Open Your Hands
Practice Gratitude34 total reviews
Comment from AP Apgar
Now back from the holidays- Happy New year! I like your verse about Attitude very much- excellent picture presentation- depicting a child- very appropriate for the new year - a recognizable topic most everyone encounters in life - themselves and with their children- sure I had this very conversation with my mother! Something to the tune of 'what will be will be'- you did an excellent job explaining to little sis in your poem- you are a good / Mother/teacher indeed! Thank you for sharing Sandra- bless AP
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Now back from the holidays- Happy New year! I like your verse about Attitude very much- excellent picture presentation- depicting a child- very appropriate for the new year - a recognizable topic most everyone encounters in life - themselves and with their children- sure I had this very conversation with my mother! Something to the tune of 'what will be will be'- you did an excellent job explaining to little sis in your poem- you are a good / Mother/teacher indeed! Thank you for sharing Sandra- bless AP
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Happy New Year Paul! I appreciate your review. It didn't win, but it was a fun challenge.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a nice little piece which has a simple yet profound message.
I don't know,but at least they appear happy. - sapce needed after the comma.
Maybe, it's you and your outlook- not sure you need the comma here.
I will help you. Unclench your fist"- need end punctuation before the closing speech marks.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Hi there,
This is a nice little piece which has a simple yet profound message.
I don't know,but at least they appear happy. - sapce needed after the comma.
Maybe, it's you and your outlook- not sure you need the comma here.
I will help you. Unclench your fist"- need end punctuation before the closing speech marks.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the review and the punctuation heads up! I appreciate your attention to details.
Comment from Annmuma
Add the last line to the picture and the story is not only complete, it applies to everyone of us! Great job. Creative and a pleasure to read. Meets all of the contest requirements and I wish you luck. ann
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Add the last line to the picture and the story is not only complete, it applies to everyone of us! Great job. Creative and a pleasure to read. Meets all of the contest requirements and I wish you luck. ann
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the review, Ann and Happy New Year!
Comment from susand3022
Hello Sandra,
Ahhh, the little things in life that those of us that have always had them, take for granted. A roof over our heads, food on the table, and parents that cared enough to get on our cases once in a while, and make sure we didn't get into any real trouble.
I never thought life could be otherwise, until I had a friend whose parents didn't. It was a hard thing to try and learn. I still don't really understand it. I just don't really comprehend how someone can treat their child as though they barely exist, and that when they must deal with them, their existence is felt like a burden. I don't get it.
I was one of the lucky ones, raised in a leftover nuclear family... before they all went to crap. I do, however, relate to the younger of the two in the dialogue. I saw myself in the same way. My sisters had everything I wished I had. They were pretty, popular, funny, they always said the right things. I was the opposite on all fronts. My hair was a complete disaster doing its best to mimic Rosanne Rosanna Danna, I didn't have a bunch of friends the way they did, and everything that came out of my mouth was like, "open mouth, insert leg to thigh." (It still is.)
When we're young, we want what others have instead of what we already have. It's our way to be jealous or angry when we can't get or achieve them. I love the way your story brought these things out.
Have a Happy New Year!
Susan :)
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Hello Sandra,
Ahhh, the little things in life that those of us that have always had them, take for granted. A roof over our heads, food on the table, and parents that cared enough to get on our cases once in a while, and make sure we didn't get into any real trouble.
I never thought life could be otherwise, until I had a friend whose parents didn't. It was a hard thing to try and learn. I still don't really understand it. I just don't really comprehend how someone can treat their child as though they barely exist, and that when they must deal with them, their existence is felt like a burden. I don't get it.
I was one of the lucky ones, raised in a leftover nuclear family... before they all went to crap. I do, however, relate to the younger of the two in the dialogue. I saw myself in the same way. My sisters had everything I wished I had. They were pretty, popular, funny, they always said the right things. I was the opposite on all fronts. My hair was a complete disaster doing its best to mimic Rosanne Rosanna Danna, I didn't have a bunch of friends the way they did, and everything that came out of my mouth was like, "open mouth, insert leg to thigh." (It still is.)
When we're young, we want what others have instead of what we already have. It's our way to be jealous or angry when we can't get or achieve them. I love the way your story brought these things out.
Have a Happy New Year!
Susan :)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Thanks for your sharing and understanding of my entry. I appreciate your review. I wish for you and yours all the best in 2023!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
The last line says it all. This a very powerful message and a lesson in this dialogue-only posting. The older sister leads the younger sister with wisdom and helps her "unclench" her fist.
A very well-written and important message.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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The last line says it all. This a very powerful message and a lesson in this dialogue-only posting. The older sister leads the younger sister with wisdom and helps her "unclench" her fist.
A very well-written and important message.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
When we look at some of the harsh things life has thrown at some people, the bombing of Ukraine, the floods destroying peoples homes, and the fires, and so many other things, I look around and see what I have and know I have nothing to moan about. This is such a good Dialogue only contest entry, and well penned for what is going on in the world at the moment. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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When we look at some of the harsh things life has thrown at some people, the bombing of Ukraine, the floods destroying peoples homes, and the fires, and so many other things, I look around and see what I have and know I have nothing to moan about. This is such a good Dialogue only contest entry, and well penned for what is going on in the world at the moment. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your comments and review.
Comment from jessizero
This was a sweet dialogue-only story about a conversation between two sisters. It made me think of all I have going for me instead of what is going wrong. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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This was a sweet dialogue-only story about a conversation between two sisters. It made me think of all I have going for me instead of what is going wrong. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the review and all the best in 2023!
Comment from LJbutterfly
A very powerful message is delivered in this dialogue only story. I most appreciated the teacher-student tone of the older sister sharing food for thought with her younger sister. Her advice about a tightly clenched fist can benefit us all. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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A very powerful message is delivered in this dialogue only story. I most appreciated the teacher-student tone of the older sister sharing food for thought with her younger sister. Her advice about a tightly clenched fist can benefit us all. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Thanks for your review. Blessings in 2023!
Comment from Thomas Blanks
This dialog-only story is well-written, has a wonderful message, and resonated with me. Good luck in the contest.
There are just two very minor spacing issues. In two places, you have a space between the open quote mark and the beginning of the sentence. I have copied the two sentences below if you wish to fix them...
Regards,
Thomas
" Maybe, it's you and your outlook. You do have things to be happy about."
" Because, a tightly clenched fist can never receive a handful of goodness. I had to learn that too. Love ya, little sis."
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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This dialog-only story is well-written, has a wonderful message, and resonated with me. Good luck in the contest.
There are just two very minor spacing issues. In two places, you have a space between the open quote mark and the beginning of the sentence. I have copied the two sentences below if you wish to fix them...
Regards,
Thomas
" Maybe, it's you and your outlook. You do have things to be happy about."
" Because, a tightly clenched fist can never receive a handful of goodness. I had to learn that too. Love ya, little sis."
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Thanks, Thomas, for the heads up for the two spacing errors. I appreciate the exceptional rating. Blessings for you and yours in 2023!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
You seem to have a personality that personifies the positivity camped within one of these subjects. Just look at your smile on your profile.
Dyn-o-mite! Jimmy Walker's teeth never looked so good.
Now, you wrote "a family who is doing" feel wrong to be. Who knows why?
Family/is plural/singular, perhaps. I reread it as "a family which is doing" and it felt better to me. idk. You are usually right.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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You seem to have a personality that personifies the positivity camped within one of these subjects. Just look at your smile on your profile.
Dyn-o-mite! Jimmy Walker's teeth never looked so good.
Now, you wrote "a family who is doing" feel wrong to be. Who knows why?
Family/is plural/singular, perhaps. I reread it as "a family which is doing" and it felt better to me. idk. You are usually right.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2022
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Who is used for people, and which is used for objects. Thank you for the review. Blessings for you and yours in 2023!
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I never knew who and which were connected to people and objects. Thanks.
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Yes, it would be.
John who is my neighbor..........
The book which is my favorite.........sometimes there are exceptions with which but who is always used especially connected with people.
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Understood. I'm still learning at seventy-five. That a reason to stay alive. HNY
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I wish for you and all those you love all the best in 2023!
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back at cha'
