No No No No No
Many thanks to Kenzie, our granddaughter for her drawing49 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, clear, familiar, and creative.
I found this poem having a great message. I feel we know what
deep within or someone says "no no no". Thank you for the author's
notes - they speak volumes! The artwork is awesome and compliments
these words. Great poem!
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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The author's words are engaging, clear, familiar, and creative.
I found this poem having a great message. I feel we know what
deep within or someone says "no no no". Thank you for the author's
notes - they speak volumes! The artwork is awesome and compliments
these words. Great poem!
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Oh Harmony, thank you so very much! I can't tell you what that means to me. I love having you and so many Christian authors in such a fellowship of Love for our Lord. I thank you for your very generous six stars and such a lovely review. You are so very sweet, and your gracious review is so appreciated.
Comment from Janet Foor
Some good advice in this 'somewhat fictional' Temptation Poem. I enjoyed reading and could hear my mother and myself repeat that line. No, no, no, no, and no. (smile)
Nice touch to bring the message of accepting our Savior which is the real message after all.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Some good advice in this 'somewhat fictional' Temptation Poem. I enjoyed reading and could hear my mother and myself repeat that line. No, no, no, no, and no. (smile)
Nice touch to bring the message of accepting our Savior which is the real message after all.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thanks so much Janet, as you are always so gracious and generous with your complements. I love the art that Kenzie did, because it shows how satan can make evil look so beautiful like a flower, but its still the same evil of the symbolism of the snake. He cannot fool God, and I know that by asking Him daily to keep me surrounded by His love, to lead me daily, and let me a blessing to everyone I am in contact with, He led me here, where I am being blessed with you and so many other Christian authors. Oh what a Wonderful God that we serve, that he would turn the blessing around. Thank you again my friend!
Comment from juliaSjames
The poem is great. You don't need the author notes. It's more effective without. Remember that unless a poem is designated biographical, the author is not necessarily the narrator.
But of course the bit about the author notes is just my personal opinion. Your choice.
I believe this will do well in the contest. It deserves to place high.
Good luck
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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The poem is great. You don't need the author notes. It's more effective without. Remember that unless a poem is designated biographical, the author is not necessarily the narrator.
But of course the bit about the author notes is just my personal opinion. Your choice.
I believe this will do well in the contest. It deserves to place high.
Good luck
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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I truly appreciate your kind review and words. I wondered about whether or not to add the authors notes, as my conscience was eating at me about my last stanza. A little racy for me, but I did want to add a little humor..
Julia,, thank you and I think I will go in and edit that. Thank you for your helpful advice and lovely comments!
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I think the final stanza and the narrator's response is perfect for a prompt about "Temptation".
Best of luck!
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Thank you again, my friend!
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Haha, sure you haven't had such a dream! It's a perk (or maybe a curse) of being human. But it's what you do, not what you dream that matters. And writing this poem was really a good idea! It's cute, catchy, and gets your point across. Nice!
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Haha, sure you haven't had such a dream! It's a perk (or maybe a curse) of being human. But it's what you do, not what you dream that matters. And writing this poem was really a good idea! It's cute, catchy, and gets your point across. Nice!
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Sam, you crack me up! Lol, I have, but it was about my husband! Thank you again for your very kind review and lovely comments!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Temptation poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very neat imagery from the drawing you used. Very talented person drew this. Great testimony in your comments. love and blessings, Teri
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This is a very well written Temptation poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very neat imagery from the drawing you used. Very talented person drew this. Great testimony in your comments. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you Teri and I will certainly pass on your lovely comments to my granddaughter, Kenzie about her art. I appreciate your kindness so very much! Thank you again my friend!
Comment from Raul1
This poem is flat out funny and hilarious. It made me laugh at the end. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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This poem is flat out funny and hilarious. It made me laugh at the end. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you so much Raul for your very lovely review and comments,
And thank you so much for catching the humor at the end. You are awesome, and thank you again my friend!
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow poet a good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your Temptation Poem contest entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Hello fellow poet a good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your Temptation Poem contest entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you my friend for your lovely review and comments.
It's always nice to see that handsome picture of you looking back, with your bidding a good day and well wishes.and such a gentleman! .....................
Oh no no no no no!!! Hahahaha!!
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written poem fir temptation entry. It has a great flow and rhyme.
I could not fight temptation; then I start to wake up slow
Thankfully it was just a dream, but still a no No NO!"good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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This is a nicely written poem fir temptation entry. It has a great flow and rhyme.
I could not fight temptation; then I start to wake up slow
Thankfully it was just a dream, but still a no No NO!"good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Thank you Joanne I wanted to get a message out there without it being so serious. That's why I added that little risqué part at the end, to add some humor as well. After this contest is done, I would like to become a fan, so it reminds me to read more of the people who have been so great in reviewing mine. Yet I have to wait until it ends later today. Lol, that little voice has been telling me yes yes yes about doing more more more of that. Thanks for the great review my friend, as I truly appreciate it
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Your very welcome 🙂
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem shows a person with a strong moral concience. Some time in the future this person with say yes to love and what it brings. This person also spreads the wisdom of strong morals.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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This poem shows a person with a strong moral concience. Some time in the future this person with say yes to love and what it brings. This person also spreads the wisdom of strong morals.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thanks. Joan, I must admit, there were times I ignored that little voice, but it only brought heartache. However after being born again, they disappeared. And I've never had that kind of dream about anyone except my husband, but put it in there for a little humor. Thanks for your lovey review and your kind comments regarding my mostly fictional poem w a message of listening to our conscience!
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You are most kindly welcome.
Joan
Comment from Wendy G
This is very clever, tracing the types of temptation from childhood, through adolescence and into adulthood, and at each point being given the strength to resist. Well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
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This is very clever, tracing the types of temptation from childhood, through adolescence and into adulthood, and at each point being given the strength to resist. Well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thanks. Wendy , I must admit, there were times I ignored that little voice, but it only brought heartache. However after being born again, they disappeared. And I've never had that kind of dream about anyone except my husband, but put it in there for a little humor. Thanks for your lovey review and your kind comments regarding my mostly fictional poem w a message of listening to our conscience!
