Just Dance
Essence poem for the contest7 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi June,
This is a well done essence poem that tells us in simple words and rhymes what we are all meant to do in life. That is to enjoy life and try our best to remove disharmony from the world.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your day and weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Hi June,
This is a well done essence poem that tells us in simple words and rhymes what we are all meant to do in life. That is to enjoy life and try our best to remove disharmony from the world.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your day and weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind words! I?m glad you liked these sentiments.
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You are most kindly welcome, June.
Joan
Comment from Sugarray77
Judy, great job on this verse and kudos on your talented write and presentation. Your theme is superbly delivered and relatable to all of your readers. I love the theme of dancing and releasing strife. I wish you luck in the contest!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
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Judy, great job on this verse and kudos on your talented write and presentation. Your theme is superbly delivered and relatable to all of your readers. I love the theme of dancing and releasing strife. I wish you luck in the contest!!
Melissa
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
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Thanks, Melissa, for your kind feedback. Thought I would this year with some positive thoughts. Just put on your red shoes and dance?
Comment from Mark D. R.
June,
I really enjoy the overall presentation for your contest entry. Obviously, your syllable format and rhyme scheme nicely satisfy the requirements. Your message is a strong statement about living the moment - THANKS for that!
Mark
P.S. Not a fan of fancy fonts for posts even when the message may seem to warrant the same. Also, while initial caps may be your poetry preference, IMHO then punctuation seems appropriate, especially after the last line.
I also favor a larger font size to improve visibility to FS reviewers.
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June,
I really enjoy the overall presentation for your contest entry. Obviously, your syllable format and rhyme scheme nicely satisfy the requirements. Your message is a strong statement about living the moment - THANKS for that!
Mark
P.S. Not a fan of fancy fonts for posts even when the message may seem to warrant the same. Also, while initial caps may be your poetry preference, IMHO then punctuation seems appropriate, especially after the last line.
I also favor a larger font size to improve visibility to FS reviewers.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
Comment from karenina
I do love internal rhymes, particularly when they flow so naturally within a poem ~ even a two-line poem! Beautiful image and this reminds me of that old adage "Dance like nobody's watching!" I have zero dancing ability --but that doesn't stop me! (smile)
Good luck witht he contest!
Karenina
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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I do love internal rhymes, particularly when they flow so naturally within a poem ~ even a two-line poem! Beautiful image and this reminds me of that old adage "Dance like nobody's watching!" I have zero dancing ability --but that doesn't stop me! (smile)
Good luck witht he contest!
Karenina
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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You need to put on your red shoes like David Bowie suggested! Glad you enjoyed this short one with a positive message to end this year. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
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Merry Christmas!
Comment from Debbie Pope
These essence poems are such a challenge. You mastered it with the appropriate rhymes and a theme as well.
Dancing does take me away from my problems. I can't seem to worry and dance at the same time.
Well done. And, Merry Christmas June.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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These essence poems are such a challenge. You mastered it with the appropriate rhymes and a theme as well.
Dancing does take me away from my problems. I can't seem to worry and dance at the same time.
Well done. And, Merry Christmas June.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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You need to put on your red shoes like David Bowie suggested! Glad you enjoyed this short one with a positive message to end this year. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Just Dance"
This is a Two Line Contest entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Good luck with your contest entry and have a Blessed Christmas.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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"Just Dance"
This is a Two Line Contest entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Good luck with your contest entry and have a Blessed Christmas.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts and positive feedback. It is much appreciated.
Comment from royowen
You've written the perfect essence poem, and with the end rhyme and the inner rhyme, well done you've stood up before the scrutiny, as you always do, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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You've written the perfect essence poem, and with the end rhyme and the inner rhyme, well done you've stood up before the scrutiny, as you always do, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you! I?m glad you enjoyed this short with a positive reminder to end this year with hope.
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Most welcome
