Approaching Storms
a Kyrielle poetic form46 total reviews
Comment from E. Denison
I love a good storm poem, Sugarray77, and this one is very strong. I think the kryielle form is a very good choice for the topic and your selection for a repeated line did well to build anticipation and serve as a kind of thesis for your work. Clear rhymes with an easy flow throughout, and beautiful paired imagery make this a great read. Out of curiosity, where did you source your image - it is fantastic! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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I love a good storm poem, Sugarray77, and this one is very strong. I think the kryielle form is a very good choice for the topic and your selection for a repeated line did well to build anticipation and serve as a kind of thesis for your work. Clear rhymes with an easy flow throughout, and beautiful paired imagery make this a great read. Out of curiosity, where did you source your image - it is fantastic! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much for the wonderful review. I am delighted you liked it!!!
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
I can't begin to tell you how much I like this one. I generally don't like the rigidity of Kyrielles, but your word choices make it interesting. Marauding storms and sporadic spatters are just two examples of what I am talking about.
You paint a vivid picture in my mind. That photo helps as well.
Winner!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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I can't begin to tell you how much I like this one. I generally don't like the rigidity of Kyrielles, but your word choices make it interesting. Marauding storms and sporadic spatters are just two examples of what I am talking about.
You paint a vivid picture in my mind. That photo helps as well.
Winner!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Hi Debbie. Thank yo for your wonderful words of encouragement about this Kyrielle. I had hoped it would relay the tension and build up of a storm. So appreciate your comments!! Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from JLR
Dear Mellissa, your work just keeps on giving and giving! I truly read this and was transported to my grandparents ranch with the wrap around porch and rocking in thier old rock, watching the storms develop in the western sky. Powerful work here, friend!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Dear Mellissa, your work just keeps on giving and giving! I truly read this and was transported to my grandparents ranch with the wrap around porch and rocking in thier old rock, watching the storms develop in the western sky. Powerful work here, friend!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Hello dear Jim. Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I hoped to share the tension that comes with an approaching storm. So glad you liked this Kyrielle!! Hugs.
Melissa
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, Melissa!
Ah! What an exceptionally well-crafted Kyrielle and one of your finest poetic offerings!
I appreciate everything about your poem: its form, visual artistry and message!
(And how I love storms!)
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Good morning, Melissa!
Ah! What an exceptionally well-crafted Kyrielle and one of your finest poetic offerings!
I appreciate everything about your poem: its form, visual artistry and message!
(And how I love storms!)
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Hey there Diane... sorry for the late note of thanks... I taught a cooking class yesterday to the young women of our church. It was so fun!! Our theme was summer salads and I made Paula Deen's Banana pudding ~ I highly recommend it for a summer dessert. I am delighted you liked the Kyrielle!! I share a love of storms with you too. :). Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent poem with a very well chosen image to support your vivid words. You have expressed both the anticipation and the arrival of the storm very accurately and strongly. I can almost smell the rain and hear it, breaking the eerie silence. Sorry, no sixes left.
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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An excellent poem with a very well chosen image to support your vivid words. You have expressed both the anticipation and the arrival of the storm very accurately and strongly. I can almost smell the rain and hear it, breaking the eerie silence. Sorry, no sixes left.
Wendy
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Hi there, Wendy. Thanks so much for the lovely review and great comments. I so appreciate your take on this kyrielle. :)
Melissa
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
I do not like to hear thunder or see lightening. They are dangerous. I pray when it storms. And those winds are harsh. I worry about tree limbs falling on the house. Or falling on electric wiring. That picture you have on here shows a wicked sky. Full of Nimbus clouds. I would probably have a heart attack seeing this sky. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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I do not like to hear thunder or see lightening. They are dangerous. I pray when it storms. And those winds are harsh. I worry about tree limbs falling on the house. Or falling on electric wiring. That picture you have on here shows a wicked sky. Full of Nimbus clouds. I would probably have a heart attack seeing this sky. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Oh Carolyn, I'm sorry that this poem and photo upset you. You are right that the sky looks so ominous, but part of my intent was to show the tension of the sounds of an approaching storm. Thanks for the review!
Melissa
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I am okay, it is my hang up. You are welcome. Have a great weekend. You did a great job.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well done Melissa! You made me want to run for cover.
That is the most amanous cloud I have ever seen. I saw one like that December 18, 1957 when a Tornado hit my home town and did a lot of damage. You earned my last six, Dear. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Well done Melissa! You made me want to run for cover.
That is the most amanous cloud I have ever seen. I saw one like that December 18, 1957 when a Tornado hit my home town and did a lot of damage. You earned my last six, Dear. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Hello, dear Nancy. Thank you for the lovely rating, but I'm sooo sorry that you have seen a similar sky in your lifetime... whew, that storm must have been awful. I really appreciate your review.
Melissa
Comment from C.A.Currie
Very well done! I love this - it flowed effortlessly, was perfectly metered, and was a complete story! Kudos to you my friend!
Thanks for sharing!
Hugs & Sunshine from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Very well done! I love this - it flowed effortlessly, was perfectly metered, and was a complete story! Kudos to you my friend!
Thanks for sharing!
Hugs & Sunshine from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Hi Christine!! Thanks so much for this wonderful rating. I really appreciate your thoughts on this kyrielle!
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
That is an ominous photograph. The advancing cloud looks like some creature with massive paws.
Your Kyrielle poetic is written with terrific metre and rhyme, and your imagery brings the entire to scene to 3D life.
Enjoyed this very much. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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That is an ominous photograph. The advancing cloud looks like some creature with massive paws.
Your Kyrielle poetic is written with terrific metre and rhyme, and your imagery brings the entire to scene to 3D life.
Enjoyed this very much. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much Gloria!! I really appreciate it. I always value your take on things. I enjoyed pulling out the form and dusting it off :). Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from Irish Rain
I just SO love this.
I love the form, but most especially,
the subject matter.
And you've written this so beautifully.
Very accurate descriptions.
Perfect!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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I just SO love this.
I love the form, but most especially,
the subject matter.
And you've written this so beautifully.
Very accurate descriptions.
Perfect!
Blessings...
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Hi Judy! Thank you, my friend, for your wonderful comments on this one. I enjoy using the kyrielle form and thought I would dust it off. :). Hugs!
Melissa
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It's just beautiful, have a lovely Sunday!!
