The Inn at Blackpool
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Inn at Shella Rue"These are free-verse poems.
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Comment from Wendy G
In terms of structure, rhyme and smooth flow you did an excellent job. However some of us are from other countries, and are less familiar with your history, so a few footnotes night be helpful for better appreciation.
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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In terms of structure, rhyme and smooth flow you did an excellent job. However some of us are from other countries, and are less familiar with your history, so a few footnotes night be helpful for better appreciation.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2022
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My Dearest Wendy.....thanks so very much....I enjoy your writing.....you are right....this is a flicker of history and a smidgen of fantasy.....I am not a pure contestant.....these are written for the neighbor kids to get them to explore a history book or a map...and then just make things up....ie ants at the picnic start brawling after overdosing on sugar cookies.....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell....PS...I served with Aussies in Vietnam...they were very solid troops....God Bless their memory...
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That?s wonderful that you inspire the kids to learn and discover history, and to observe and think about the world around them.
Yes, our Aussies have always been very good and brave soldiers. Thankful for each and every one.
Wendy
Comment from royowen
I can remember arriving in Richmond at about 9:00 pm and seeing the town hall, we had been on a grand tour of all the civil war sites, it was hard to believe Richmond had been sacked in the war. This is a great post Stu, great entry in this contest, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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I can remember arriving in Richmond at about 9:00 pm and seeing the town hall, we had been on a grand tour of all the civil war sites, it was hard to believe Richmond had been sacked in the war. This is a great post Stu, great entry in this contest, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Thanks so very much..I always enjoy your writing.....these are purposely a little rough and tumble....anyway...it's works for me..HAHA....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell
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Well done Stu.
Comment from karenina
It sounds so cliche but is heartfelt...thank you for your service in Vietnam.
This held the flavor of the common soldier, on the ground, facing the enemy--not holed up in an office somewhere moving Chess Pieces. I liked the "hardscrabble" feel of it. Nothing of war is elegant or precise!
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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It sounds so cliche but is heartfelt...thank you for your service in Vietnam.
This held the flavor of the common soldier, on the ground, facing the enemy--not holed up in an office somewhere moving Chess Pieces. I liked the "hardscrabble" feel of it. Nothing of war is elegant or precise!
Karenina
Comment Written 13-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Thanks so very much....it's a little "bug's eye view"...some fanciful wishes...some weariness........purposely mumble jumble.....Best to you and yous....Stu Harrell
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Thanks for that. Best to you and yours as well!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I rather enjoyed this story of the American civil war. The lines flowed and rhymed so nicely, and your story spoke of the sacrifice made by those caught up in the fighting. Very well done - good luck!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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I rather enjoyed this story of the American civil war. The lines flowed and rhymed so nicely, and your story spoke of the sacrifice made by those caught up in the fighting. Very well done - good luck!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Thanks so very much....these are purposely a little hard scrabble...I am trying to write for the ordinary GI which I was in Vietnam....his recollections are part real and part fanciful....Godspeed to you and yours....Stu Harrell
Comment from Frank Malley
This poem has two central threads: one is of the American Civil War, and the other details Irish American participation in that war. Or so I read it.This story poem requires a bit of historical knowledge to be readily understood, and I think it uses some army jargon that needs to be in the footnotes.
The poem itself is excellent. It moves with a martial tetrameter and features language use rife with the bravado that turns military life and struggles into a more glorious part of history.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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This poem has two central threads: one is of the American Civil War, and the other details Irish American participation in that war. Or so I read it.This story poem requires a bit of historical knowledge to be readily understood, and I think it uses some army jargon that needs to be in the footnotes.
The poem itself is excellent. It moves with a martial tetrameter and features language use rife with the bravado that turns military life and struggles into a more glorious part of history.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Dear Sir....you are right....these are a little jumbled together....need more clarification....I grew up in Virginia...and winced at the cavalier tones of some of the war events....casualties on those battlefields were ghastly.....Best to you and yours.....Stu Harrell
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It's a pleasure to meet you, albeit in literature. Be well. Frank
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a powerful and moving poem about an historical event, the horrors of the civil war. You evoked the history and the tragedy in these short verses. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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a powerful and moving poem about an historical event, the horrors of the civil war. You evoked the history and the tragedy in these short verses. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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These are purposely jumbled together and posted..part real and part fancy....for a later look see...if maybe there is a wider story....thanks so much for your kind thoughts.....Godspeed ...Stu Harrell
Comment from Bill Schott
This story poem, The Inn at Shella Rue, brings a bit of those twilight times of the old South as the Civil War brought the era to its painful and poignant conclusion.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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This story poem, The Inn at Shella Rue, brings a bit of those twilight times of the old South as the Civil War brought the era to its painful and poignant conclusion.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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God Bless the US Marines....BTW is it OK to say Jarhead? ...I always thought it was meant with affection and great respect...those that I knew in RVN were fine troops...I believed called Force Recon....Thanks for you review...I grew up in Virginia and winced somewhat at the portrait of The Civil War as a soaring romantic epic....the casualties on those battlefields was horrendous....Godspeed to you and yours....Air Cav/Airborne
Comment from Douglas Goff
Very interesting read. What exactly is a pixie? Like a fairy?
Anyways, this is very descriptive and keeps one engaged.
Nice work! Keep it up!
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Very interesting read. What exactly is a pixie? Like a fairy?
Anyways, this is very descriptive and keeps one engaged.
Nice work! Keep it up!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you so very much...yes, this is a little hard scrabble...a sort of in and out fantastic dream....All the best to you and yours....Stu Harrell
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this story in a poem contest entry. This entry flowed smoothly and almost musically. Although this time in history was not fun the entry was fun to read. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you for sharing this story in a poem contest entry. This entry flowed smoothly and almost musically. Although this time in history was not fun the entry was fun to read. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thanks so very much.....I grew up in Virginia..it always bothers me that the romantics somehow made this to be a clash of cavalier horsemen....the actual casualties were ghastly....this war should have been avoided...Best to you and yours....Stu Harrell
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written story in a poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words that had very good imagery in it. Thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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This is a very well written story in a poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words that had very good imagery in it. Thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thanks so very much these are a little rough and tumble to put together but great fun....Best to you and yours....Stu Harrell
