Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Sanku
A silence followed' an ending to make the readers curious. I loved reading Codero's New york experience .I hope her money wont be an obstacle to their romance
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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A silence followed' an ending to make the readers curious. I loved reading Codero's New york experience .I hope her money wont be an obstacle to their romance
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I doubt the money, but I am sure NYC will.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
You just took us on a tour of New York City. Some of the references even took me to different sites just so I could see them. For instance, One World Trade Center. After its destruction on 9/11/2001, I was confused as to whether it would still be called One WTC, and it is.
After Chapter 19 B
P15, s1: SUGGEST insert (of) between (scale) and (one-to-five?)
After 1st *****
P4, s1: Add a comma after (So) Pause after an introductory word.
After 3rd *****
P16, s1: SUGGEST insert (out) between (She pointed) and (and they)
After 5th *****
P6, s1: (Sant Amboeus) should be (Sant Ambroeus) If you are referring to the world-class restaurant in New York City.
P8, s2: SUGGEST (significance) rather than (significates) significance being the more familiar and relatable term.
Now, there can be no doubt. Cord and Ali are a "thing." All that's left is for both of them to admit it.
Great story telling, factual yet interesting, consistent throughout.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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You just took us on a tour of New York City. Some of the references even took me to different sites just so I could see them. For instance, One World Trade Center. After its destruction on 9/11/2001, I was confused as to whether it would still be called One WTC, and it is.
After Chapter 19 B
P15, s1: SUGGEST insert (of) between (scale) and (one-to-five?)
After 1st *****
P4, s1: Add a comma after (So) Pause after an introductory word.
After 3rd *****
P16, s1: SUGGEST insert (out) between (She pointed) and (and they)
After 5th *****
P6, s1: (Sant Amboeus) should be (Sant Ambroeus) If you are referring to the world-class restaurant in New York City.
P8, s2: SUGGEST (significance) rather than (significates) significance being the more familiar and relatable term.
Now, there can be no doubt. Cord and Ali are a "thing." All that's left is for both of them to admit it.
Great story telling, factual yet interesting, consistent throughout.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the help I appreciate it.
Comment from estory
Once again you prove the master in using realistic dialogue to reveal the subtleties of relationships. Here we see Corderro trying to be deffering to Alex, trying to be at ease in a city he is not quite at ease in, trying to let her take the lead in fact. He must really be in love with her, or he wouldn't be suggesting they take on their own moms to stake out the perameters of their relationship. And you do it all while they go on a simple sight seeing tour. Love the subtle ness of this chapter. estory
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Once again you prove the master in using realistic dialogue to reveal the subtleties of relationships. Here we see Corderro trying to be deffering to Alex, trying to be at ease in a city he is not quite at ease in, trying to let her take the lead in fact. He must really be in love with her, or he wouldn't be suggesting they take on their own moms to stake out the perameters of their relationship. And you do it all while they go on a simple sight seeing tour. Love the subtle ness of this chapter. estory
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the understanding. I appreciate it.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Agree ballet and opera are out of my plans.
An escape room sounds like fun. Sounds like Ali wants to "escape" with Cord.
Should "significates" be significance?
Seems Ali and Cord enjoyed the day, and time, together seeing some of the sights of New York City.
Do not know if you have ever been there but they truly are remarkable seen in person.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Agree ballet and opera are out of my plans.
An escape room sounds like fun. Sounds like Ali wants to "escape" with Cord.
Should "significates" be significance?
Seems Ali and Cord enjoyed the day, and time, together seeing some of the sights of New York City.
Do not know if you have ever been there but they truly are remarkable seen in person.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Yes, I have been there, but it's been a while ago. Right after Desert Shield/ Desert Storm. My husband I wanted to get away for a while when he returned.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Don't pay any attention to someone who says a chapter doesn't move the plot along. You're the writer, and the only one who could possibly know if it's moving things along or not. Those types just need to sit back and see what comes before making those assessments. You just keep writing, and I'll keep reading, enjoying every chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Don't pay any attention to someone who says a chapter doesn't move the plot along. You're the writer, and the only one who could possibly know if it's moving things along or not. Those types just need to sit back and see what comes before making those assessments. You just keep writing, and I'll keep reading, enjoying every chapter. :-)
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
Thank you for the encouragement. I often need that. This person stated if I ever plan on getting published, I'd better change my story.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very good chapter because Cord and Ali need time to get to know each other in her environment. If they get married, he will need to feel more at home in New York City, because that is her home.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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This is a very good chapter because Cord and Ali need time to get to know each other in her environment. If they get married, he will need to feel more at home in New York City, because that is her home.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thank you for understanding. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You moved the relationship along nicely in NYC. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. You moved the relationship along nicely in NYC. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Anne Johnston
I enjoyed this chapter. I have never visited New York City, so you have given us a bit of a tour. It seems that Cord is feeling his way as to how he fits into Ali's world. Sounds like both mothers are trying to hurry things up.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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I enjoyed this chapter. I have never visited New York City, so you have given us a bit of a tour. It seems that Cord is feeling his way as to how he fits into Ali's world. Sounds like both mothers are trying to hurry things up.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Both Moms are trying to hurry things up. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I like chapter 19; every chapter has been wonderful reading material. This chapter explains to us the touring they did within the city. As I was reading, I wondered if her past husband would arrive at any time.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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I like chapter 19; every chapter has been wonderful reading material. This chapter explains to us the touring they did within the city. As I was reading, I wondered if her past husband would arrive at any time.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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I can promise Alan will show up a few more times. They were not married, just engaged. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Hi, Barbara. I do agree with your notes. Each chapter holds a certain significance to this story, and not all chapters have to carry a weight. I enjoy the read each time. Best, JohnC.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Hi, Barbara. I do agree with your notes. Each chapter holds a certain significance to this story, and not all chapters have to carry a weight. I enjoy the read each time. Best, JohnC.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the understanding and encouragement. I appreciate it.
