Blessed Brother/Part3
Reconciliations23 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great continuation of your story, John.
You put readers right there with all the action.
I like the scenes with the nurse in the hospital.
I believe there's more to it which may be added
in later chapters. You give readers much to think
about in their own lives regarding religion, death,
and forgiveness. This chapter has a haunting
appeal/factor, though in a good way. The details
added great interest and moved the story along well.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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This is a great continuation of your story, John.
You put readers right there with all the action.
I like the scenes with the nurse in the hospital.
I believe there's more to it which may be added
in later chapters. You give readers much to think
about in their own lives regarding religion, death,
and forgiveness. This chapter has a haunting
appeal/factor, though in a good way. The details
added great interest and moved the story along well.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your review, Jan. I'm happy you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from Earl Corp
You have a lot going on here. I found the part about death-related sensory experiences. Since this a continuing thing a cast of characters in your author's notes would be helpful.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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You have a lot going on here. I found the part about death-related sensory experiences. Since this a continuing thing a cast of characters in your author's notes would be helpful.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Earl, that is a great idea. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
This is one of those stories that if it doesn't grab you by the Kahunas, or twist your heart, you don't have either. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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This is one of those stories that if it doesn't grab you by the Kahunas, or twist your heart, you don't have either. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for the SIX and the great review. You are the best!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was excellent. Now Everett has to find out the truth of what happened all those years ago. It's not fair on Thaddeus, or Everett. He has to know that his brother was a good man, not the man their sister said he was. That she died not revealing the truth, was awful. I do hope the medallion will help in his search. Well done, I can't wait to find out what happens next. :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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That was excellent. Now Everett has to find out the truth of what happened all those years ago. It's not fair on Thaddeus, or Everett. He has to know that his brother was a good man, not the man their sister said he was. That she died not revealing the truth, was awful. I do hope the medallion will help in his search. Well done, I can't wait to find out what happens next. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Sandra, for the great review. I may have to fold in a bit of fantasy. :)
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I love fantasy, I use it a lot!! xx
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Yes, I hope I can use it as well as you do. (SHRUG) We shall see. This chapter writing is fairly new to me. Ahhhh!
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If it's new to you, you're doing a great job. This story is brilliant. I'm enjoying it immensely. xx
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Thank you, Sandra. That means a lot to me.
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I mean, my love is short story writing. I feel doing this, I will get help from you guys, so I'm not too worried. I have to learn to keep my thoughts in order, lol. That's what amazes me about novel writing.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I have to say this is the best chapter so far. The dialogue and the story is growing more interesting and I am looking forward to reading more.
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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I have to say this is the best chapter so far. The dialogue and the story is growing more interesting and I am looking forward to reading more.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Mary. I'm pleased you returned to read, and I'm happy you liked this chapter. I'm going to work hard to keep the momentum going. Thank you again for reading.
Comment from Cristine22
I like Everett. He's a really interesting character. You did well giving the information in an interesting way, slowly letting it unfold. I think the nurse could do with a bit more characterization. Her voice wasn't all that different from Everett's, and she felt a little like she was there just as a sounding board. Giving her a little more personality would go a long way in making this scene feel more real. Overall, great job! I enjoyed reading this, and I'm excited for the next installment!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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I like Everett. He's a really interesting character. You did well giving the information in an interesting way, slowly letting it unfold. I think the nurse could do with a bit more characterization. Her voice wasn't all that different from Everett's, and she felt a little like she was there just as a sounding board. Giving her a little more personality would go a long way in making this scene feel more real. Overall, great job! I enjoyed reading this, and I'm excited for the next installment!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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I agree, Cristine. I will revisit that dialogue. Thank you for your kind words and critique. It was helpful.
Comment from Terry Broxson
John, this is a good continuation of the story, BUT, you need to add at the bottom, to be continued...Because if it is not continued you will have a revolt on your hands! Good work...so far! Terry.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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John, this is a good continuation of the story, BUT, you need to add at the bottom, to be continued...Because if it is not continued you will have a revolt on your hands! Good work...so far! Terry.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Oops! Thank you, Terry
Comment from royowen
I love this story and the medallion with mystical powers. Sounds a little like the ark of the covenant, in the Old Testament. I'll be fascinated to see how this story progresses John, but there was a miracle in a sense, with the reconciliation of Thaddeus and his deceased adoptive sister Claudia, beautifully written John, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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I love this story and the medallion with mystical powers. Sounds a little like the ark of the covenant, in the Old Testament. I'll be fascinated to see how this story progresses John, but there was a miracle in a sense, with the reconciliation of Thaddeus and his deceased adoptive sister Claudia, beautifully written John, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Roy! I took your advice and remained BOLD.
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Excellent job John
Comment from Fleedleflump
This was an engaging and interesting read. Your dialogue is excellent and you give just enough description to help the reader picture the scene. The ending leaves enough to make me want to read more without feeling contrived. I very much enjoyed.
Mike
Spag note:
'It has a background I'd rather not divulge for personal reasons,' - missing speech marks from the start.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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This was an engaging and interesting read. Your dialogue is excellent and you give just enough description to help the reader picture the scene. The ending leaves enough to make me want to read more without feeling contrived. I very much enjoyed.
Mike
Spag note:
'It has a background I'd rather not divulge for personal reasons,' - missing speech marks from the start.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Thanks for reading and reviewing, Mike. Your comments mean a lot. Drop back in for part 4 if you get time.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, that it's a very touching story and sometimes I guess on the deathbed we get a chance to reconciliate with the ones that thought we hurt them in the part. Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Wow, that it's a very touching story and sometimes I guess on the deathbed we get a chance to reconciliate with the ones that thought we hurt them in the part. Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Iza, for reading and reviewing. I'm happy you enjoyed it.
