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Life In The Big Shitty

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The first eighty years.

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Comment from GARY MACLEAN
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You relate a picture of a Catholic orphanage that most of us would or have only seen in the movies. Very bleak and uninviting.

Para 1, 24th sentence (couples) should be (couple's)
Para 2, 4th sentence SUGGEST (which) instead of (that)

You've had a troubled past Barb; I am glad for you that part is over, but my guess is that it did contribute to you being the beautiful person you are today.

Nicely told and related to us who just may not realize.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2022
    Thank you, Gary and for the nice compliment. Will fix errors. Blessings, Barbara. Xo
Comment from LateBloomer
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Barbara, life is not fair, yet somehow you have survived all of it. You learned many hard lessons at that orphanage, and you definitely attended the School of Hard Knocks. Of special note:

After that first day, it is mostly a haze of loneliness, desperation
and anger. I think the photo goes well with these words.

(Barbara, this is not the life that any child should have to live through. You had every right to be angry. Hopefully, you have found peace within yourself.)

Waiting to read more. After hearing about your limited education, I'm curious as to what type of work you've done in your life. Your story can be an inspiration for others who are in a downward spiral.

Well done; well told. Keep the blue waters flowing. Margaret ~ LB



 Comment Written 08-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
    Thank you, dear friend, I have peace and forgiveness. Blessings, Barbara. Xo
Comment from Teri7
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This is so very sad my dear friend. We never know what each one of us have gone through in this life, but Jesus knows all about it and I believe one day He will make everything right.

Please check this out:
legy a trail of pee behind me

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
    Thank you, dear friend. Blessings. Barbara. Xo
Comment from lyenochka
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It shows what spunk and leadership qualities you had to start a plan to run away! I guess your little sister was too young to be as affected by the shocking change as you were. Five years is too long but then perhaps it was a safer place than what your mom could have provided for you.
Suggestions:
friends of moms. (Mom's friends)
a white bib with a black vail. (veil)
we were at grandmas or at one or another, of two aunt's house.
(we were at Grandma's or at one of two aunts' houses)
good memories and kindness' given. (kindnesses)
I legy a trail of pee behind me. (left)
I was sent upstaires (upstairs)

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
    Thank you, H. I guess I forgot spell check. I sometimes do. Long writing is pretty rare for me. Blessings. Barbara. Xo
reply by lyenochka on 08-Sep-2022
    No worries. Just let me know if you don't want the spag alerts!
Comment from irishauthorme
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Hard to fathom all this, the hard times, the incest, and the neglect. I remember the parochial school being very strict, and the punishment, even for any tiny infraction, was harsh and painful.
I always thought the nuns that served at the school had a hatred of children (because they could never have any?), and a grudge against anyone getting any enjoyment out of life.
Good story!
irish

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
    LOL you nailed it. I called many of them frigid bitches. LOL Thank you, my friend. Blessings, Barbara. Xo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is a very sad story of your childhood and I am sorry that you and your siblings were abandoned like this. I hope your life improved as an adult and I shall tune in for part two. Life can be cruel. I hope your life is blessed now, love Dolly z

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
    Thank you, Dolly. It has gotten Blessed in the last almost year now. Blessings. Barbara. Xo
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 08-Sep-2022
    I am glad to hear it Barbara x
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
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This is a well-told, heartbreaking story about your family life. The text is large and easily read.
There are several grammar and spelling errors you need to correct.
Chocking her~choking her.
You need a period instead of a comma here~my mother, He was
This line needs an apostrophe on moms~ friends of moms.
Here the apostrophe needs to be between the d and s~ boyfriends'
black vail~ should be black veil
Mother never showed.~ need to add "up" to this line
grandmas~ needs an apostrophe between the a and s.
kindness'~ no apostrophe needed
Christs ~need an apostrophe between the t and s.
legy ~ needs to be changed to left.
upstaires~misspelled needs to be upstairs.
dark. alone,~remove all these commas
mash bag of fruit~I don't know what this is supposed to be, but it doesn't make sense.
fruit and candy,~ take out the and put a comma

I don't unerstand what the visual means. Probably a photo of two girls would be better. Type in your search box free photos of two little girls and download it to your computer. Then upload it here to use. You may put the word free in front of any photo type you are seeking and download the images to use. If you correct all the errors your story will be better.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
    Thank you for the help. This is my story. my life. My sister can write hers. Blessings. Barbara. Xo
reply by Sandra Nelms-Ludwig on 08-Sep-2022
    You are welcome. Meant to tell you I love your title "Life in the Big Shitty. It's quite clever.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
    Thank you. Xo
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
    Corrections made. Ty again. Xo
Comment from Regina Elliott
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LovnPeace, your sad story
is just like my late husband's
experiences at a Presbyterian
home for children. He and his
three sisters were there for
3 years. His Mom was selfish
and left them there, she then
took off. Then they were
with their grandmother for a
year before they had to be
put in foster care. His grandmother couldn't physically do it anymore. I think writing about one's
upbringing can possibly
help the author heal, or at
least relieve some held in
stress. Excellent writing.
Blessings to you. ~


 Comment Written 08-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022
    Thank you, Regiba. Blessings, Barbara. Xo