Ever in Her Thoughts
The death of her family on that fateful day of 9/1110 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Wow. This is incredible! I came to wish you a happy birthday but lingered to read a bit...
It's obvious why this won the contest!
(I pray your fiction is just how it happens when one is tempted to end their life!)
How have we not crossed paths?
Hmmm.
I'll fan you!
That ought to help me see your posts!
Karenina
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Wow. This is incredible! I came to wish you a happy birthday but lingered to read a bit...
It's obvious why this won the contest!
(I pray your fiction is just how it happens when one is tempted to end their life!)
How have we not crossed paths?
Hmmm.
I'll fan you!
That ought to help me see your posts!
Karenina
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Alright. I can see why this took an ACEY place. Well done. What else have you? Seventy years married? Wow That means you were seventeen. ............................................................................................................................................................
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Alright. I can see why this took an ACEY place. Well done. What else have you? Seventy years married? Wow That means you were seventeen. ............................................................................................................................................................
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
Comment from LyndaS
I enjoyed this very much. However, I think you will be disqualified from this contest from your word count. The minimum is 450 words and yours has 376. For this reason I can't give you six stars, which it very much deserves. I encourage you to lengthen this to the minimum words per the contest rules. The contest creator will most definitely want this entry removed.
It's a great story told from a very different angle than most spiritual writes are. The flow is great and this is well written. I would like to see this in the booth. Well done! Lynda
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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I enjoyed this very much. However, I think you will be disqualified from this contest from your word count. The minimum is 450 words and yours has 376. For this reason I can't give you six stars, which it very much deserves. I encourage you to lengthen this to the minimum words per the contest rules. The contest creator will most definitely want this entry removed.
It's a great story told from a very different angle than most spiritual writes are. The flow is great and this is well written. I would like to see this in the booth. Well done! Lynda
Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the excellent review and comments. I misunderstood the word count. I had several other stories I could have entered. I chose this one because of the low word count. Do I need to let thecontest creator know, or will it be automatically eliminated?
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I was incorrect is saying that the contest creator will pull this. She is not monitoring this, Tom is. (Contest committee) He may give you 24 hours to correct the situation. Not sure if swapping out a story for a different one is allowed but you could ask him.
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Thank you so much for your help.
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Good luck! This was a great story and it would have had my vote.
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Thank you so much Lynda for the review and kind words, At 89, I get confused sometimes. I thought it meant not more than 450 words. Writing is who I am and in spite of my problem, I will continue to do my best. I really appreciate your pointing out my error and I will try to be more careful in the future.
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Thank you for the review and for pointing out my error. I thought it meant not more than 450 words. I will try to be more careful in the future.
Be blessed,
Pen
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They have extended the time limit allowing me to revise my story; I hope you enjoy the revised version.
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I'll check it out when it's in the booth.
You know...when I vote for you. lol
Glad you're still in this.
And, geez, I'll be 71 in a couple of weeks. I hope my eyes hold out so I can still read reasonably well when I get to be your age. You're doing great!!
Comment from jessizero
I could feel this happening. You wrote the story well. I liked that the evils of the world were represented as demons, and I am glad they didn't win this one. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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I could feel this happening. You wrote the story well. I liked that the evils of the world were represented as demons, and I am glad they didn't win this one. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
Comment from Wendy G
I am pleased to read of the victory of God in protecting her, and the defeat of Satanic evil spirits in trying to destroy her. Evil spirits are not around for our entertainment, and I therefore liked the way you acknowledged their presence within our thoughts, and personified them, but also showed the solution. Well done. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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I am pleased to read of the victory of God in protecting her, and the defeat of Satanic evil spirits in trying to destroy her. Evil spirits are not around for our entertainment, and I therefore liked the way you acknowledged their presence within our thoughts, and personified them, but also showed the solution. Well done. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you Wendy for the excellent review. Your words to me are cherished because you are such an accomplished writer yourself. Thank you for taking the time to review my story.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written story you have penned for the writing prompt. You used great descriptive words and imagery that went well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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This is a very well written story you have penned for the writing prompt. You used great descriptive words and imagery that went well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you Teri for reviewing my story.
Many blessings to you and your family,
Pen
Comment from country ranch writer
Presented well indeed,being strong enough still stop the suicide attempt on one's life, God reached out and grabbed her before it was to late,reminding her she had still a lot to teach the world about life and death. Lessons on how to get rid of evil and the devil himself outwitting him in the process.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Presented well indeed,being strong enough still stop the suicide attempt on one's life, God reached out and grabbed her before it was to late,reminding her she had still a lot to teach the world about life and death. Lessons on how to get rid of evil and the devil himself outwitting him in the process.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you Country Ranch Writer for taking the time to review my story and for your input.
Blessings,
Pen
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I loved the thought of faith saving her from taking her own life. And you do a wonderful job of storytelling here. I could picture this all in my head. Great ending as well. The descriptions are strong as is the use of internal though. Great job!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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I loved the thought of faith saving her from taking her own life. And you do a wonderful job of storytelling here. I could picture this all in my head. Great ending as well. The descriptions are strong as is the use of internal though. Great job!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you Mike for the review and your input. It is much appreciated.
May the Lord bless you,
Pen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Penoffire,
Well done on your story. You properly identified the spirits of the enemy and exposed them for who they are. When we're faced with heartbreaking issues, it's easy to give in to despair and become overwhelmed. Hopefully we all have a good enough friend who will sense the need and extend the hand of friendship in whatever way it's needed.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Hello Penoffire,
Well done on your story. You properly identified the spirits of the enemy and exposed them for who they are. When we're faced with heartbreaking issues, it's easy to give in to despair and become overwhelmed. Hopefully we all have a good enough friend who will sense the need and extend the hand of friendship in whatever way it's needed.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Hi Tom, Thank you for taking the time to read my story and for your input. It was much appreciated.
May the Lord bless you,
Pen
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting. You gave personhood to emotions and conditions. They became the focus and the person, who was nameless was the field on which they played.
An interesting concept.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Very interesting. You gave personhood to emotions and conditions. They became the focus and the person, who was nameless was the field on which they played.
An interesting concept.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you Lancellot for taking the time to review my story.