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Thanksgiving, Texas Style

It' gonna be different this year.

40 total reviews 
Comment from amahra
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Thanksgiving, Texas Style is a well-written story you've written. What I like about the story is that it proves that though we Americans have the same culture, but is distinguished by our sub-culture. What's on a Texas Thanksgiving table (outside of the turkey) differs from a New York or Mississippi table. Great job!

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
    Thank you very much for your fun insightful review. Terry.
Comment from Crystal Gamet
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Great job, got me in the thanksgiving mood. You got it right on how hard it is sometimes to plan holiday get-togethers. I really enjoyed your writing.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
    Crystal, thank you for the six star review. I am delighted you enjoyed the story, have a Happy Thanksgiving. Terry.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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Well! Mother certainly makes the four Ts pay for their easy ride. Looks like they'll be busy the whole of the next 40 days planning and preparing for Christmas, including their supposed day of enjoyment at Thanksgiving. Entertainment... hmm I guess a simple game of charades won't suffice, they'd better call in a playwrite and start learning their lines. Kate xx

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
    LOL, good idea! Kate, thank you for the six stars, and for reading my story. I may have to write a Christmas follow-up. Terry
reply by Katherine M. (k-11) on 15-Nov-2022
    ooh yes. Please do!
Comment from Judy Lawless
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I like Willowmina, Terry! She certainly gave the women of the family a break with her Thanksgiving idea, and they eventually all embraced it. I wonder if they' change their minds knowing they're in charge of Christmas? That's a lot of people to feed and organize, but maybe the exes can be left out of Christmas. Great story. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
    Judy, thank you for reading and reviewing my story. We will see if it goes anywhere for Christmas. Terry.
reply by Judy Lawless on 14-Nov-2022
    You're most welcome, Terry.
Comment from Shirley McLain
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Love the story. It is plausible, as well as the storyline would be heaven, if I could afford it. You did a great job as always. i hope you have a wonderful afternoon. Shirley

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
    Shirley, thank you the six stars review! My grandmother couldn't afforded it either, but we did fun. Terry.
Comment from Soledadpaz
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This story is a hoot. And I love your choice of names, the Four T's and Pyles! And of course, there is no way to have Thanksgiving without the game in the background. Or in the foreground for some people.

To keep the story all in present tense, a few suggestions:

1st paragraph: (has) announced in an email . . .
(has also) hired the well-known

2nd para: (are) unsure what to make of this news.
Tomasina (takes) the lead and (invites)

4th para: Tomasina (chooses)

8th para: Suggest period after Ralph.
Suggest place the dialogue tag within the dialogue, and delete the semicolons from speech. "Whatever works," she says. "I'll do anything to help. I've seen pictures of the Cedar Gardens (and) it's a gorgeous venue with walking trails, waterfalls, and fountains.

9th para: Tomasina (grimaces) at the ladies.

18th para: Tiffany (who has) always considered herself

23rd para: Replace semicolon with period.
Should "didn't" be (don't) lift a finger?

A thoroughly entertaining read!

Sol

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
    Sol, thank you for the six stars and your stellar review! I will work on the tenses, that is a problem I do have, I will study your suggestions for this story and others to come. Terry.
reply by Soledadpaz on 14-Nov-2022
    You're welcome, Terry. Unintentional tense-shifting happens to most of us.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
    I printed your review so I can make to get it right. Thanks, Terry.
Comment from Tpa
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Sounds like a fun-filled holiday with all its food and trimmings. A family sit-down, including the ex's that should be interesting. Just don't talk politics.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
    Amen, no politics, and maybe no religion, so cross out the Amen. LOL, Thank you for reading my story. Terry.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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I want to join that family. Really, no cooking, no dishwashing, no worrying what the kids are doing while I'm cleaning up. Willowmina, please adopt me. You write the most interesting stories. Texas style is great.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
    Carol, thank you for the very kind review! Terry.
Comment from T B Botts
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Hello Terry,
What a great story. Very entertaining. We have seven kids, thirteen grandkids and I think four or six greats, I can't remember. Thank God they won't all be here. As it is, I think there will be thirteen. Fortunately, the cooking will be divided between three homes. I'm hoping that after dinner, before the little kids start getting cranky, they'll all go home, and take most of the food with them. I can only eat left overs for so long.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
    Tom, that does sound like a party. Thank you for reading my story. Terry.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Well, Mom has her brood, in laws, and out laws down to a 't'.
You did a great job describing the upcoming Thanksgiving
with the people, the food, the setting, and the possible
'problem people' who will attend, Terry. Mom has it all figured out
then leaves it to the clan with her sneaky ulterior motive that
they will do Christmas and it better be good.
Thanks for the fun story, Jan

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2022


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
    Jan, thank you very much for reading my story, I am glad you liked it. Terry.