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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. My husband and I had a conversation spiked by this writing prompt. I enjoyed reading what you found to take. I've actually struggled with that.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. My husband and I had a conversation spiked by this writing prompt. I enjoyed reading what you found to take. I've actually struggled with that.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Barb, thank you so much! I think the hardest of all those things that my poem talked about was to get the folder of the drawings that my grandchildren had made for me throughout the years. Those are of no value to anyone else, but they mean the world to me. However my message is something that I would hope I remember if that ever occurred. Thank you for your kind comments, as I knew you would be on the same page with your faith and values.
Thank you again my friend!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, have a message, are descriptive and creative. I thought about each stanzas and know the author's message at the end of this poem is so clear and right! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork and color scheme go so well with this poem.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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The author's words are engaging, have a message, are descriptive and creative. I thought about each stanzas and know the author's message at the end of this poem is so clear and right! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork and color scheme go so well with this poem.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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You are always so sweet Maria! I think the hardest of all those things that I talked about in my poem was to get the folder of the silly little drawing that my grandchildren had made for me throughout the years. Those are of no value to anyone else, but I so enjoy them. However my message is something that I would hope I remember if that ever occurred. Thank you for your kind comments, as I knew you would be on the same page with your faith and values.
Thank you again my friend!
Comment from Marienkiefer
Your poem is a very important reminder that life is fleeting and the most precious is not our souvenirs or our mementos nor worldly possessions. God's love transcends and life is of great value.
-Your poem is easy to read because of the spaces, so turns out this presentation does actually work for you. I do not focus on these small details. Your words have great merit and your heart seems to ring out in this poem.
-Your message is dramatized and emphasized through your choice of picture.
Sparkling lines: the message reflected through your writing
I find that through your poem, I am thankful for the people that risk their lives everyday to save ours and to help us save our comforts and things. People like firemen and linemen who risk everything running toward fires and danger.
Thank you for this poem and for sharing your views, values and selflessness through your work.
Awesome.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Your poem is a very important reminder that life is fleeting and the most precious is not our souvenirs or our mementos nor worldly possessions. God's love transcends and life is of great value.
-Your poem is easy to read because of the spaces, so turns out this presentation does actually work for you. I do not focus on these small details. Your words have great merit and your heart seems to ring out in this poem.
-Your message is dramatized and emphasized through your choice of picture.
Sparkling lines: the message reflected through your writing
I find that through your poem, I am thankful for the people that risk their lives everyday to save ours and to help us save our comforts and things. People like firemen and linemen who risk everything running toward fires and danger.
Thank you for this poem and for sharing your views, values and selflessness through your work.
Awesome.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Marien, thank you so much! You are so very lovely and I appreciate your very thought words. I think the hardest of all those things that my poem talked about was to get the folder of the drawings that my grandchildren had made for me throughout the years. Those are of no value to anyone else, but they mean the world to me. However my message is something that I would hope I remember if that ever occurred. Thank you for your kind comments, as I knew you would be on the same page with your faith and values.
Thank you again my friend!
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You are very, very welcome🌸🌸
Comment from Terry Broxson
Okay, the next time I do a contest there is one person I need to exclude, because she is too dang good at contests! Okay, maybe not! Thank you for entering this most creative poem. Exceptional work. Terry.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Okay, the next time I do a contest there is one person I need to exclude, because she is too dang good at contests! Okay, maybe not! Thank you for entering this most creative poem. Exceptional work. Terry.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Terry! (I think) Lol, Maybe living here at the Ritz has been good for me. It certainly is spendy, but price is not a problem.
I have a staff waiting on me hand and foot, served meals in bed and I don't do anything but this all day, except an extreme workout daily!
But what girl wouldn't love that? Now I even have some pretty great friends handing me the stars. Bring me the moon, and we'll strike a deal!
So very much appreciated it my awesome friend!
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After reading your poem, I read a story for the contest, An Old Iron Box, I think it really good too. If you get a chance take a look. Terry.
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I read that one too and I think I might have given him a six. I know you know who everyone is but I think his name Is Douglas. He has been a great help to me when things were haywire for mine when still in story format. Anyway, yes I loved the simple, honest and sentimental way he put himself right out there.
However he made one comment that were fighting words. He wished me luck to get a second place finish. Lol
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Lol
Comment from Douglas Goff
Very nice. A couple of structural issues.
There is a giant gap between the picture and the text at the top.
The changing font is distracting. I would stick with one size one type to keep the good flow that your words are producing.
Just my two cents.
Nice work. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Very nice. A couple of structural issues.
There is a giant gap between the picture and the text at the top.
The changing font is distracting. I would stick with one size one type to keep the good flow that your words are producing.
Just my two cents.
Nice work. Keep it up!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Douglas, thank you so much for your very kind comments and most certainly for your feedback. This is one of the editing problems I faced today was that I kept the same font, size and only used the asterisk and italics for the voice, and it just kept getting worse the harder I tried. Do you think that is due to having to use the story format for a poem. The reason it was put that way was because the contest rules allowed stories or poetry. I am going to go back and try again. But thank you so much for your offer of help. So appreciated and if I get it fixed, I will let you know my friend.
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I think the best way is to cut and paste back into word and fix the font issues. Then re paste into FS. Highlight all words and only pick on style of font. That should work. System is finicky.
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Hi there Douglas. So I highlighted it all again and made the font one size smaller. I think it helped
make it all the same size.
However what worries me is.that I have no gap between my picture and text, so it's hard to fix what you can't see. Would you mind looking again and tell me if you think it looks better and if the gap is still there?. I truly appreciate it my friend.
If that isn't working from your end, then it means others see what you do. If nothing else, I will use your suggestion. Thank you my friend, so very much!
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You fixed the font. It is perfect now. The gap is still there. How about trying to remove the picture, then put it back in? Other than that, I am not sure.
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Gotcha. It would be so much easier if I could see it too.
Wish me luck. Here I go. Lol
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Hi Douglas, I just went on my cell a few hours ago and use that as a guide to fix that gap,
So hope it looks better now and thanks again for all your help
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You fixed it! Good job!
Comment from Wendy G
Excellent poem, with good rhyme and flow, and it was a good idea to let the reader see inside your head as you thought about the various options. A thoughtful but fun conclusion. I am sure this will do well I;the contest. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Excellent poem, with good rhyme and flow, and it was a good idea to let the reader see inside your head as you thought about the various options. A thoughtful but fun conclusion. I am sure this will do well I;the contest. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Wendy. I truly appreciate it since I had so much trouble w the editing, so thank you for your very kind comments and for reviewing my poem my dear friend!
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A well conceived poem. The recurring reference to remember something becomes a drum beat. And each verse is a small thought that is thus tied together. The feeling of confusion is good for the scene described. The ending sentence is a good wrap to the poem.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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A well conceived poem. The recurring reference to remember something becomes a drum beat. And each verse is a small thought that is thus tied together. The feeling of confusion is good for the scene described. The ending sentence is a good wrap to the poem.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the very kind review and comments. I appreciate them since the poem and posting it was a complete different experience. I have posted poetry in the story format before, but never had things jump out of place so much before. So it is truly appreciated my friend.
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Thank you.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This is the first poem I've read for this contest entry and I really like your creativity with it. And I like that you didn't take the prompt too seriously - thinking only of real things you'd go back for instead of the intangible.
Good work here, and a good read. Good luck!
There's a line that reads: "It's not like I can get get brand new" that you might want to correct.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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This is the first poem I've read for this contest entry and I really like your creativity with it. And I like that you didn't take the prompt too seriously - thinking only of real things you'd go back for instead of the intangible.
Good work here, and a good read. Good luck!
There's a line that reads: "It's not like I can get get brand new" that you might want to correct.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Oops Pam, what would I do without you? I appreciate your feedback and your kind words as this was a little different for me and I didn't realize that because there's stories and poems allowed we weren't given our choice of formats. You are a lifesaver tho and I thank you my friend for catching that mistake.
Comment from jessizero
I liked your poem! I am glad you finally figured out what you needed to save from the fire. It wasn't a thing at all! I hope you are never in such a situation. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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I liked your poem! I am glad you finally figured out what you needed to save from the fire. It wasn't a thing at all! I hope you are never in such a situation. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Awe, thanks Jessi and me too, But you made me think about it in that way. I really think I too would ignore the voice in my head and at least go for grandkids drawings. Lol, my husband says my iPad is already attached to my hip. Thanks for your kind comments my friend!
