Curfew
10 line poem2 total reviews
Comment from Celyn
The atmosphere of this poem is very Autumn evening but I don't quite get why the windows are PVC and not glass and why is it candlelight? If you are trying to evoke thoughts of a different era then that does not fit with the computer game curfew in the last line. Maybe I am missing something important, in which case sorry.
Good luck with it anyway
Celyn
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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The atmosphere of this poem is very Autumn evening but I don't quite get why the windows are PVC and not glass and why is it candlelight? If you are trying to evoke thoughts of a different era then that does not fit with the computer game curfew in the last line. Maybe I am missing something important, in which case sorry.
Good luck with it anyway
Celyn
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from wierdgrace
wow, this is another great 10 line poem, and I now know why I don't write them often, well written and to the point, and the words flow with the title, and the artwork...well done good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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wow, this is another great 10 line poem, and I now know why I don't write them often, well written and to the point, and the words flow with the title, and the artwork...well done good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Great review zanya
