would have awarded damages from Griffin?
Best wishes.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Probably but really doesn't move the story along. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I enjoyed it over coffee and a bagel. I enjoyed this chapter from beginning to end, for me it was not too long. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. I enjoyed it over coffee and a bagel. I enjoyed this chapter from beginning to end, for me it was not too long. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from amahra
Oh, wow, I was hoping Cord would pop the question, but he did say, he'd know when it was the right time. This chapter was a delightful tease, Barbara. And whoopee to the judge for upgrading the charges and giving that snake 40 + years with no parole.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Oh, wow, I was hoping Cord would pop the question, but he did say, he'd know when it was the right time. This chapter was a delightful tease, Barbara. And whoopee to the judge for upgrading the charges and giving that snake 40 + years with no parole.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragment.
Comment from nomi338
Your storytelling is really awesome. The lack of raw sex and raw language may bore some, but for me, it is perfect. This story like the last one has characters I can see myself in. Not only that, the characters represent people I would be and could be friends with. Great job.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Your storytelling is really awesome. The lack of raw sex and raw language may bore some, but for me, it is perfect. This story like the last one has characters I can see myself in. Not only that, the characters represent people I would be and could be friends with. Great job.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
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Thank you for your encouragement. I needed to hear it.
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You may consider me a staunch supporter. As far as I am concerned anyone who criticizes your writing is blind to real talent.
