Time has but one goal
A swap quatrain sonnet40 total reviews
Comment from Michaela Moore
I love what you did in the last stanza! Love it! Yes, too many times, we feel like a pawn in a meaningless game. But then, when we sit with our Lord for even a moment, purpose comes pouring in.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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I love what you did in the last stanza! Love it! Yes, too many times, we feel like a pawn in a meaningless game. But then, when we sit with our Lord for even a moment, purpose comes pouring in.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Michaela, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Dawn Munro
Huh. Here I am, visiting FanStory again, and of course, reviewing some of my favorite poets' work, and what is the first poem I read? One that fits so well with my thoughts...
Roy, as usual, very well done.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Huh. Here I am, visiting FanStory again, and of course, reviewing some of my favorite poets' work, and what is the first poem I read? One that fits so well with my thoughts...
Roy, as usual, very well done.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Dawn, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Roy,
Nice piece of poetry meeting the desired norms, having impressive wording, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting Time's Goal!
Picture complements the poem.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Hello Roy,
Nice piece of poetry meeting the desired norms, having impressive wording, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting Time's Goal!
Picture complements the poem.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much RP, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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Roy, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from karenina
Nobody "swaps" like you "swap" Roy! Hard enough for me to make a line make sense in one direction, !such less inverting it!
Favorite stanza?
"As I have found time is profound,
it marks our steps to Holy ground.
If one looks up beyond fate's mound,
time is profound as I have found"
Very well written!
Karenina
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Nobody "swaps" like you "swap" Roy! Hard enough for me to make a line make sense in one direction, !such less inverting it!
Favorite stanza?
"As I have found time is profound,
it marks our steps to Holy ground.
If one looks up beyond fate's mound,
time is profound as I have found"
Very well written!
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Thanks for these most encouraging comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from Aussie
Loved your poem Roy. Yes, time is a jest. And also a pest! Getting old and sitting under the Golden Arches just waiting...go inside to Mcdonalds get your free senior's ice-cream! The road is long and arduous, still we have Jesus along side of us. He said, "in my house are many mansions where I go to prepare a place for you." Blessings, K xx
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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Loved your poem Roy. Yes, time is a jest. And also a pest! Getting old and sitting under the Golden Arches just waiting...go inside to Mcdonalds get your free senior's ice-cream! The road is long and arduous, still we have Jesus along side of us. He said, "in my house are many mansions where I go to prepare a place for you." Blessings, K xx
Comment Written 20-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Kay, happy birthday dear girl, and for these terrific comments and a great review, and six wonderful stars, blessings Roy
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Thanks Roy. Didn't think I would reach 77! Guess He has more for me to do.
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Of course He has.
Comment from Wendy G
I like this a lot, it's clear and well written, and the theme is clear, relevant and timely. It has an interesting format as well as smooth, unforced rhyme. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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I like this a lot, it's clear and well written, and the theme is clear, relevant and timely. It has an interesting format as well as smooth, unforced rhyme. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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Thanks Wendy for these wonderful comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from jake cosmos aller
another powerful poem about life, the universe and trying to make sense of it all. I like the ending lines the best. This is a bit of a departure for you, not as overly religious in its theme.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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another powerful poem about life, the universe and trying to make sense of it all. I like the ending lines the best. This is a bit of a departure for you, not as overly religious in its theme.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Jake, for these terrific comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Roy, good swap quatrains. I know people don't like to think about it, but we were born to die--just like our Christ. Your poem reads and flows well and is thought provoking. Of special note:
Time is a test, it's not a jest,
it's not a jest, time is a test.
(Amen. This is so true.)
Well chosen photo. Good rhyming. Keep the blue waters flowing.
Margaret ~ LateBloomer
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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Hi Roy, good swap quatrains. I know people don't like to think about it, but we were born to die--just like our Christ. Your poem reads and flows well and is thought provoking. Of special note:
Time is a test, it's not a jest,
it's not a jest, time is a test.
(Amen. This is so true.)
Well chosen photo. Good rhyming. Keep the blue waters flowing.
Margaret ~ LateBloomer
Comment Written 20-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Margaret for these terrific comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Roy,
I like the internal rhyme use in this swap quatrain which asks questions we all ask. About importance of time and do we have a plan for that time. A lot of people never find the path to spending the time on the path designed for them. But the goal is to spend the time we have being the best person we can be according to what we think God's plan it so we can enter Heaven.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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Hi Roy,
I like the internal rhyme use in this swap quatrain which asks questions we all ask. About importance of time and do we have a plan for that time. A lot of people never find the path to spending the time on the path designed for them. But the goal is to spend the time we have being the best person we can be according to what we think God's plan it so we can enter Heaven.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 20-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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Thanks Joan for these excellent comments and review, blessings Roy
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My pleasure, Roy.
Joan
Comment from Janet Foor
A wonderful swap quatrain poem, Roy. Thought provoking and yet clear, if that makes sense. As a Christian, I don't fear death but a have loved ones that are not there yet. dear, and much food for thought about time.
Well done as always my friend.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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A wonderful swap quatrain poem, Roy. Thought provoking and yet clear, if that makes sense. As a Christian, I don't fear death but a have loved ones that are not there yet. dear, and much food for thought about time.
Well done as always my friend.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 20-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Janet, for these terrific comments and a great review, blessings Roy
