Death By Murder
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Comment from lyenochka
There were some echoes of Steinbeck's Of Mice and Men in the relationship between Mason and Paddy. What I appreciated most of this chapter was that you brought out the human side of criminals, that they are not just 100% evil but have love for their own family.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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There were some echoes of Steinbeck's Of Mice and Men in the relationship between Mason and Paddy. What I appreciated most of this chapter was that you brought out the human side of criminals, that they are not just 100% evil but have love for their own family.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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I am glad you mentioned the human side... In this story, I have been practicing or hopefully trying to manage my characters so they aren't seen as just a cop, a criminal, a doctor. I want the reader to see more of the individual.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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You succeeded, Carol! Love it when the characters are real people.
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have been a busy lady today, completing two chapters. I didn't like the ending of this one so well. It was sad the brothers had to die for no reason. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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You have been a busy lady today, completing two chapters. I didn't like the ending of this one so well. It was sad the brothers had to die for no reason. Keep writing.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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I agree I didn't like the story except for Mason loving his brother through their last breath. I just thought it might get too confusing if I had three sets of people chasing after Lance and Bennie... the gangsters, the boys, and the cops. Too many strings to tie together for this old lady's mind. LOL
Hugs, Carol
Comment from John Ciarmello
Okay, I'm back in your business! This was a thrilling chapter and a sad one. I'm pretty sure I know what's going on now with your welcome synopsis. Great chapter, Carol! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Okay, I'm back in your business! This was a thrilling chapter and a sad one. I'm pretty sure I know what's going on now with your welcome synopsis. Great chapter, Carol! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you, John. I was glad to be of help and thrilled that you are continuing the journey with me. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from royowen
And I was developing a liking for these sweet characters, deciding to turn there backs on the diamonds and go on their merry way, they are now dead. Without recompense for their repentance. Well done Carol, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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And I was developing a liking for these sweet characters, deciding to turn there backs on the diamonds and go on their merry way, they are now dead. Without recompense for their repentance. Well done Carol, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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I hope our Lord recognized Mason's love for his "slow" thinking brother and blesses him with a better life in the hereafter. Thank you for the review and your kindness.
Smiles, Carol
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Me too
Comment from Shirley McLain
Another chapter full of action. I don't know why the guys were shot. Did Bruser work for a gang or the cops? Just confused. Great job as always. Shirley
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Another chapter full of action. I don't know why the guys were shot. Did Bruser work for a gang or the cops? Just confused. Great job as always. Shirley
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Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Bruiser is Peter Costello's hit man and they thought Mason and Paddy had the jewels. Now they know it's Lance and Bennie so they are off to get them. Those gangsters have no qualms about shooting people. LOL thanks for the review, Shirley. I appreciate it very much.
Hugs, Carol
