Open Your Hands
Practice Gratitude34 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and good story to go with it, Sandra.
-You do a good job with the dialogue.
-The older sister shares her thoughts as the
younger one is dealing with many changes in her
life just because of her age and wanting to fit in.
-She doesn't know how to accomplish that and
her sister has good advice: "Unclench your fist."
-A very good concluding line shows her
understanding and love for her sister.
-A good entry; good luck, and have a great 2023!!!
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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-Nice artwork and good story to go with it, Sandra.
-You do a good job with the dialogue.
-The older sister shares her thoughts as the
younger one is dealing with many changes in her
life just because of her age and wanting to fit in.
-She doesn't know how to accomplish that and
her sister has good advice: "Unclench your fist."
-A very good concluding line shows her
understanding and love for her sister.
-A good entry; good luck, and have a great 2023!!!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Thank you for the comments and review. Blessings for you and yours in 2023!
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You are very welcome and appreciate your reply.
Comment from karenina
And this is precisely why I always wanted a sister! Excellent dialogue only contest entry...
I thought back to those times in my life I could barely bear the weight of the chip on my shoulder.
Great message, gently delivered.
Virtual six as I'm out, as always, by the end of the week!
Karenina
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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And this is precisely why I always wanted a sister! Excellent dialogue only contest entry...
I thought back to those times in my life I could barely bear the weight of the chip on my shoulder.
Great message, gently delivered.
Virtual six as I'm out, as always, by the end of the week!
Karenina
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Lady K, thank you for the comments and review. Blessings for you and yours in 2023!
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Same to you, Sandra!
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Thanks!
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Thank you so much for your review.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
Ah, angst. This gives off the vibe of a teenager. The language fits the situation. The exchange seems natural and unforced. The narrative stays on point. The images are clear.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Ah, angst. This gives off the vibe of a teenager. The language fits the situation. The exchange seems natural and unforced. The narrative stays on point. The images are clear.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Thank you for the comments and review. Blessings for you and yours in 2023!
Comment from lancellot
Yes, it's hard to shake hands and make a friend, if your hand is clenched into a fist.
This is so nice, wise and heartwarming, I can see those 'secret FanStory voters' getting all misty eyed.
Early Congrats.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Yes, it's hard to shake hands and make a friend, if your hand is clenched into a fist.
This is so nice, wise and heartwarming, I can see those 'secret FanStory voters' getting all misty eyed.
Early Congrats.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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It's always good to know how to read a room. It's a survival trait I learned many years ago after many ass whippings. Thank you for the comments and review. Blessings for you and yours in 2023!
Comment from jmdg1954
Nicely written though I'm not a fan of the chosen font. It made it slightly difficult to read (my opinion).
With that aside, I can certainly see this conversation between two sisters. I liked the last line about unclenching the fists to be able to receive a handful of goodness.
Cheers. John
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Nicely written though I'm not a fan of the chosen font. It made it slightly difficult to read (my opinion).
With that aside, I can certainly see this conversation between two sisters. I liked the last line about unclenching the fists to be able to receive a handful of goodness.
Cheers. John
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thanks for your comments and review.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Open Your Hands" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Good luck with your contest entry and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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"Open Your Hands" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Good luck with your contest entry and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from prettybluebirds
I remember those older-sister conversations. I had three older sisters, and the all had their own advice to give. Your story is nicely written. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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I remember those older-sister conversations. I had three older sisters, and the all had their own advice to give. Your story is nicely written. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thanks for your supportive review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a great dialogue offering good advice to any willing to accept that much of their unhappiness is because of the face they show the world. Have a wonderful New Year.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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This is a great dialogue offering good advice to any willing to accept that much of their unhappiness is because of the face they show the world. Have a wonderful New Year.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the review. Continued blessings in 2023!
Comment from Wendy G
Excellent write, and so true. A good entry for the dialogue only contest, because the speech is natural and authentic and the message is a strong and universal one. Appropriate presentation with a good image as well. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Excellent write, and so true. A good entry for the dialogue only contest, because the speech is natural and authentic and the message is a strong and universal one. Appropriate presentation with a good image as well. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Wendy, for your review. Best wishes to you and yours in the new year!
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Thank you. And wishing you the same. Good health, love happiness ? and productive writing.
Wendy
Comment from judiverse
Great subject for the Dialogue Only contest. Best of luck. It sounds so realistic. Some people do have an attitude that puts others. A clenched fist, like this girl displayed, is a sign of an angry attitude. The older sister tried to make her see that she does have things to be happy about. As her sister mentions, she has her health and a roof over her head and a loving family. The girl says the kids at school don't like her, but with that scowl and clenched fist, it's no wonder. She has an attitude problem. I hope her sister straightens her out. I think you need a comma after Love ya in your last paragraph. judi
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Great subject for the Dialogue Only contest. Best of luck. It sounds so realistic. Some people do have an attitude that puts others. A clenched fist, like this girl displayed, is a sign of an angry attitude. The older sister tried to make her see that she does have things to be happy about. As her sister mentions, she has her health and a roof over her head and a loving family. The girl says the kids at school don't like her, but with that scowl and clenched fist, it's no wonder. She has an attitude problem. I hope her sister straightens her out. I think you need a comma after Love ya in your last paragraph. judi
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Thanks for your comments and review. I will look at that spot.
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You're welcome. Great dialogue, and it should be a strong contender in the contest. judi
