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Can a broken heart be mended?

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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Your writing is so well organized and well done that it is easy to whip through 2000 words like I'm right there lived the moments with your characters. I can say that about only a few people on Fanstory. You are a very talented writer.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 15-Dec-2022
    I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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"You're left eye's almost swelled shut" - couple things here, you're should be your and maybe swollen for swelled?

The description of how the abuse escalated is spot on in most cases including Ali blaming herself.

Griffin better hope Cord does not get his hands on him! That situation could get U-G-L-Y real quick.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the catches. I know the difference between you're and your but my fingers automatically type you're and for some reason I read right over it. I have argued with myself over swollen and swelled. Since you mentioned it I changed it. Thank you for the help. I appreciate it.
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Barbara, this is another great chapter. Cord is a good guy and it's obvious he really cares for Ali. I hope they will get that scumbag who did this to her.
What is happening with your father-in-law? Hugs, Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
    John passed away this morning at 5:30. Thank you for asking. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Ulla on 06-Dec-2022
    Oh, I am so sorry, Barbara. My thoughts are with you and yours. A big hug, my friend. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
    Thank you. I need that hug right now.
reply by Ulla on 06-Dec-2022
    Aw, I can imagine.! I'm glad a
    I have that for you and many more xx
Comment from estory
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Super dialogue here. Really top notch, in this intimate conversation between Cord and Ali as he digs into how this physical abuse from her ex started. You dig into all these issues in this chapter, of how hard it is for women to recognize what is happening to them, how hard it is to break out of those relationships, maybe to believe that the love they once believed in is rooted in evil and psychosis. You have some clearly defined characters, the vulnerable victim, the soft hearted compassionate man who is coming to love and protect her. All his emotions seem to be seething within him; feelings for Ali and his anger boiling against the ex. Lots of polish on this as well. This could be another TV script. estory

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sanku
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We would never come to know about God's ways .May be He wills John to live My prayers for you and your family during this tough times.
The chapter is very interesting and we got the information that Ali had been a victim of abuse ..Hope Griffin will be exposed

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
    Thank you for your prayers and the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
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This is another excellent chapter. It is well-written and I do not see any room for improvement. I do not see how Alan could think he would get away with Hurting Ali. I look forward to the next chapter. Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the kind review. I think Alan thought his power over her was strong. He didn't realize she's becoming her own person.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. You and your family are in my thoughts and prayers in your situation that seems to keep getting more difficult. Maybe your father-in-law can offer some answers now.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2022
    Thank you for the kind review. John is now on so much morphine as they wait for his body to die.
Comment from amahra
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Another great instalment, Barbara. Having Cord examine her made me angry with that dirt bag all over again. Good job!

I doubt you find me repulsive, so it must mean you're in pain." [LOL! Love this line.]

"[You're] breathing sounds normal." [I'm sure you meant, "Your" breathing.]


 Comment Written 05-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
    I know better than that but make that mistake often. My fingers don't want to listen. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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Comment from irishauthorme
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This is a great chapter. Ali's reaction to the abuse she suffered is all too common among abused women. Griffin's attack is also too common, their women are possessions, to be dominated and abused.
The exam by Cord was tactfully done. He covered all the injuries just as he should have.
Incidentally, on the ranch where I was raised, we always went to the local vet, and never drove the 42 miles into town to see an MD.
I hope you get some answers on John, many things are beyond the current medical knowledge.
Blessings, irish

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
    So far, John is in Hospice, and we are waiting. Thank you for asking. Yes, Ali has some rebuilding. I was afraid, I'd get some backlash because Cord's vet, but I have not. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jmdg1954
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I recall reading your post from last week about your father-in-law and your dealings and anguish with his current wife.

Again, I recently rejoined FS after a long absence. I came across your post and decided to jump in. I will go back and read a couple of previous chapters to get a feel since this chapter did peak my interest. I need to find out what happens to the S.O.B. who was abusive. I detest people like that.

Looking forward.... John

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2022


reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
    Thank you for dropping by and reading. I appreciate it.