The Pick Up
Trochaic Meter in the style of Poe25 total reviews
Comment from royowen
This has has all sorts of device in it, as well as the meter type, the internal rhyme, the theme, internally varied and a very good venture, since I joined fanstory I have learnt so many forms, and even contributed and invented some myself, this is fantastic Melissa. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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This has has all sorts of device in it, as well as the meter type, the internal rhyme, the theme, internally varied and a very good venture, since I joined fanstory I have learnt so many forms, and even contributed and invented some myself, this is fantastic Melissa. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much, Roy. I always enjoy reading your verses and the different forms you have created. I appreciate your thoughts on this one. :)
Melissa
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My privilege Melissa
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is a great format and wonderfully written! The picture matches the haunting tone of the story perfectly.
I loved the twist at the end. This was vert well done. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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This is a great format and wonderfully written! The picture matches the haunting tone of the story perfectly.
I loved the twist at the end. This was vert well done. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Thank you Douglass. So glad you enjoyed it.
Melissa
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good no rules poetry contest entry. The text is a great size. The message was suspenseful, and I was really surprised the person being arrested was the friend Doris. Is there a reason it is not written in verses/stanzas? It looks like large paragraphs. I would expand the poem box. I would drop the first line down one space and go to the last word in the poem and hit enter a couple of times. This will expand the poem box and not make the poem look crowded in the poem box. The visual fits the text well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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This is a good no rules poetry contest entry. The text is a great size. The message was suspenseful, and I was really surprised the person being arrested was the friend Doris. Is there a reason it is not written in verses/stanzas? It looks like large paragraphs. I would expand the poem box. I would drop the first line down one space and go to the last word in the poem and hit enter a couple of times. This will expand the poem box and not make the poem look crowded in the poem box. The visual fits the text well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much Sandra!... and Happy Birthday!!
Melissa
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You are welcome, and thanks for the
B-Day wish!
Comment from pome lover
well, you had fun with it, and it was fun to read - much enjoyed, but whos's Doris?
I've written some fun ones using Poe's "The Raven," also, and it was a blast.
Good luck in the contest.
Katharine
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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well, you had fun with it, and it was fun to read - much enjoyed, but whos's Doris?
I've written some fun ones using Poe's "The Raven," also, and it was a blast.
Good luck in the contest.
Katharine
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Hello Katherine. I so appreciate your review and I would love to read your versions. Thank you.
Melissa
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thanks, Melissa. They're on Fan Story, but pretty far back. But I still have no idea of Doris's identity? Or does it not matter?
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Doris is the convict that escaped, but is a figment of my imagination. Doris is in the poem because she rhymes with forest.. in the first part of the first line. :)
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oops. sorry. missed that.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Whatever this is that you declare, I am fine with but please don't expect me to understand the form herein structured. When I write I delight in listening to what my id directs me to type using my keyboard for I marvel to know I know not what the next word that comes forth from my itty-bitty brain.
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Whatever this is that you declare, I am fine with but please don't expect me to understand the form herein structured. When I write I delight in listening to what my id directs me to type using my keyboard for I marvel to know I know not what the next word that comes forth from my itty-bitty brain.
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2022
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Haha, thanks Tom. I don't usually write in trochaic meter, but, alas, it was the assignment. So glad you chimed in with your witty review... Thank you.
Melissa
