Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

Your story is fantastical and so full of color and energy. Well done on dialogue, character development, vivid settings and lots of action. I enjoyed reading it.

Melissa

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023

Thank you so much, Melissa.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I think you've done a great job with this story my friend Amahra, the construction of a whole new world, not unlike Lord of the Rings, in which Tolkien built a whole new world of myth and magic, Tolkien was a close friend of CS Lewis, I miss Brehira as does Gangus, beautifully written, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Thank you, Roy. I can't say enough how much I appreciate your support of this story. Blessings to you throughout this new year. :))

reply by royowen on 02-Jan-2023

Most welcome Amahra

Comment from Ric Myworld

Exceptional

I was just about to get worried and come looking for you, but was thankful to see your name pop up in my inbox. LOL. Happy New Year to you and yours, sweet lady! :-)

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Thank you, Rick. Happy New Year to you as well.

Comment from Helena Cheu

Excellent

You write like someone who's read and memorized all of Lord of the Rings; meaning you write very well but in a style that I don't necessarily find enjoyable.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023

Happy New!

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

This is an intriguing story; I will have to follow this one to find out where you are going with it. Your descriptions are vivid, and the dialogue is believable. Nice writing.

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

This is a wonderful journey into another time in world.
There's another writer here who writes similar dealing with goblins dragons and kings.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thank you, Rick, for reading my work. BTW, who is this other fantasy writer. I'd love to read his or her work?

reply by Ricky1024 on 01-Jan-2023

Douglas
Douglas Goff.
He's got a chapter ready.
Tell me later what you think amahra.
Ricky

reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Oh, I read his December 6th post, "Things that go Bump in the Night" flash Fiction contest entry. I awarded him 5 stars and said I liked it. But I thought you said dragons and elves...

reply by Ricky1024 on 01-Jan-2023

His book is called Lords of the Glen and this chapter that's coming up is entitled, "A Glimmer of Hope"
Doctor Ricky

reply by Ricky1024 on 01-Jan-2023

His book is called Lords of the Glen and this chapter that's coming up is entitled, "A Glimmer of Hope"
Doctor Ricky

reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Lords of the Glen, great title, sounds good. "Thanks!

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

A well written chapter that I enjoyed reading. I enjoyed the action and had to keep reading so I could find out what was happening next. You did a great job and have a wonderful afternoon. Shirley

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thank you, Shirley.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this addition with us. I enjoyed reading and had almost forgot about this story. Please don't wait so long to post.

Interrupting, the head nurse stood. "I do apologize, My Lord, but it is time for the little ones to be in bed." (comma needed after 'stood')

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thank you so much for this review, Barbara. I really appreciate it and the correction.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi amahra, I loved this chapter where the old Gangus tells his tale. No wonder the children listened, raptured wit what they heard. What a wonderful story you're.putting together. Happy New Year, Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thank you very much.

Comment from Jay Squires

Exceptional

There is no one here who writes like you do, Amahra. You are the queen of Epic Fantasy. There hasn't been a battle where Gangas and his men were not outmanned (or out beasted). That's where the magic comes in. When Gangas ultimately wins the battle it is only after huge losses and a lot of bloodshed. One small thing I noticed:

They appeared to communicate with one much bigger than them; [... communicate with one much bigger than they {were is implied. You wouldn't say bigger than them were.} ]

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

Thank you Jay for your continuous support of this story. Yes, I'm familiar with that rule but found using 'than' is rather tricky depending how it's being used.
John is stronger than I. Is correct. John picked it up because he was stronger than me. Is also correct. Here, 'than' is not being used to compare my strength to John's. The former sentence, John and I were being compared.

From Google
Reader?s question: Which is correct?

He is younger than me.
He is younger than I.

If you see ?than? as a conjunction, then ?He is younger than I? is correct. The second construction, ?He is younger than me?, is using ?than? as a preposition.

reply by Jay Squires on 01-Jan-2023

Thanks for pointing that out. I'll have to check that rule out more closely. Conversationally, of course, "me" is acceptable (and "I" sounds snooty). But written grammar is a different animal. Well, I'll need to do my research. Thanks for the heads up.

reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023

I'll check it out a little more, myself. Tell me what you find. :))