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Comment from Eternal Muse
A well written and presented love sonnet with a striking font. Excellent imagery, visuals and I love your artwork.
It was so romantic of your husband to do what he did, and two hearts always symbolize love. You are very lucky to have such a husband. I really enjoyed it and wish you luck in the contest.
One suggestion: your third line of the first stanza is off iambic mater (da-DUM-da-DUM). Suggestion:
Oh, what a joy to see what he had done!
Thank you very much for sharing and good luck in the booths.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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A well written and presented love sonnet with a striking font. Excellent imagery, visuals and I love your artwork.
It was so romantic of your husband to do what he did, and two hearts always symbolize love. You are very lucky to have such a husband. I really enjoyed it and wish you luck in the contest.
One suggestion: your third line of the first stanza is off iambic mater (da-DUM-da-DUM). Suggestion:
Oh, what a joy to see what he had done!
Thank you very much for sharing and good luck in the booths.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Oh I just love you my friend. I have struggled and changed that over and over and just didn't feel right about it either. I will definitely use your suggestion, and I wish I had a reviewer nomination left. Look for one from me next month. Thank you for your kind review, words and especially your very kind suggestion!!! Bless you my dear friend.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-Thanks for the notes.
-You told a really good story in this sonnet.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like the image "Romantic view"
that adds to the introductory verse.
-A very good second verse about the design.
-A very good volta that let's us know
your husband didn't know what to say
to your expression of love for what he had done.
-A very good closing couplet, too.
-I enjoyed reading this; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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-Nice image and presentation.
-Thanks for the notes.
-You told a really good story in this sonnet.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like the image "Romantic view"
that adds to the introductory verse.
-A very good second verse about the design.
-A very good volta that let's us know
your husband didn't know what to say
to your expression of love for what he had done.
-A very good closing couplet, too.
-I enjoyed reading this; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Pam, could you be any sweeter? This is the dream review of all of us, and I can't thank you enough!! So please look for a reviewer nomination from me in December. Lol, Even tho you don't know yet who "me" is, but I just want you to know how very much I appreciate the in depth review. So many I wonder if they read, because I am confused by the review. And yours was fantastic! Thank you again my lovely friend!!
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WOW! This is a spectacular reply. You are very welcome for the review. But it is good writing that brings it out. Your appreciation of what I said means a lot to me, and I look forward to seeing who "me" is😊
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😘 Your words were so gracious and I will remember. Thanks again my dear friend
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I appreciate your reply, and you are very welcome!
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Thanks for sharing, I am glad they were meaningful to you.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Whomever/whatever made the two hearts is a moot
point, Mystery Author. The important and lasting
outcome was the thought as you stated in your contest
entry. The picture was amazing. I could see how it may
have been made, but that is in the eye of one who reads.
You did a great job with the style of the sonnet as required.
I loved that yours was about love, as I believe all sonnets
should be always. Your words were well thought out and
showed the loving relationship you and hubby have. I liked
everything about your sonnet--the image, the smooth meter,
the adoring words, and the fun twist at the end.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Whomever/whatever made the two hearts is a moot
point, Mystery Author. The important and lasting
outcome was the thought as you stated in your contest
entry. The picture was amazing. I could see how it may
have been made, but that is in the eye of one who reads.
You did a great job with the style of the sonnet as required.
I loved that yours was about love, as I believe all sonnets
should be always. Your words were well thought out and
showed the loving relationship you and hubby have. I liked
everything about your sonnet--the image, the smooth meter,
the adoring words, and the fun twist at the end.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thank you Jan for such a lovely review and comments. I truly appreciate them and the gift of six stars. You are so very sweet and I thank you again my dear friend.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very sweet and well written Sonnet you have penned about your husband's romantic side. Just keep believing it my friend. It looks like it was made by a man somehow, not two cars. Thank you for sharing! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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This is a very sweet and well written Sonnet you have penned about your husband's romantic side. Just keep believing it my friend. It looks like it was made by a man somehow, not two cars. Thank you for sharing! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much Teri. You are so sweet and I truly appreciate your kind comments. Thanks again my dear friend!
Comment from dragonpoet
This does seem like a very romantic act of love. I can't see how a car turning around could do this. But I guess if he says so, I guess it's true. I
bet you were disappointed.
I like the font. It seems to match the old style poem which is usually used for love poems.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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This does seem like a very romantic act of love. I can't see how a car turning around could do this. But I guess if he says so, I guess it's true. I
bet you were disappointed.
I like the font. It seems to match the old style poem which is usually used for love poems.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much Joan. As always you are so sweet. I just showed my husband the picture again of the tracks and told him I still didn't get how they were made by cars. Then he showed me how the front and back wheels would make different tracks because when they pulled out, they went in the same direction.. I still don't quite understand it tho. Thanks for your lovely review my dear friend.
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My pleasure.
Joan
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, this poem is so sweet and endearing. Us women are always the romantic, always seeing through rose colored glasses.
Your poem reads and flows well and has good rhyming and sensory appeal throughout. I especially liked:
He's wondering aloud, what did he miss
I saw his words, that I had been mistaken
(At times like this, Glen needs to just take a bow, and figure out the mystery later on - lol.)
Love the photo. Love the sentiment. A poem of love. Six-stars for you.
As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Hello author, this poem is so sweet and endearing. Us women are always the romantic, always seeing through rose colored glasses.
Your poem reads and flows well and has good rhyming and sensory appeal throughout. I especially liked:
He's wondering aloud, what did he miss
I saw his words, that I had been mistaken
(At times like this, Glen needs to just take a bow, and figure out the mystery later on - lol.)
Love the photo. Love the sentiment. A poem of love. Six-stars for you.
As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much Margaret for such a lovely review and comments.
I truly appreciate your generosity with your gift of six stars. Thanks again my dear friend.
Comment from bob cullen
I like this it reveals either a twisted sense of humor, or a very brave man. I must be a romantic, I only saw the two hearts until you suggested car tyres. Then I saw nothing, she hit me with a brick. There really are two sides to every story. Very clever.
For your courage alone, you deserve six stars.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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I like this it reveals either a twisted sense of humor, or a very brave man. I must be a romantic, I only saw the two hearts until you suggested car tyres. Then I saw nothing, she hit me with a brick. There really are two sides to every story. Very clever.
For your courage alone, you deserve six stars.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thanks Bob for the awesome review and fun comments! Yes, I still don't understand the dynamics of the tires but he says that is how it happened.
I thank you too Bob for your gift of six stars. I truly appreciate your whole great review, my friend!
Comment from MissMerri
This is so cute! What a funny story! I loved the way you told it, in your perfect meter and rhyme, sticking to the sonnet form, and yet so clearly describing the feelings you had and the unveiling of the truth. So clever and fun! I know this will do well in the contest. Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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This is so cute! What a funny story! I loved the way you told it, in your perfect meter and rhyme, sticking to the sonnet form, and yet so clearly describing the feelings you had and the unveiling of the truth. So clever and fun! I know this will do well in the contest. Well done!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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I thank you Adonna for such a lovely review and comments. This is my first attempt at a Sonnet and just couldn't resist having a little fun with it. Thanks again my sweet friend!
Comment from royowen
What a lovely gesture you thought, but you were wrong, unfortunately. But this is a great entry in this contest my friend, articulately written, in great lowing meter with the precise rhyming and unusual theme. Well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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What a lovely gesture you thought, but you were wrong, unfortunately. But this is a great entry in this contest my friend, articulately written, in great lowing meter with the precise rhyming and unusual theme. Well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Awe Roy, another great review and fun comments. Thank you so very much for the best yet. As always, I truly appreciate it, my sweet friend!
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Well done
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Most welcome
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is a delightful poem. I love the happy thoughts from the believed-to-be thoughtful gesture. Most of all, I loved the surprise ending. The picture is perfect.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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This is a delightful poem. I love the happy thoughts from the believed-to-be thoughtful gesture. Most of all, I loved the surprise ending. The picture is perfect.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Thank you so very much Verna. As always, your review and comments are so sweet and kind. Thanks again my dear friend!
