Blessed Brother/ Part 7
Don't dare the Devil18 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great continuation of your novel, John.
I enjoyed reading it, though it was poignant. It
was interesting to have all the main characters
come together--very intense. Your words were
descriptive. I could see everything as I read. The
appearance of the transformation of Owen into
a devil, or the Devil, was handled well. I like this
as a cliff hanger and look forward to more at a later date.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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This is a great continuation of your novel, John.
I enjoyed reading it, though it was poignant. It
was interesting to have all the main characters
come together--very intense. Your words were
descriptive. I could see everything as I read. The
appearance of the transformation of Owen into
a devil, or the Devil, was handled well. I like this
as a cliff hanger and look forward to more at a later date.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Jan, for a great review, as usual. They are always appreciated and welcome.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
well written. Good work.
But... What happened to the gun and silencer?
He raised the .45cal silencer - this is not a threat since a silencer alone is harmless.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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well written. Good work.
But... What happened to the gun and silencer?
He raised the .45cal silencer - this is not a threat since a silencer alone is harmless.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Hello, Wayne. I would have never thought (.45cal silencer) a reportable critique, but now that you point it out to me, it makes sense. I thank you for your attentiveness to detail. You're always helpful. Best, JohnC.
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I'm helped in FanStory all the time.
(prob'ly in part by you!) lol
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LOL. Thank you, Wayne
Comment from nomi338
Whatever you choose to do in future, you must return to this compelling story. It is far to filled with possibilities to be abandoned. While I will continue to read and review other works, some by you even, there will remain a portion of my brain that will be seeking the next development in this story. You simply must turn your attention back to this story and complete it.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Whatever you choose to do in future, you must return to this compelling story. It is far to filled with possibilities to be abandoned. While I will continue to read and review other works, some by you even, there will remain a portion of my brain that will be seeking the next development in this story. You simply must turn your attention back to this story and complete it.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Thank you, nomi. I will be returning to this story quite soon, and I thank you for following it to the end/ END. Always a pleasure to
your reviews, my friend.
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I apologize if I came across in a demanding manner. You of course have free will to do whatever you choose to do. I would be very upset if you chose to abandon this project as I am heavily invested in it at this time.
Comment from kahpot
This chapter though the end (not) really had me engrossed, the descriptive words "guttural, un-earthy, down to ambient, and the (to me) twist, hope your blip-blip-recovers soon my friend, an excellent read****kahpot
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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This chapter though the end (not) really had me engrossed, the descriptive words "guttural, un-earthy, down to ambient, and the (to me) twist, hope your blip-blip-recovers soon my friend, an excellent read****kahpot
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Kahpot, Thank you so much for this gracious review and, of course, the Six Stars. You are an inspiration, my friend! Thanks again.
Comment from irishauthorme
Yes, you left us on a cliff-hanger, but I have the feeling that you will come back to this story, there is something compelling about the eternal battle between good and evil.
You painted a great word picture of the demon, either very high in Satan's echelon, or Satan himself?
Good inspiration bringing the spirit of Claudia back to confront the beast, otherwise, the situation was hopeless.
Will watch for your future efforts!
irish
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Yes, you left us on a cliff-hanger, but I have the feeling that you will come back to this story, there is something compelling about the eternal battle between good and evil.
You painted a great word picture of the demon, either very high in Satan's echelon, or Satan himself?
Good inspiration bringing the spirit of Claudia back to confront the beast, otherwise, the situation was hopeless.
Will watch for your future efforts!
irish
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Irish! I'm so happy you're following, and yes, I will return to this. It's been fun to write as I'm a bit DARK anyway, lol. Thank you again, my friend.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Say it ain't so, John. Don't drop this story at this point. It's not over. I can imagine more surreal chapters and posts to come. Keep it going, brother. Good job.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Say it ain't so, John. Don't drop this story at this point. It's not over. I can imagine more surreal chapters and posts to come. Keep it going, brother. Good job.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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It ain't so, my friend. I have some life shit to wrap up, and I will finish this. I've enjoyed writing it. Thank you, Tim. Btw your book is sensational! It is a goal of mine, but I'm not getting any younger. Hahhaha
Comment from Shirley McLain
Oh my, I am not even ready for a pause in this story. When can I expect the next chapter? You are a wonderful writer, my friend. Have a great afternoon. Shirley
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Oh my, I am not even ready for a pause in this story. When can I expect the next chapter? You are a wonderful writer, my friend. Have a great afternoon. Shirley
Comment Written 14-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Shirley, for the kind words. I'm taking a small break to wrap up some (life spills), and then I'm going to get right back in. Thank you, my friend.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I sure hope your membrane blip with quickly correct itself. I really like this story.
"I told you, uncle Everett - I told you this was possible." (capital 'U' needed on 'uncle')
So why don't you tell the boy you're not here to stay, sister Claudia." (capital 's' needed on 'sister')
Remi spoke up. "That's not true." (comma needed after 'up)
a placid white ora surrounded her. (aura???)
The creature's head cocked back, and an unearthly growl accompanied the deafening slams and bangs throughout the parsonage. Remi covered his ears. "Stop this! Leave us alone," he yelled. Remi charged the creature, and Everett lunged for Remi, but it was too late. The beast swung his arm, Remi was tossed over the railing, and the beast levitated him in mid-air. Remi's arms and legs flailed with trepidation as his eyes descended the forty-foot drop to the tiled floor below. A snarl shook the walls as Claudia's arm extended in the beast's direction, emitting a scorching white beam. The beast pulled his arm in to shield his face, and Remi's body tumbled a few feet before Claudia levitated him back over the railing. "I have you, son." Remi continued to flail until his feet touched the floor. (Two people speaking in one paragraph. You need a paragraph for each person speaking)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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I sure hope your membrane blip with quickly correct itself. I really like this story.
"I told you, uncle Everett - I told you this was possible." (capital 'U' needed on 'uncle')
So why don't you tell the boy you're not here to stay, sister Claudia." (capital 's' needed on 'sister')
Remi spoke up. "That's not true." (comma needed after 'up)
a placid white ora surrounded her. (aura???)
The creature's head cocked back, and an unearthly growl accompanied the deafening slams and bangs throughout the parsonage. Remi covered his ears. "Stop this! Leave us alone," he yelled. Remi charged the creature, and Everett lunged for Remi, but it was too late. The beast swung his arm, Remi was tossed over the railing, and the beast levitated him in mid-air. Remi's arms and legs flailed with trepidation as his eyes descended the forty-foot drop to the tiled floor below. A snarl shook the walls as Claudia's arm extended in the beast's direction, emitting a scorching white beam. The beast pulled his arm in to shield his face, and Remi's body tumbled a few feet before Claudia levitated him back over the railing. "I have you, son." Remi continued to flail until his feet touched the floor. (Two people speaking in one paragraph. You need a paragraph for each person speaking)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Thank you as always, Barbara, for your kind words and critique. I appreciate your time.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Many publishers say that the twist is the most important part of all stories; well, outside plot and characters. I was following right a long and enjoying every minute, but must admit, this ending didn't go where I thought. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Many publishers say that the twist is the most important part of all stories; well, outside plot and characters. I was following right a long and enjoying every minute, but must admit, this ending didn't go where I thought. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Hello, my friend, Ric. You are the last one I want to disappoint. But, this is not the end; instead, the season finale? Lol. You have to admit, and as you are one of my personal favorites at best, the hanger is unforgettable. btw congrats on your second place! I loved that story. Well deserved.
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Thanks, John, I definitely wasn't disappointed, but I'm glad to know there is more to come. LOL
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I truly hope you do come and finish this story!!!!! I'll be very upset with you, if you don't! I'm sure that has frightened the life out of you and inspired you to come back, Lol. This is such a great story, John, it needs a proper ending. There are too many loose ends that need tying up. And having read some of the other reviews, I'm not alone in thinking this.
I have enjoyed reading this story, it's so imaginative, and is very well written. Well done, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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I truly hope you do come and finish this story!!!!! I'll be very upset with you, if you don't! I'm sure that has frightened the life out of you and inspired you to come back, Lol. This is such a great story, John, it needs a proper ending. There are too many loose ends that need tying up. And having read some of the other reviews, I'm not alone in thinking this.
I have enjoyed reading this story, it's so imaginative, and is very well written. Well done, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 14-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Hi, Sandra, you have frightened me considerably, lol. I told Ric that this is a season finale and not the end, end. I have a few things personally to wrap up and then I'm back with the devil. :) I'm happy to have your support and friendship.
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Always! xx
