Eccentric Bird Lady
Hope Kilmer would understand what I did to his classic51 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
While this is a well-written poem, you didn't follow the directions of the prompt. You were to include the 4 lines from another poem exactly as written. You weren't to change the first poet's words to your words. The directions state: Include those 4 lines in your Rhyming poem (along with the additional lines needed as per rules). There is also too much space between the bottom of the visual and the poem's first line. A good poem with good visuals but not quite like the directions.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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While this is a well-written poem, you didn't follow the directions of the prompt. You were to include the 4 lines from another poem exactly as written. You weren't to change the first poet's words to your words. The directions state: Include those 4 lines in your Rhyming poem (along with the additional lines needed as per rules). There is also too much space between the bottom of the visual and the poem's first line. A good poem with good visuals but not quite like the directions.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Holy cow Sandra, I don't know what happened. Please look again in a bit because everything you said was not how I left it. I will be in touch. I followed the directions to a T. Thank you for making aware of this
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I hope it's not too late to change it. Despite you doing your own thing, It's still winning. That's the power of Debi! Everyone likes you, and you will win regardless of what you write. Hope you are feeling better.
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Ok, I think I know what happened. Tom or someone had to change the classification as it was in the story section. Something must have been bumped. As far as following the rules, could you explain, as I copied them exactly from the poem that I copied from the internet? Thanks Sandra!
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Oh Hon, I would feel terrible if that was true. If my writing isn't worthy of winning than I shouldn't even be here,
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You are a wonderful writer, but you are also beloved on this site. There's no denying either.
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But Sandra, did you look at the author's notes and compare my lines to the original? I followed them word to word.
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You were to write the 4 lines from the other poem exactly as the other poet wrote them in his or her poem. You took parts of the 4 lines from another's poem and changed his poem by putting you word into his writing. One whole stanza should be exactly as the other poet wrote it. The directions state: Include those 4 lines in your Rhyming poem (along with the additional lines needed to make it a full poem as per rules).
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I checked with the one who started this contest, as I took it to mean to take the four chosen lines and use them throughout the new poem. If you look in my author's notes, I had copied and pasted the original, put asterisks where I was using from the original and copied those four lines word to word, not using any of my own or changing them. If I find that I misunderstood the rules I apologize but I thought I followed it to a T.
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Hello my dear friend, I heard from Jan who started the contest, and to clarify the rules, the lines did not have to be in one stanza and were meant to be scattered throughout the poem, but also to be exactly as written from the original, which I did.
Comment from Terry Broxson
Debi, this is a very creative and fun poem you have written for this contest, good luck. It is good to see you writing again. I am wondering why this poem is listed on the "Story" side of the first page of FanStory instead of the "Poem" side. You might send a note to Tom. It could be a simple error. Excellent work. Terry.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Debi, this is a very creative and fun poem you have written for this contest, good luck. It is good to see you writing again. I am wondering why this poem is listed on the "Story" side of the first page of FanStory instead of the "Poem" side. You might send a note to Tom. It could be a simple error. Excellent work. Terry.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Thank you again Terry, as I am so delighted that you liked it. Obviously Trees was a classic, but I can't believe how many never heard of it before, Thanks again for the awesome review, comments and generous six stars. You are one of a kind my friend!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
As Ronnie Reagan said, "there you go again." Kelp in her hair? Haha. You make me laugh so I continuously tune in. I believe you checked all the boxes. I found the rules confusing, and passed. Seems all but five of us did.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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As Ronnie Reagan said, "there you go again." Kelp in her hair? Haha. You make me laugh so I continuously tune in. I believe you checked all the boxes. I found the rules confusing, and passed. Seems all but five of us did.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Aha, another thing we have in common is I loved Ronny. He was probably one of our greatest presidents, but I best not get into politics as I have ruffled a few feathers with one of my poems lately. Speaking of feathers, thanks for the awesome review on my blended poem. Since Trees was my favorite and the reason I got into poetry already at 8 years old, I was shocked how many had never heard of this classic. Of course Pam Respa who is an English teacher said she only just found out that Joyce Kilmer was a man. I've always known it, but since my mother and sister's names are Joyce, I thought it was strange too. OMGosh I really am a chatterbox! Sorry about that, but it's just so good to talk to you. Thanks again for the great review my special friend.
Comment from Fleedleflump
I think you hand lots of fun writing this - it certainly felt fun to read :-). You've done a hugely natural job of integrating the borrowed lines - such that I'd never have known they were borrowed if not for the contest. Beautifully written.
Mike
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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I think you hand lots of fun writing this - it certainly felt fun to read :-). You've done a hugely natural job of integrating the borrowed lines - such that I'd never have known they were borrowed if not for the contest. Beautifully written.
Mike
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Hi Mike, I did have lots of fun with it, but it was a far fetch from the classic Trees. And that is why I didn't want to even keep with the trees theme, so I decided to try a little humor. I am delighted my friend that you liked it. Thanks again for the awesome review and comments.
Comment from JLR
Quite a nice entry for the contest with all the rules properly met and solid rhymes - I trust you will do quite well in the contest. Thank you for sharing your obvious talent.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Quite a nice entry for the contest with all the rules properly met and solid rhymes - I trust you will do quite well in the contest. Thank you for sharing your obvious talent.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Thank you so very much JLR for the very kind review and comments. The last thing I ever expected to do was to make a humerus poem out of my favorite classic of all time. I do want to thank you also for your very kind compliment at the end of your review. That meant a lot to me my friend!
Comment from Wendy G
Very well done. A remarkable poem incorporating the special lines from a special poem. You did it with a light touch and some humour, and your presentation was also good. Best wishes for your entry!
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Very well done. A remarkable poem incorporating the special lines from a special poem. You did it with a light touch and some humour, and your presentation was also good. Best wishes for your entry!
Wendy
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Wendy, I thank you very much for such a lovely review and kind comments! I've loved the poem Trees since I first memorized it at the age of eight. So it felt only right to use it for my first attempt at a blended poem.
Thanks again my friend!
Comment from Bridge
I absolutely loved your poem. You paint a very clear picture
of Winnifred with your words. The poem flows very well and I especially loved the rhyming. All the best to you in the contest.
With regards
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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I absolutely loved your poem. You paint a very clear picture
of Winnifred with your words. The poem flows very well and I especially loved the rhyming. All the best to you in the contest.
With regards
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022
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Bridge, I thank you very much for such a lovely review and kind comments! I've loved the poem Trees since I first memorized it at the age of eight. So it felt only right to use it for my first attempt at a blended poem.
Thanks again my friend!
Comment from 1Dreamer
I think Trees was the first poem I ever heard when I was young, so it holds a special place especially the lines "A tree that looks at God all day and lifts her leafy arms to pray."
I love how inventive and humorous you made your piece. It's extremely clever! Best of luck to you and thank you for the smiles.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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I think Trees was the first poem I ever heard when I was young, so it holds a special place especially the lines "A tree that looks at God all day and lifts her leafy arms to pray."
I love how inventive and humorous you made your piece. It's extremely clever! Best of luck to you and thank you for the smiles.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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You my friend are like a ray of sunshine! Thank you first of all for sharing your first remembered experience of poetry with me, as it was mine too.
And I have it still memorized today. Trees was a very big part of my love for poetry. So I truly appreciate your lovely review and comments and the gracious gift of six stars. I cannot thank you enough my friend,
for all your kind words my blended poem!
Comment from Anne Johnston
Great entry for this contest, Debi. I love that poem "Trees" and you have done a good job using some of the lines from it and making a new poem. I hope this does well in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Great entry for this contest, Debi. I love that poem "Trees" and you have done a good job using some of the lines from it and making a new poem. I hope this does well in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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I just love you Anne. Thank you so much, first of all because you too love the poem Trees. This has been my favorite since I was 8 years old and probably the reason why I pursued writing. I can't believe how many have never heard of the classic. And so it wouldn't be an insult to the original, I stayed away from keeping the same theme of nature, as nobody can do it like Joyce Kilmer. So instead I turned the tables completely to make it humerus and I am so thrilled that you like it. Thank you for the awesome review and kind words and also the gracious six stars! And you are also one very gracious friend and person!
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You are welcome, Debi. thanks for all the kind words.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
Debi, this well written poem gave me a good laugh. I like the humor throughout. Have I told you I have a daughter named Debra, and we call her Deb's. I have a fondness for people named Deb___!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Debi, this well written poem gave me a good laugh. I like the humor throughout. Have I told you I have a daughter named Debra, and we call her Deb's. I have a fondness for people named Deb___!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2022
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Oh Verna, you just gave me the biggest smile right now. My husband just asked me where that big smile and laugh came from, and I just said from one of my beautiful friends here in my favorite place to go. My name is also Debra, as you probably already read about in my contest entry telling about me. I love that you call her Debs. I would have loved that nickname too, but hated to be called Debra because I knew when I heard Debra Lee, I knew I was in trouble. LOL! And I love that you reviewed this, because you of all people would understand what a classic this poem is. In fact it was what I memorized first and probably the reason for my love of poetry already at the age of 8 years old. I write about it in my post, "Why I Write." I wrote my first poem at that age and had worked so hard on it, but all the kids said that it had to been written by my mom, who also was a teacher. And when I told the teacher, she actually had the guts to say to me, well Debi you have to admit it looks pretty suspicious and she gave me an F. My mother was a wonderful woman, but she marched into that school and ripped the teacher from one end to the next and told her that she was why some people didn't belong teaching. (She did make sure there was nobody else in the old country school at the time) Because of that, I went on to take every English class I could, even in College and was always my favorite subject. So I have to say hats off to you my lovely friend, as I have no deeper respect than one who has given so many others a chance to be their best at writing. Thanks also for the awesome review of my changing of Trees. Since I wanted to change it enough to not even resemble that theme, it was fun to bring out the humor. Thanks again!
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My pleasure, Dear! I think you must be almost as sweet as my very own Deb.
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