Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Death By Murder - Chap 7"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
19 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Welllll. I don't have "ESPN" or anything (smile)-- but I did mention Bennie would be hard pressed not to take advantage of what he saw as a windfall! For once I anticipated right!
I hate to beat a dead horse to death but going back a few chapters when you described Lance as a Teetotaler, once again I read this passage:
"You mentioned you were with Lance. You can't put any coin in your pocket that way. I can smell the highfalutin bourbon Lance drinks all over you. How will you make a living sitting around drinking with him?"
....And that description seems to be not at all true. What's up? Nobody else sees him as one who would never imbibe!
I must be missing something. (I hate that!)
Help!
Karenina
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Welllll. I don't have "ESPN" or anything (smile)-- but I did mention Bennie would be hard pressed not to take advantage of what he saw as a windfall! For once I anticipated right!
I hate to beat a dead horse to death but going back a few chapters when you described Lance as a Teetotaler, once again I read this passage:
"You mentioned you were with Lance. You can't put any coin in your pocket that way. I can smell the highfalutin bourbon Lance drinks all over you. How will you make a living sitting around drinking with him?"
....And that description seems to be not at all true. What's up? Nobody else sees him as one who would never imbibe!
I must be missing something. (I hate that!)
Help!
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Hounding me, are you....LOL I will get back to changing it, but for now know that I have been schooled.
Love ya
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OOOPS. Sorry! I'm a dog with a bone I guess!
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Just don't bite me!
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See? I go a little loopy when I review so many chapters at once! Excuse me... and I'm definitely not a "biter!" LOL.
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I've got one avid reader who keeps asking for Garth (she loves the cowboy) so I will make a few alterations and accommodate her imagination I think. But she also thinks she's got Peter and Elizabeth figured out and I'm not telling her she might be way off base. Surprise!
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Well. You may have just let the cat out of the bag if she reads reviews as I do!
We'll SEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You have me wondering,"Will Bennie be able to keep his mouth shut?" I look forward to the next chapter. I do not see any need for improvement.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. You have me wondering,"Will Bennie be able to keep his mouth shut?" I look forward to the next chapter. I do not see any need for improvement.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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First and foremost, I want to thank you for continuing to read and enjoy the story. You put a smile on my face. I appreciate your time and your thoughtfulness.
Sorry for the delay but we have just had our 7th death in our family and close friends this year and it's taking a serious toll on all of us. Thank you for understanding.
Apologize for the standard post.... Hugs, Carol
Comment from Shirley McLain
I am going to look up how to write excellent in many languages, so I don't have to keep saying the same thing. I love the story line and the intense feel of it. I think Cuz will cause some problems. Have a great evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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I am going to look up how to write excellent in many languages, so I don't have to keep saying the same thing. I love the story line and the intense feel of it. I think Cuz will cause some problems. Have a great evening. Shirley
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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There are not enough ways to say thank you either.... I appreciate YOU and your thoughts. Life felt like throwing me another curve so I am behind, but my appreciation is no less.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from royowen
Benny and Lance keep on drinking until, what sounds like guns going off, really has them nervous, and Benny scurrying for cover, until he realises it's just a backfiring old bomb, and then with diamonds in his pocket, meets his dad at the bar, well done Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Benny and Lance keep on drinking until, what sounds like guns going off, really has them nervous, and Benny scurrying for cover, until he realises it's just a backfiring old bomb, and then with diamonds in his pocket, meets his dad at the bar, well done Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
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Well done
Comment from Wendy G
Benny's carelessness and greed, along with his big mouth, will prove costly. Lance may very well be in danger, even from his own cousin. I am very much enjoying your story!
Wendy
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Benny's carelessness and greed, along with his big mouth, will prove costly. Lance may very well be in danger, even from his own cousin. I am very much enjoying your story!
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Good morning, Wendy
Hugs and thank you for reading and enjoying the story. I believe danger will be lurking in many places and for many people. They'll also learn that secrets abound in everyone's lives and a friend's bond is sacred.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
It looks like Lance has got some trouble coming his way. He should have kept the diamonds to himself. I am interested in this story even though it is not my favorite type. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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It looks like Lance has got some trouble coming his way. He should have kept the diamonds to himself. I am interested in this story even though it is not my favorite type. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Thank you for continuing to follow the story. Though it is a detective story, I hope I can give you other story lines to enjoy as well.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice story goin'. Good characters.
Nicely written. Good work.
"Course I quit drinkin' fifty-five years ago, but I never could understand the difference between 'good' whiskey and rotgut, even though I drank whatever was in front of me, some name brand, too.Best wishes.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Nice story goin'. Good characters.
Nicely written. Good work.
"Course I quit drinkin' fifty-five years ago, but I never could understand the difference between 'good' whiskey and rotgut, even though I drank whatever was in front of me, some name brand, too.Best wishes.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Don't look at me for answers. LOL Wine is as strong as I go and no nothing about the rest. Thanks for reading and leaving a review. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Oh no! Poor Lance is in real trouble now. First the teller told everyone at the bank. Next Bennie says run with the jewels and now he told his dad who probably has connections with O'Hara's group. Things are heating up really fast. And the nice bartender also noticed the ring. Seems like the cat's out of the bag!
I liked the scare of the the car driving by as a kind of foreshadowing.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Oh no! Poor Lance is in real trouble now. First the teller told everyone at the bank. Next Bennie says run with the jewels and now he told his dad who probably has connections with O'Hara's group. Things are heating up really fast. And the nice bartender also noticed the ring. Seems like the cat's out of the bag!
I liked the scare of the the car driving by as a kind of foreshadowing.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Lance's past will prevent him from stealing the diamonds, but his loyalty to Bennie will tempt him. Bennie was raised by his dad and lived on the streets. Survival trumps all else. And the secret unravels so quickly.
Thanks so much Helen for supporting my story and me. The stars are awesome but you are far more heart warming and exactly what I need.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
These characters can't keep their mouth shut and that and the liquor is going to get them into trouble The thought of money can make some ment lose all sence of write or wrong. Nice chapter.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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These characters can't keep their mouth shut and that and the liquor is going to get them into trouble The thought of money can make some ment lose all sence of write or wrong. Nice chapter.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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The trail of the diamonds will affect so many lives as the secrets unravel. Glad you are enjoying it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
These characters can't keep their mouth shut and that and the liquor is going to get them into trouble The thought of money can make some ment lose all sence of write or wrong. Nice chapter.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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These characters can't keep their mouth shut and that and the liquor is going to get them into trouble The thought of money can make some ment lose all sence of write or wrong. Nice chapter.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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A duplicate I think. Thank you!