Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Death By Murder - Chap 4"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
19 total reviews
Comment from Carol Clark2
Sorry I'm so far behind in reading your book. It's great! I love the cliff-hanger ending of this chapter. Everyone wants to know what's in the box, I'm sure. I'll catch up on the next chapters as soon as I'm able. Glad you're back. Blessings. Carole
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Sorry I'm so far behind in reading your book. It's great! I love the cliff-hanger ending of this chapter. Everyone wants to know what's in the box, I'm sure. I'll catch up on the next chapters as soon as I'm able. Glad you're back. Blessings. Carole
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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I appreciate any time you can spare to read my story. I understand that life seems to have a stranglehold on everything these days. Thank you!
Hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
You still love these cliff hanger, don't you? Luckily you don't make us wait too long to get the next step where the plot deepens even more. I'm so glad to have your entertainig writing back to make me happy I know how to read.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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You still love these cliff hanger, don't you? Luckily you don't make us wait too long to get the next step where the plot deepens even more. I'm so glad to have your entertainig writing back to make me happy I know how to read.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
You made sure the reader must keep reading if we want to know what is in the box. As I said, mystery and crime stories are not my favorite genres. However, this story has captured my interest. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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You made sure the reader must keep reading if we want to know what is in the box. As I said, mystery and crime stories are not my favorite genres. However, this story has captured my interest. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from eliz100
This is an excellent chapter. Thank you for answering my question, so this is a prequel. I love the hook at the end. I can't wait to see what is in that safety deposit box. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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This is an excellent chapter. Thank you for answering my question, so this is a prequel. I love the hook at the end. I can't wait to see what is in that safety deposit box. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter
Comment Written 28-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from lancellot
This is well written and I could follow the chapter easily. Lance does concern me. As his lifestyle doesn't convey how he got through college, law school and the bar. The bank scene was interesting. I don't know how serious this story will be, but no ID was asked by the bank of Lance? and Miss Trainor was surprisingly unprofessional.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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This is well written and I could follow the chapter easily. Lance does concern me. As his lifestyle doesn't convey how he got through college, law school and the bar. The bank scene was interesting. I don't know how serious this story will be, but no ID was asked by the bank of Lance? and Miss Trainor was surprisingly unprofessional.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. My apologies for being so far behind. Life seems to get in the way at times. I do appreciate your thoughts and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, now you'll have me sitting around all day wondering what's in the box. LOL. I guess at my age, a curious mind is a good thing, it can keep me excited enough that I don't forget. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Well, now you'll have me sitting around all day wondering what's in the box. LOL. I guess at my age, a curious mind is a good thing, it can keep me excited enough that I don't forget. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Couldn't have you sitting around all day, now could I? Posted your answer a few minutes ago. But I must admit, it will only lead you to more questions. LOL
Hope you are well and life is treating you good.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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You know how life is. It only gets good long enough for us to catch our breath. But as we've gotten older, we don't expect it to stay good too long anyway. LOL. I'm guessing things are much better for you and yours, or at least I hope so! Smiles and hugs back at ya! Ric
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It's still a dark place because life doesn't like to give up that stranglehold it has on us, but in order to save me, I had to pull back from some of it. I lost some close family members this past few months and I was pushing myself to join them. Then I realized, I had so much more to do,,, like sharing a smile or two with you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I sure am glad your back to share those wonderful smiles of yours! :-)
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Goosebumps and giggles... silly me!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
"Oh, merciful heaven. What have I gotten myself into now?"
That's a cliff hanger and a half if you ask me! We all would like to know what's in the box! We have no choice but to wait for the answer to that question. Well done, Carol Dear. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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"Oh, merciful heaven. What have I gotten myself into now?"
That's a cliff hanger and a half if you ask me! We all would like to know what's in the box! We have no choice but to wait for the answer to that question. Well done, Carol Dear. Nancy:)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Good morning, Nancy
Couldn't leave you standing on the edge of a cliff, now could I? I've posted your answer, but I can't guarantee it won't raise a basket full of other questions. LOL Thank you for enjoying the story.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Jasmine Girl
A cliff hanger. You did a great job describing the scene when Lance visited Rupert and how he was scared by the butler's name "Satan". I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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A cliff hanger. You did a great job describing the scene when Lance visited Rupert and how he was scared by the butler's name "Satan". I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Excellent.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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My dear sweet friend,
You bless me with your thoughtfulness, kind words, and stars. Thank you so much. Just knowing that the story intrigues you is a big enough gift. I am so pleased that you are enjoying it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from John Ciarmello
You always have the perfect hanger! This is really good, and I can't wait to find out what is in the box. Exciting and encapsulating. I'm glad you're back, as I'm sure the rest of your fans are as well. best, JohnC
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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You always have the perfect hanger! This is really good, and I can't wait to find out what is in the box. Exciting and encapsulating. I'm glad you're back, as I'm sure the rest of your fans are as well. best, JohnC
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Thank you, John
I am glad I am back too! It was a dark place. I am thrilled to be in the "bright light" of my friends and knowing they are enjoying my writing. I wasn't sure I would ever be here again but I am certainly thankful it worked out that way.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
So now the mystery is introduced, along with new characters are carefully created - Mr. Rupert Blackwell, and his strange butler, Satan, as well as a frightened Attorney, Lance Fenway. It will take awhile to get all these characters straight, but I look forward to it. It's a great story so far, Carol. Well done.
One little spag: "Then, deep in thought, she startled him when she approached from a different direction, ..." - the adjective phrase, 'deep in thought' is misplaced, describing 'she' rather than him. Suggested fix: He was deep in thought when she approached from a different direction, startling him ...
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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So now the mystery is introduced, along with new characters are carefully created - Mr. Rupert Blackwell, and his strange butler, Satan, as well as a frightened Attorney, Lance Fenway. It will take awhile to get all these characters straight, but I look forward to it. It's a great story so far, Carol. Well done.
One little spag: "Then, deep in thought, she startled him when she approached from a different direction, ..." - the adjective phrase, 'deep in thought' is misplaced, describing 'she' rather than him. Suggested fix: He was deep in thought when she approached from a different direction, startling him ...
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Thanks for the suggestion, Judy. It's great when this weary mind can rely on help from my friends. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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You're most welcome, Carol. :)