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Comment from Spitfire
I love the inner dialogue as well as the riddle within the poem. The narrator lists what she can grab until the house gets too dangerous to enter. Then comes the realization that material items are not the link. Sense of values is the abstract item we need to keep. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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I love the inner dialogue as well as the riddle within the poem. The narrator lists what she can grab until the house gets too dangerous to enter. Then comes the realization that material items are not the link. Sense of values is the abstract item we need to keep. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Hi there my friend! I can't thank you enough for all your kind comments and your very generous gift of six stars. I appreciate it more than you could possibly know.. Thank you again Spitfire!
Comment from lyenochka
Wonderful poem that progresses through all those thought processes if we were in such a situation. And you hit it on the nail - with "*God's greatest gifts cannot be bought " and "Your sense of values; your greatest find." Super entry for this contest! Hope this does well!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Wonderful poem that progresses through all those thought processes if we were in such a situation. And you hit it on the nail - with "*God's greatest gifts cannot be bought " and "Your sense of values; your greatest find." Super entry for this contest! Hope this does well!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Why I thank you kindly Helen. I appreciate your lovely compliments as your opinions are always meaningful. Thank you my lovely friend
Comment from Nicolee Maree
I really liked this. Sometimes I think it can be difficult to write poems that rhyme and still make them flow, but you did a good job of it. I thought it was really well done.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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I really liked this. Sometimes I think it can be difficult to write poems that rhyme and still make them flow, but you did a good job of it. I thought it was really well done.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Oh thank you so very much Nicolee. I love your name by the way!
I so appreciate that you took the time to read and your very kind words.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Mystery Author, with your contest
entry. The image was perfect to be paired with your
well thought out words. The end rhymes worked great,
too. I liked the color scheme and font color--both
reminders of fire. I liked the possessions you would save.
However, your starred lines point to the truth--those were
all things. What was important was the fact your mind was
telling you to understand your values were most important.
You needed to save yourself as God wanted. Possessions
mean a lot to people, but God's word means more. He did
not want you running back for them and dying because of
them.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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You did a great job, Mystery Author, with your contest
entry. The image was perfect to be paired with your
well thought out words. The end rhymes worked great,
too. I liked the color scheme and font color--both
reminders of fire. I liked the possessions you would save.
However, your starred lines point to the truth--those were
all things. What was important was the fact your mind was
telling you to understand your values were most important.
You needed to save yourself as God wanted. Possessions
mean a lot to people, but God's word means more. He did
not want you running back for them and dying because of
them.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Oh thank you so very much Jan. Wow I appreciate the awesome review, kind words and your gift of six stars. You are the best! I am so glad you reviewed it now, as last night it was a bit of a mess. So now I am pleased to as I also changed many of my choice of words. So thank you again my lovely friend!
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Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well done poem with different stanza lengths and rhyme scheme, tough it still flows well. It tells of all the things that are important to us. But the most important is love and faith. Material things aren't as important as some make them out to be.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Why are there asterisks on the lines of the rhyming couplets?
Joan
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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This is a well done poem with different stanza lengths and rhyme scheme, tough it still flows well. It tells of all the things that are important to us. But the most important is love and faith. Material things aren't as important as some make them out to be.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Why are there asterisks on the lines of the rhyming couplets?
Joan
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thanks Joan, that is a good question. I meant to take them out when Tom finally put me in poem format, instead of story format. The poem was so screwed up and I couldn't see what others were seeing for some reason. I spent hours trying until I asked Tom. Before the messages in the head were not looking any different from the rest, even tho I italicized, so I put the asterisk there to make it stand out. I think I will take them out now. Thanks for the reminder. And also thank you for your lovely review and comments. Means a lot to me, my friend!
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You're welcome. Glad I could help. Thanks for the clarification.
Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think I would just take myself and the occupants including pets, most other things can be replaced in life, I like that you included common sense here as this is something that escapes us in a crisis, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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I think I would just take myself and the occupants including pets, most other things can be replaced in life, I like that you included common sense here as this is something that escapes us in a crisis, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Dolly, thank you so much! I think the hardest of all those things that my poem talked about was to get the folder of the drawings that my grandchildren had made for me throughout the years. Those are of no value to anyone else, but they mean the world to me. However my message is something that I would hope I remember if that ever occurred. Thank you for your kind comments, as I knew you would be on the same page with your faith and values.
Thank you again my friend!
Comment from Sally Law
Sorry to have missed this, Mystery poet. I so enjoyed this and the thoughts running through your head as you were dealing with a fire and threatened with losing so many important things! I agree, the most important things are life, family, and the animals living in the house. I would have to say--because I lack in this area-- photographs are important. I only have eight from my childhood because of a flood. I think my daughter-in-law takes eight pictures of our grandchildren every day. It wasn't that way for me growing up, and I have so little to look back upon. I keep them in a special place as they are very precious to me. I am a scrapbooker too.
Sending along my very best to you and yours as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal :)) XOs
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Sorry to have missed this, Mystery poet. I so enjoyed this and the thoughts running through your head as you were dealing with a fire and threatened with losing so many important things! I agree, the most important things are life, family, and the animals living in the house. I would have to say--because I lack in this area-- photographs are important. I only have eight from my childhood because of a flood. I think my daughter-in-law takes eight pictures of our grandchildren every day. It wasn't that way for me growing up, and I have so little to look back upon. I keep them in a special place as they are very precious to me. I am a scrapbooker too.
Sending along my very best to you and yours as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal :)) XOs
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much Sally, as I agree about pets as they are so valuable to us. I no longer have any, because it was too hard to care for them, but I love them. We have something big in common though as I don't think I even have 8 photos of myself as a baby or a child. Too much to explain now.
Thank you for reading this and for such lovely comments my dear friend.
I appreciate you and them so very much
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My goodness, we really do. My mother was a wonderful person. My parents had a rough go due to my dad's alcoholism. Sadly, it not only destroyed my mom, and our lives for awhile, but it took him. We didn't document the normal things like birthdays, anniversies, graduation, etc., etc. My wedding was beautiful though, as my youngest brother gave me away. My dad wasn't there, and died shortly after I wed. Blessings, dear one,
Sal XOs
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is a perfect entry. I love the message at the end of this and throughout. The spacing didn't bother me it looks fine. This flowed perfectly across the screen. I wish you much success with the contest. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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This is a perfect entry. I love the message at the end of this and throughout. The spacing didn't bother me it looks fine. This flowed perfectly across the screen. I wish you much success with the contest. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thank you so very much John. As always you are so sweet and I appreciate your very kind words for the poem. I thank you greatly for your generous six stars. I appreciate it so very much, my friend. You are the best!
Comment from estory
This is an interesting construction, and I think there are some great echoing and rhythmic effects in it. The regular beat keeps circling and circling around the reader like we are going into the burning house again and again; good use of form to underscore theme there. I liked all the colorful images that suggest that life is more than things. It is the feelings that really count. estory
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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This is an interesting construction, and I think there are some great echoing and rhythmic effects in it. The regular beat keeps circling and circling around the reader like we are going into the burning house again and again; good use of form to underscore theme there. I liked all the colorful images that suggest that life is more than things. It is the feelings that really count. estory
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much! I think the hardest of all those things that my poem talked about was to get the folder of the drawings that my grandchildren had made for me throughout the years. Those are of no value to anyone else, but they mean the world to me. However my message is something that I would hope I remember if that ever occurred. Thank you for your kind comments.
Thank you again my friend!
Comment from Martie Zuckerman
I enjoyed this piece! You did a great job. Good picture to accompany. If only we could remember on a daily basis, just what is and isn't important!
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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I enjoyed this piece! You did a great job. Good picture to accompany. If only we could remember on a daily basis, just what is and isn't important!
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Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Margie for the kind review and comments. Also for the four stars.
