Blessed Brother/ Part 6
An unexpected turn21 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Very compelling, and you left at a significant moment. I assume the click click of the gun was empty chambers - so there is some hope still. Remi appears to have been brainwashed. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Wendy
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Very compelling, and you left at a significant moment. I assume the click click of the gun was empty chambers - so there is some hope still. Remi appears to have been brainwashed. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Wendy, for a great review. I always appreciate your comments.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, someone certainly got to Remi, right? You did a great
job, John. I was engaged from start to finish. Everything fir
into lace. Owen has brainwashed Remi. Remi can't see the truth
because of it. You ended on a high note. It will be interesting
to see how all this plays out.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
"Remi, common, this is ridiculous!" --> common should be c'mon
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Well, someone certainly got to Remi, right? You did a great
job, John. I was engaged from start to finish. Everything fir
into lace. Owen has brainwashed Remi. Remi can't see the truth
because of it. You ended on a high note. It will be interesting
to see how all this plays out.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
"Remi, common, this is ridiculous!" --> common should be c'mon
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Jan, for a great review and stars. They are always appreciated!
Comment from lyenochka
So the gun isn't even loaded? That could make things interesting for all. I would hope that Everett and Remi could tie up old Owen and call the police after all that. Great scene and I'm sure Everett and Remi need to have some heart-to-heart conversations now.
"Remi, common, this is ridiculous!" (come on, or c'mon)
Watch your mouth, Father!" (open quotes needed)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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So the gun isn't even loaded? That could make things interesting for all. I would hope that Everett and Remi could tie up old Owen and call the police after all that. Great scene and I'm sure Everett and Remi need to have some heart-to-heart conversations now.
"Remi, common, this is ridiculous!" (come on, or c'mon)
Watch your mouth, Father!" (open quotes needed)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Helen, for the great review and critiques. Thank you for following and reading it. It means alot.
Comment from royowen
This is a great episode John, lots of emotion here, the playing of them like the chess moves on a chess board, but Everett is a cool one, and Owen possesses the pride of the devil, which is always the weak spot on an Evil man, they think they're strong, but they are controlled. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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This is a great episode John, lots of emotion here, the playing of them like the chess moves on a chess board, but Everett is a cool one, and Owen possesses the pride of the devil, which is always the weak spot on an Evil man, they think they're strong, but they are controlled. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Roy, for a great review. It's always nice to hear from you.
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Most welcome
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Most welcome
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I really enjoyed reading this addition to the story and can't wait for more. You left us with an interesting hook. Exactly who got shot if anybody??
Remi paused for a second. I'll... I'll hide her; no one would know she even existed except me!" (missing beginning quotation marks in front of 'I'll')
Everett turned and looked up at Owen. What's your plan, Owen? You heard him. None of what he's saying makes any sense." (missing beginning quotation marks in front of 'What')
Owen's smug expression changed. Watch your mouth, Father!" missing beginning quotation marks in front of 'Watch')
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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I really enjoyed reading this addition to the story and can't wait for more. You left us with an interesting hook. Exactly who got shot if anybody??
Remi paused for a second. I'll... I'll hide her; no one would know she even existed except me!" (missing beginning quotation marks in front of 'I'll')
Everett turned and looked up at Owen. What's your plan, Owen? You heard him. None of what he's saying makes any sense." (missing beginning quotation marks in front of 'What')
Owen's smug expression changed. Watch your mouth, Father!" missing beginning quotation marks in front of 'Watch')
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Barbara. You are always helpful. I'm happy you enjoyed this part. I think I did a bit better with punctuating my dialogue.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Glad you've got technical things under control again. We all seem to be having gremlins at the moment. I lost the internet for the whole morning today (on my computer only). Very distressing. I enjoyed this story very much, especially how you brought Remi to accept the truth of things. Neatly done. Kate xx
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Glad you've got technical things under control again. We all seem to be having gremlins at the moment. I lost the internet for the whole morning today (on my computer only). Very distressing. I enjoyed this story very much, especially how you brought Remi to accept the truth of things. Neatly done. Kate xx
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Kate! I'm happy you enjoyed it and sorry about your gremlin this morning. When it rains it pours!
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Grreat continuation of the story with quite a few of twists involved in the plot and related to the medallion. I appears that Remi now realizes that Owen has betrayed him. click....click.....click. We will see what that means next time.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Grreat continuation of the story with quite a few of twists involved in the plot and related to the medallion. I appears that Remi now realizes that Owen has betrayed him. click....click.....click. We will see what that means next time.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Tim, for a great review. I appreciate your words and am happy you're enjoying the read. Thanks for staying with it! Congrats on the poetry of the month. Not surprising!
Comment from karenina
Glad your computer issues are resolved. I've been waiting patiently for this next chapter, and you have not disappointed!
The conflict has come to a head--quite literally as Everett faces down a "45" wielded by Remi.
Love the question "What does the devil do with a religious artifact?"
Indeed! Plans need to reshuffle, evil muddles the mind. Your ending is the perfect "click" to have me rushing back!
I'm out of sixes for the week, or you'd have them!
Karenina
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Glad your computer issues are resolved. I've been waiting patiently for this next chapter, and you have not disappointed!
The conflict has come to a head--quite literally as Everett faces down a "45" wielded by Remi.
Love the question "What does the devil do with a religious artifact?"
Indeed! Plans need to reshuffle, evil muddles the mind. Your ending is the perfect "click" to have me rushing back!
I'm out of sixes for the week, or you'd have them!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you, my friend, Karenina! Yes, I'm happy I have this computer thing resolved as well. Thank you for another great review and honorable mention of the SIX. I always look forward to hearing from you.
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Thanks, love your writing.
(As you might have guessed!)
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LOL, You da best!!
Comment from Terry Broxson
John, you get my last sixer, good job! I did not see all of that coming in this part, so I will await the last installment. It will be interesting to see if it sets up for a sequel. Great work. Terry.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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John, you get my last sixer, good job! I did not see all of that coming in this part, so I will await the last installment. It will be interesting to see if it sets up for a sequel. Great work. Terry.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Terry, for your last SIXER. I always end up giving them back to you for one of your pieces, anyway, lol. Thank you again, my friend!
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is an interesting chapter, John, with great drama, and another cliff-hanger. There are some issues with paragraph spacing in the last part, and then the whole thing is duplicated for some reason.
One little typo here: (")What's your plan, Owen? You heard him. None of what he's saying makes any sense."
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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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This is an interesting chapter, John, with great drama, and another cliff-hanger. There are some issues with paragraph spacing in the last part, and then the whole thing is duplicated for some reason.
One little typo here: (")What's your plan, Owen? You heard him. None of what he's saying makes any sense."
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Hi, Judy, yes, thank you. I went in and made those changes. I'm getting used to a new computer, lol. It's starting to fall into place, but I'm using GDoc now, so it's a bit different. Thanks for the great review, my friend.
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You?re most welcome, John.
