Bullet
a cinquain14 total reviews
Comment from Regina Elliott
Hello Bill, this is a perfectly
written cinquain. The subject
matter is a bullet to the heart
for sure. Last time I used a
gun was in boot camp. I'm
quite afraid of guns. You
used great imagery. All the
best to you. Blessings ~
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Hello Bill, this is a perfectly
written cinquain. The subject
matter is a bullet to the heart
for sure. Last time I used a
gun was in boot camp. I'm
quite afraid of guns. You
used great imagery. All the
best to you. Blessings ~
Comment Written 03-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Regina
Comment from Eternal Muse
What a great Cinquain! Witty and well presented. A great choice of artwork.
I like your imagery, visuals and artistic presentation here. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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What a great Cinquain! Witty and well presented. A great choice of artwork.
I like your imagery, visuals and artistic presentation here. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you, EM
Comment from Thomas Blanks
This was an interesting choice of topic for a cinquain. Not that there is anything wrong with the choice. (The word "silhouette" is spelled wrong.)
As a former FBI agent, I have shot more holes in those things than I could ever count. We had firearms training four times a year. One day I was shooting with my father-in-law. He shot his target, and I shot mine. we pulled them in to compare. He said, "I did better than you!" (I had shot my rounds in the tiny silhouette in the upper left-hand corner of the target. I said, "Oh! Do you shoot the big one? Oh, okay. Let's do it again." He never shot with me again.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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This was an interesting choice of topic for a cinquain. Not that there is anything wrong with the choice. (The word "silhouette" is spelled wrong.)
As a former FBI agent, I have shot more holes in those things than I could ever count. We had firearms training four times a year. One day I was shooting with my father-in-law. He shot his target, and I shot mine. we pulled them in to compare. He said, "I did better than you!" (I had shot my rounds in the tiny silhouette in the upper left-hand corner of the target. I said, "Oh! Do you shoot the big one? Oh, okay. Let's do it again." He never shot with me again.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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I guess that makes and even hundred thousand times I?ve spelled that word wrong.
Comment from jaded831
Your poem has a literal meaning and a figurative one. Not only does a bullet leave a hole in the body, it leaves a hole in many hearts. To me this poem speaks to me. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Your poem has a literal meaning and a figurative one. Not only does a bullet leave a hole in the body, it leaves a hole in many hearts. To me this poem speaks to me. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Jade
Comment from Dawn Munro
With a perfect shot like this, one can only hope the shooter is at a gun range! Wow, this is so well done I can almost hear the gun going off, and feel the kickback in my fist. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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With a perfect shot like this, one can only hope the shooter is at a gun range! Wow, this is so well done I can almost hear the gun going off, and feel the kickback in my fist. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Dawn, for the positive review.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful entry for the Cinquain Poetry writing prompt Contest.
Good form and following the rules. Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Wonderful entry for the Cinquain Poetry writing prompt Contest.
Good form and following the rules. Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Gypsy
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This could be taken as a confession of the murder of an unsuspecting victim. Great poem if so, and this is what I will it to be rather prosaic description. Good luck in the contest. Kate xx
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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This could be taken as a confession of the murder of an unsuspecting victim. Great poem if so, and this is what I will it to be rather prosaic description. Good luck in the contest. Kate xx
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Kate
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good cinquain contest entry. The text is great. The message is clearly stated. The speaker acknowledges the goal of being at a firing range-hitting the target center mass. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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This is a good cinquain contest entry. The text is great. The message is clearly stated. The speaker acknowledges the goal of being at a firing range-hitting the target center mass. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Thanks, Sandra
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You are welcome.
Comment from poetwatch
You hit this Cinquain dead center, author. :) I assume you are a hunter or at least believe in the second amendment. I'm a fisherman cause I love to fish. Though I also love to site my rifle on a sillouette. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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You hit this Cinquain dead center, author. :) I assume you are a hunter or at least believe in the second amendment. I'm a fisherman cause I love to fish. Though I also love to site my rifle on a sillouette. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Twenty-two years expert M16A-2 and 9mm service pistol. USMC
Comment from Wendy G
I don't really like the theme, but your poem is very well written, meeting the contest's syllables requirements. Your image is appropriate - and chilling. Sending best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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I don't really like the theme, but your poem is very well written, meeting the contest's syllables requirements. Your image is appropriate - and chilling. Sending best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Wendy