God Is For You
Contest Entry13 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 50 Word Flash you have penned for the contest. You used very good and heartfelt words with very beautiful imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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This is a very well written 50 Word Flash you have penned for the contest. You used very good and heartfelt words with very beautiful imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Heather Knight
What I like the most about your story is the format: it's been a great idea to use a dialogue. It's more original this way.Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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What I like the most about your story is the format: it's been a great idea to use a dialogue. It's more original this way.Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Bill Schott
This fifty-word flash fiction story, God is for You, has the required word count and finds Dad and Dan inone of their most important conversations.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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This fifty-word flash fiction story, God is for You, has the required word count and finds Dad and Dan inone of their most important conversations.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The more you keep in touch with God, the more aware of your needs. the majority of folks today don't pray, and if done they rarely listen for the answer.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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The more you keep in touch with God, the more aware of your needs. the majority of folks today don't pray, and if done they rarely listen for the answer.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from mermaids
A warm dialog between a father and his son that is faith based. You have a smooth flow of dialog that is realistic and the reader feels good reading your words. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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A warm dialog between a father and his son that is faith based. You have a smooth flow of dialog that is realistic and the reader feels good reading your words. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Ramona Agin
Very good Raul! God is for everyone! What a great short story. You did a terrific job of telling the story in 50 words and making the reader understand how God is there for you.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Very good Raul! God is for everyone! What a great short story. You did a terrific job of telling the story in 50 words and making the reader understand how God is there for you.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and story to go with it.
-I like the use of dialogue between father and son.
-The father patiently answers the son's questions.
-A very good concluding line that shows
Dan understands what his dad has explained.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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-Nice image and story to go with it.
-I like the use of dialogue between father and son.
-The father patiently answers the son's questions.
-A very good concluding line that shows
Dan understands what his dad has explained.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you! I hope I win.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a caring, positive spiritual commentary, explaining God's love to children. Just one minor point. All your verbs are in the past tense, so I think it should be 'smiled' at the end. Kate xx
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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This is a caring, positive spiritual commentary, explaining God's love to children. Just one minor point. All your verbs are in the past tense, so I think it should be 'smiled' at the end. Kate xx
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you! I did what you suggested.
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your story of reassurance about the Lord's love which the father was able to convey to the son. Best wishes in the contest!
Suggestions:
"How do I know if He is?" Dan stated. (asked) it's a question not a statement.
"Then God cares for me," Dan asked. (me?) You don't even have to say "Dan asked" again because the dialogue is between just the two people.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Enjoyed your story of reassurance about the Lord's love which the father was able to convey to the son. Best wishes in the contest!
Suggestions:
"How do I know if He is?" Dan stated. (asked) it's a question not a statement.
"Then God cares for me," Dan asked. (me?) You don't even have to say "Dan asked" again because the dialogue is between just the two people.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you! I fixed it.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
This is a great story in a few words. And the picture of the hand's are great. This would be encouraging for anyone. The message speaks loud and clear. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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This is a great story in a few words. And the picture of the hand's are great. This would be encouraging for anyone. The message speaks loud and clear. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
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You are welcome.
