Madge's Cafe`
1,950 words. The first Madge story.17 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
Mike, This is a really great story. You had me spell bound reading it all the way through. I think Madge was an angel sent back to earth to help people. I could be really wrong, but it makes sense to me. She was so nice and helpful to so many. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Mike, This is a really great story. You had me spell bound reading it all the way through. I think Madge was an angel sent back to earth to help people. I could be really wrong, but it makes sense to me. She was so nice and helpful to so many. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Hi, Teri. Thank you for your kind words! I need to find Madge a home in print.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Susan Newell
Mike,
I apologize. I thought I had reviewed this earlier. It is such a wonderful story, and exceptionally well written. I loved the way that the deeper we went into darkness, the brighter the light of God shined. Stories of events like this, of people appearing out of nowhere just as they are needed, seem to have occurred throughout human history,. One can't help but wonder if they are members of a special class of angels. Sorry that I am out of sixes!
Sue
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Mike,
I apologize. I thought I had reviewed this earlier. It is such a wonderful story, and exceptionally well written. I loved the way that the deeper we went into darkness, the brighter the light of God shined. Stories of events like this, of people appearing out of nowhere just as they are needed, seem to have occurred throughout human history,. One can't help but wonder if they are members of a special class of angels. Sorry that I am out of sixes!
Sue
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Hi, Sue. I'm so thankful to be nominated and then to finish third, what a blessing! Your essay is amazing and forced me to look at things a little differently. I need to find a home for Madge in print. Thank you for your kind words and thoughts of a six!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Most welcome, Mike. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, Mike, what a great story! I'm always a sucker for happy endings. Even happy ghost story endings. LOL. This story is a winner either way, but best of luck in the contest, my friend! Thanks for sharing. Ric
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2022
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Wow, Mike, what a great story! I'm always a sucker for happy endings. Even happy ghost story endings. LOL. This story is a winner either way, but best of luck in the contest, my friend! Thanks for sharing. Ric
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2022
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Hi, Ric. Thank you for your kind words. I'm just glad to be nominated!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from BethShelby
Whatever Madge was, you have created a beautiful supernatural story. Since I don't really believe in Ghosts and I do believe in angels I vote for this to be and angel story because I've experienced some of thoe. I know they are there when you need help and there is really no explaination.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Whatever Madge was, you have created a beautiful supernatural story. Since I don't really believe in Ghosts and I do believe in angels I vote for this to be and angel story because I've experienced some of thoe. I know they are there when you need help and there is really no explaination.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Hi, Beth. Thank you for your kind words! I'm sorry I didn't see this review sooner.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a beautiful story, Mike. It creates all kinds of emotions, from fear of something happening while driving, to peace and love when they met Madge and she helped Cari. Then, surprise to know it's all Supernatural. It was a joy to read.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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This is a beautiful story, Mike. It creates all kinds of emotions, from fear of something happening while driving, to peace and love when they met Madge and she helped Cari. Then, surprise to know it's all Supernatural. It was a joy to read.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Hi, Judy. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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You are most welcome, Mike. :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Mike, with this story. Your words were
descriptive with smooth flow. The characters were well-developed.
Your description of the highway, the forest, the cafe, etc. was
great. I liked the mention of Big Foot waving. As for Madge, I
believe she was a real person at one time and returns long after
her passing in the form of a guardian angel to help as needed.
Thanks for sharing an uplifting story, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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You did a great job, Mike, with this story. Your words were
descriptive with smooth flow. The characters were well-developed.
Your description of the highway, the forest, the cafe, etc. was
great. I liked the mention of Big Foot waving. As for Madge, I
believe she was a real person at one time and returns long after
her passing in the form of a guardian angel to help as needed.
Thanks for sharing an uplifting story, Jan
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Hi, Jan. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from estory
This is a real warm story. You created this wonderful angel character, Madge, and made her seem so real when she meets the girl going into labor. She really symbolizes the love of God for these two young people just starting their family. You had such a realistic description of the burned out restaurant that the contrast with the earlier scene really hits home. We are in between reality and heaven in this piece, and the two kids are right there with us. estory
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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This is a real warm story. You created this wonderful angel character, Madge, and made her seem so real when she meets the girl going into labor. She really symbolizes the love of God for these two young people just starting their family. You had such a realistic description of the burned out restaurant that the contrast with the earlier scene really hits home. We are in between reality and heaven in this piece, and the two kids are right there with us. estory
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the wonderful review!
Comment from Malcolm Rothery
I can only say that was fabulous. Creepy, sad, and uplifting at the same time. There is a much longer story waiting to be told here. You should run with it and see where it takes you. There is a hint of Stephen King within your words. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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I can only say that was fabulous. Creepy, sad, and uplifting at the same time. There is a much longer story waiting to be told here. You should run with it and see where it takes you. There is a hint of Stephen King within your words. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Wow! Thank you for mentioning me with "the King" and master of fiction, and for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very fine story. Very well written. Good work.
Of course there are many stories on this theme, but yours has a unique flavor. Very nice.
Best wishes..
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Very fine story. Very well written. Good work.
Of course there are many stories on this theme, but yours has a unique flavor. Very nice.
Best wishes..
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Hi, Wayne. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a great story. Beautifully written and paced. No hint of forcing as is often seen in supernatural stories, and credibility provided by the assurances of the older man in the red jeep. Kate xx
Please consider:
To her, this trip was essential, and he was glad to be sharing it with her > use present tense for consistency
I love you, too."
"I love you, too. > I love you."
"I love you, too.
ever and must be that > ever. It must be that
Someone boarded up > Someone had boarded up
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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This is a great story. Beautifully written and paced. No hint of forcing as is often seen in supernatural stories, and credibility provided by the assurances of the older man in the red jeep. Kate xx
Please consider:
To her, this trip was essential, and he was glad to be sharing it with her > use present tense for consistency
I love you, too."
"I love you, too. > I love you."
"I love you, too.
ever and must be that > ever. It must be that
Someone boarded up > Someone had boarded up
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Hi, Katherine. I've got everything fixed. Thank you for your kind words, shiny six stars, and help with this story. It's deeply appreciated!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Thanks for considering, and for your nice thought. ppreciated it Kate xx
