Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

I love this because it resonates so well with me. A health condition has obliged me to move like a tortoise! I'm filled with an impulse to be active and do so much but the reality is different. And yet, I can see the benefits
of slowing one's progress and engaging more with less. A lovely two liner.
Best of luck in the contest, Debbie

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023

Thanks for reading, and sharing your thoughts!

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

I see by reading your other reviews that your poem has been revised to this current state. Looks good and has something to say about being slow but sure.

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022

Thanks for the review.

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

"Slow Forward Motion" is a Two Line Contest entry.
Hard to see.
Perhaps it's just me?
I gave it five stars Anthony and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky1024

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2022

Thanks. And replying in rhyme is cool. I'm new here. I will have to figure out why it's not showing up.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Better than nothing - still
progress - can dreams fill!

Your poem is showing up as black on black so you will need to edit to make the text white. That is why I copied your poem in the review box.

I think you also need one more syllable in the second line. But rhymes are good, and it's a lovely entry into this contest.

Welcome to FanStory. I think you will enjoy your stay. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2022

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2022

Thanks. You are right, I'm missing a syllable. Also, I have no idea why it's black on black, how to see it now that it's posted, or how to fix that. Help?