The Chronicals Of Bethica: The Rise
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "The Chronicles of Bethica"Abram must defeat a deadly humanoid race of beings
10 total reviews
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
WOW. I think this is only the second installment I have read of this saga, and it is terrifyingly exciting. You write the kind of story I like to watch on TV. Your words and style make the words seem to come alive. I can clearly see the flat, empty darkness where Gangus ended up. And I tremble at the fight that is to take place.
Very descriptive, very colorful, and full of imagination. A great installment in this ongoing tale. Fully worth the six-star rating I just gave it.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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WOW. I think this is only the second installment I have read of this saga, and it is terrifyingly exciting. You write the kind of story I like to watch on TV. Your words and style make the words seem to come alive. I can clearly see the flat, empty darkness where Gangus ended up. And I tremble at the fight that is to take place.
Very descriptive, very colorful, and full of imagination. A great installment in this ongoing tale. Fully worth the six-star rating I just gave it.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Wow, yourself! :)) Thank you so much, Gary. I'm excited that you enjoyed it that much. And I am humbled and flattered by your review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
With almost every chapter I think back to when I wouldn't read fantasy, thinking how much I missed out on before I started reading your adventures. LOL. It's always a pleasure. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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With almost every chapter I think back to when I wouldn't read fantasy, thinking how much I missed out on before I started reading your adventures. LOL. It's always a pleasure. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Ric. Always glad to hear from you.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This chapter is filled with action, quickly changing sides, Amahra. The imagery is fantastic, and it was easy to follow. The number of characters getting involved, all wanting to be the winner, keeps the excitement and challenges alive. Very well done. :)
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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This chapter is filled with action, quickly changing sides, Amahra. The imagery is fantastic, and it was easy to follow. The number of characters getting involved, all wanting to be the winner, keeps the excitement and challenges alive. Very well done. :)
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much, Judy. I'm very pleased you liked the imagery and found it easy to follow. Blessings.
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You?re most welcome, Amahra.
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is right up my alley and I would read more. I think that you are very creative and have talent.
In the first two paragraphs you us le the word God a lot. Maybe throw in a deity or something just to break up that log jam. Other than that, great work! Keep it up!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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This is right up my alley and I would read more. I think that you are very creative and have talent.
In the first two paragraphs you us le the word God a lot. Maybe throw in a deity or something just to break up that log jam. Other than that, great work! Keep it up!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. And I sincerely appreciate your suggestions.
Comment from Jay Squires
This tale is becoming entirely mythic in its scope, now with the god of gods fighting on Gangus's behalf. This had some powerful images, like the undergod being turned into a pillar of salt. Up to your usual high level of action. (Sometimes I wonder how you keep it up!) I only found one teensy consideration:
"...desperately trying to keep his claws within inches of his face from ripping his throat." [To ease the understanding, I'd suggest setting the clause off in commas "within inches of his face"]
I have a question, aside from the content of your post: Do you used the advanced editor or the basic editor to post this. The reason I ask is that a number of us Fanstorians have the same problem: i.e., inability to single space. I never had the problem before until about the same time Tom introduced the new fonts. I've told him of my problem but he says if I paste it as single-spaced from "Word" it will come out single-spaced with FanStory. No matter what I try, though, it always comes out double-spaced -- but that might be because I use the advanced editor. Do you have any suggestions?
Jay
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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This tale is becoming entirely mythic in its scope, now with the god of gods fighting on Gangus's behalf. This had some powerful images, like the undergod being turned into a pillar of salt. Up to your usual high level of action. (Sometimes I wonder how you keep it up!) I only found one teensy consideration:
"...desperately trying to keep his claws within inches of his face from ripping his throat." [To ease the understanding, I'd suggest setting the clause off in commas "within inches of his face"]
I have a question, aside from the content of your post: Do you used the advanced editor or the basic editor to post this. The reason I ask is that a number of us Fanstorians have the same problem: i.e., inability to single space. I never had the problem before until about the same time Tom introduced the new fonts. I've told him of my problem but he says if I paste it as single-spaced from "Word" it will come out single-spaced with FanStory. No matter what I try, though, it always comes out double-spaced -- but that might be because I use the advanced editor. Do you have any suggestions?
Jay
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your fine review, Jay. Yes, you're right about the commas in that sentence.
However, the Undergod, is the Underworld god, Nelchael and he was not turned into a pillar of salt. That was the fate of the bull-headed demon.
As for the suggestion, I always paste in basic, then switch to the advanced editor just before posting. I have never pasted in Advanced editor.
Comment from royowen
It's a good thing for Gangus that Raziel has taken an interest in Gangus' affairs, otherwise he would be struggling, and a good thing that He also had help from Gunji, Brehira and company, this is a great post Amhara, you have a fantastic imagination. Beautifully written, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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It's a good thing for Gangus that Raziel has taken an interest in Gangus' affairs, otherwise he would be struggling, and a good thing that He also had help from Gunji, Brehira and company, this is a great post Amhara, you have a fantastic imagination. Beautifully written, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Roy. Always happy to get your reviews. Blessings.
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Blessings
Comment from Ulla
Ah, amahra, this was a fantastic continuation to the story and the ongoing fight. The imagery is superb, and you keep us in suspense all way through. Now what, I wonder, after the emperor is on the case? Doesn't look too good. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Ah, amahra, this was a fantastic continuation to the story and the ongoing fight. The imagery is superb, and you keep us in suspense all way through. Now what, I wonder, after the emperor is on the case? Doesn't look too good. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Ulla for your review.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A action filled chapter. The flow is good. The language is rich and varied. The images are sharp. I especially liked the fallen angel coming in stages, each more fantastic than the last. The dialogue was believable. The end left me wishing for more.
Kudos. Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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A action filled chapter. The flow is good. The language is rich and varied. The images are sharp. I especially liked the fallen angel coming in stages, each more fantastic than the last. The dialogue was believable. The end left me wishing for more.
Kudos. Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for this fine review. I'm so glad you liked the chapter. And thanks for the stars. Blessings.
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You are welcome.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this addition with us. I am not normally a sci-fi fan but since a started reading this story, I think I have become one. I enjoyed the action. I am sure the emperor knows he's been told a lie. Good writing.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you for sharing this addition with us. I am not normally a sci-fi fan but since a started reading this story, I think I have become one. I enjoyed the action. I am sure the emperor knows he's been told a lie. Good writing.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from BermyBye50
Amahra,
This is an excellent chapter in the book The Chronicals Of Bethica: The Rise. Your story encompasses all the emotion and tension between the characters in this intensely complex relational story. Each paragraph is engaging and captures the attention of the reader. Your strategic use of dialogue enhances the tension woven throughout this brilliant story. Well-done.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Amahra,
This is an excellent chapter in the book The Chronicals Of Bethica: The Rise. Your story encompasses all the emotion and tension between the characters in this intensely complex relational story. Each paragraph is engaging and captures the attention of the reader. Your strategic use of dialogue enhances the tension woven throughout this brilliant story. Well-done.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 25-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your review.