A Soul Amiss
A poem.35 total reviews
Comment from newilk
what a lovely soothing poem, the writing style makes it feel as though you're gently being carried through the read almost like drifting throuhg a dream
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what a lovely soothing poem, the writing style makes it feel as though you're gently being carried through the read almost like drifting throuhg a dream
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
Comment from irishauthorme
Sure glad you regained your mind, and along with it, your talent for composing the interesting and readable!
Because of my ancestry, have been a student of ancient Gaelic, so hard to pronounce.
"A voice now flesh stands all aglow," great line. Someone emerging from a sound into a lady that sees you as a "soul amiss, and throows you a healing kiss.
Good work!
irish
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Sure glad you regained your mind, and along with it, your talent for composing the interesting and readable!
Because of my ancestry, have been a student of ancient Gaelic, so hard to pronounce.
"A voice now flesh stands all aglow," great line. Someone emerging from a sound into a lady that sees you as a "soul amiss, and throows you a healing kiss.
Good work!
irish
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I really did enjoy this poem. It is lyrical and lovely with an excellent rhyme.
You opened up your poet toolbox to present a delightful poem of sound.
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I really did enjoy this poem. It is lyrical and lovely with an excellent rhyme.
You opened up your poet toolbox to present a delightful poem of sound.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
Comment from barbara.wilkey
The flow of this very romantic poem is musical. The rhyming scheme helps with that. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I am a sucker for romance, and you just gave me my fix.
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The flow of this very romantic poem is musical. The rhyming scheme helps with that. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I am a sucker for romance, and you just gave me my fix.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
Comment from Dawn Munro
*s.i.g.h.*... Now, this -- this is romance in its purest form. How incredibly beautiful! The rhyme and near rhyme, the meter -- it's flawless. But best of all is the scenery your words paint in my mind, the sound! That first stanza... *s.i,g.h.*
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*s.i.g.h.*... Now, this -- this is romance in its purest form. How incredibly beautiful! The rhyme and near rhyme, the meter -- it's flawless. But best of all is the scenery your words paint in my mind, the sound! That first stanza... *s.i,g.h.*
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
Comment from Begin Again
A very moving and romantic poem... one can feel the gentleness of a song within the words. I am not a poet but I can enjoy all that you share. Well done.
Smiles, Carol
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A very moving and romantic poem... one can feel the gentleness of a song within the words. I am not a poet but I can enjoy all that you share. Well done.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and very well written poem you have penned my friend. You used very good descriptive words that were like a melody to the soul as I read them. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teir
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This is a very beautiful and very well written poem you have penned my friend. You used very good descriptive words that were like a melody to the soul as I read them. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teir
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Tom,
I think this is a romantic poem use allusions to Greek mythology
to lament a lost love or maybe a long distance love affair.
I like the use of song as a language of the soul. From watching "The Outlander", I can agree the Gaelic is a hard language to follow but still beautiful.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Holidays.
Joan
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Hi Tom,
I think this is a romantic poem use allusions to Greek mythology
to lament a lost love or maybe a long distance love affair.
I like the use of song as a language of the soul. From watching "The Outlander", I can agree the Gaelic is a hard language to follow but still beautiful.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
Comment from Brady Bowen
Have mercy. This is absolutely gorgeous. Descriptive, clever phrasing and syntax make it flow so easily. Showcasing longing for your person's linguistic flavor is an interesting theme. Keep writing!
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Have mercy. This is absolutely gorgeous. Descriptive, clever phrasing and syntax make it flow so easily. Showcasing longing for your person's linguistic flavor is an interesting theme. Keep writing!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
Comment from jake cosmos aller
another masterful traditional verse on finding true love. I like the last stanza the best As now across the crystal flow
A voice now flesh stands all aglow.
She sees I stand a soul amiss
And throws me one kind blissful kiss.
i don't know if I made this offer to you earlier. I like your stuff and would love to feature you as a guest poet on my blog.
I have a blog, "the world according to cosmos" (https://theworldaccordingtocosmos.com" and a podcast on Spotify and elsewhere, and would love to feature your work as a guest poet. I have made this offer to others on Fan Story and Writing Com whose work I admire. If interested, send me five poems, a bio, photos, links to social media, etc. Once I post it I will send you a link so you share it. I have about 5,000 followers now. Send anything to authorjakecosmosaller@gmail.com. It makes take up to a week to post it, once I do so I will send you a link so you can forward it to your friends.
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another masterful traditional verse on finding true love. I like the last stanza the best As now across the crystal flow
A voice now flesh stands all aglow.
She sees I stand a soul amiss
And throws me one kind blissful kiss.
i don't know if I made this offer to you earlier. I like your stuff and would love to feature you as a guest poet on my blog.
I have a blog, "the world according to cosmos" (https://theworldaccordingtocosmos.com" and a podcast on Spotify and elsewhere, and would love to feature your work as a guest poet. I have made this offer to others on Fan Story and Writing Com whose work I admire. If interested, send me five poems, a bio, photos, links to social media, etc. Once I post it I will send you a link so you share it. I have about 5,000 followers now. Send anything to authorjakecosmosaller@gmail.com. It makes take up to a week to post it, once I do so I will send you a link so you can forward it to your friends.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
